[@WanderingDragon]

Your character looks great!

I especially like how you've described your magic and how their mana flows through their body. I should probably emphasize how mana veins affect magic but so far everyone's doing really cool stuff >:D 

I just have a few questions, your character is a half-elf and 20 would most likely be like elven stages of infancy or childhood, but I'm not too certain since your character is HALF HALF elf-- ashdahdas, either way, there's not BIG problems here it's just a slight nitpick. 

Other than that your character is good to go and can be thrown into the Character Bin!!! >:D

Another note-- 

Your character spells "Arcane Sense" is just a flavored Arcane Sense that every mage knows so if you want to replace that ability-- that's totally fine!