[quote=@Stormflyx] [b]I've been reading intro posts, part II, Jurassic Boogaloo[/b] [@Lord Wraith] So you really woke up and decided to write a novel, huh? Glad you did, really enjoyed every word of it. Cece feels very fleshed out already, and the way you've written her feels to me like you tick the box of having a good handle on your character - which can honestly be quite hard for at least a post or two, in my opinion. You've shown her heart really well, and in a way that sort of plays on our expectations - both of influencers and of "popular type" girls as well. Both big ticks from me. I can really see her already as how you intend her to be. Shout out to this line as well - For a post with a whole lot of words, those simple sentences say so much. Really keen to see more Cece, she's an interesting character for sure in a cast that seems to already have the entire rainbow of personalities. Wonderful stuff my dude, thank you for this flex.[/quote] [s]Don't get too excited, I'll probably fumble the ball with my next post.[/s] Honestly, I had a lot of cobwebs to clean out and a lot of rust to shake off. So I really appreciate the kind words. Cece started out a very one-dimensional character but the more I wrote, for her sheet, her relationships and then that post, the more I could see her coming to life and realizing what she could be. I didn't want her to be vapid, but I wanted her to appear that way. I want her to have struggles of identity, doubt, anxiety but I also want to make sure her faith and character shine through and in a genuine way, not in a way that Christians are typically portrayed in popular culture. She's going to face the same sort of struggles that any person of faith deals with, even more so given exactly what she has to deal with in this universe. But again, thank you so much. I'm really looking forward to seeing how you develop Eilidh. You've chosen a very unique character for a roleplay such as this. Eilidh doesn't have the flashiest of powers, nor are they overtly offensive. To top that off, you've given her a very real handicap. one that you've portrayed sensitively and as Sep also noted, very well thought out. Your post doesn't read like someone describing objects or their surroundings through sight. Where I described the sunset with colours, you've used descriptors of texture and shape to fill out the world as Eilidh perceives it. You definitely proved in your post that you don't need to write a novel to establish your character and without writing a lot, you've said a lot about Eilidh and her character.