[@Bright_Ops] for Aethel
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Aside from some grammatical errors such as the constant use of ellipsis,at first glance we hold the issue with the aspect as it is since it does not state any of the limits of mana are, what they can be used to achieve. Our concern over it is largely that you go into a lot of detail about what magic might be considered but not what it really is, what it can do, or how the mortal might be able to use it. Next you go on to state that magic cannot exist without mana, which we had, I believe, discussed would step on the toes of those who wish to do magic without having to go through this monopolized mana. In our eyes, a god of magic should state [b]exactly[/b] how it works but rather show how it [b]can[/b] be used. Rework it more, give us a tangible feel as this is an important Aspect.

Next, moving onto Aethel’s personality. It comes across at points as a bit contradictory as you refer to her as a trickster but also wholly literal and will follow instruction, deals, and the likes to the letter. It frankly does not make much sense as a trickster is someone who, while yes can operate within a ruleset, is someone who is well versed at BENDING those rules or finding loopholes to exploit. Next you allude to her having a darker nature, that should be elaborated upon as that could mean a wide variety of things, does it include murder? Pranks? The general subjugation of an entire species? 

I do like, however, that Aethel cannot ever get good at playing instruments. I find it funny.

Due to the aspect, the sheet is currently rejected. Once you rework it, we will see about including Aethel, as I do like your concept with her and I know you can make it work! 




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[@Kho] for [s]The Dancing Queen[/s] Rosalind
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SHE IS THE DANCING QUEEN, YOUNG AND SWEET~

Kho, you never fail to give an interesting god in Divinus games past. The Aspect of Dance is one that is INCREDIBLY narrow and had it been anyone other than you, we would probably have not allowed it. Yet, here you are, giving us this 5 paragraph explanation that explains in depth of what Dance is and how Rosalind is going to use it. I, personally, cannot stress enough how great it is to see this and I know we can expect to see some great stories come from it.She is not just the Goddess of Dance, but you encapsulate that she IS dance but she is afraid to truly give in! 

Wholly accepted as it is.
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[@ActRaiserTheReturned] for Deimos
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Act you, like Kho, are a true veteran of Divinus. 

And you start with a modern man in a suit for a ‘normal form’ which caused Cyclone to start frothing at the mouth once more. You have caused no less than five deaths to occur before his tranquilizers kicked in.

Yet, with Deimos we grow weary for he is a God of Domination. When we see gods that are meant to be pure evil, that implies that they cannot and will only act out of their own self interest with disregard to everyone else which would be fine if it were not for the fact that being such an evil god requires much nuance. In your Aspect you do not attempt to hide the fact of how much evil Deimos will bring into the world, wanting little more to enslave and dominate all of mortal kind and even the gods. I do see potential in it, however, as it is, it just reads as a bit cartoonishly evil. 

This is also supported by the fact that his personality points to how cruel and depraved he is as the self-thought ‘perfect’ being. There is nothing but an evil god, not in the same manner, almost in the same vein as Molag Bal from the Elder Scrolls. This will no doubt cause much clashing with other gods and it almost seems as if he will just be the god who sparks wars for his own benefits only to get smacked back down into place by a coalition of gods or even the big Monarch himself. We have had gods who are inherently evil in Divinus before, I played one, Vakk, the God of Speech (Deception). While he was exceptionally fun to play at first, he became boring very quickly. I caution you against playing an outwardly evil god nor do I want such a god to be present, which again as I speak from experience, makes for drab and boring storytelling over time. 

For the time being, Deimos is rejected. Once he is revamped to be less of an opposing force to literally just about every other god, we can come back to see him. 
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