[@Lord Zee] for Chailiss
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You have a very well-written character sheet here, you took a relatively narrow Aspect and you managed to make something of it, which is something we amongst the GMs do love to see. You make some great use of the imagery and metaphors of the cold that give credit to you as a writer. Of course, we must always caution people with narrow aspects such as these though, we do hope that you have enough ideas of things to do brewing in that brain of yours to assuage our concerns of you making a tundra or two and falling out. 

The personality does give us a little concern for Chailiss is described as a bit of a reclusive god, one that may not have reason to come out of his winter filled fun lands. We do not wish to see anyone become self-isolating but we know you tend to thrive on interaction and may have plans to counteract this. That said, of course, these are just the concerns we see with the sheet itself and I know you won’t just abandon the Winter Lord to sit on a Frozen Throne like Arthas in Warcraft. 

The true form is quite thematic and evocative, I certainly enjoy it.

Sheet is accepted without much other word.

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[@Oraculum] for Iqelis

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Well you cheated and wrote your CS alongside Cyclone so you already appeased him without incurring my own wrath.

My concern is the Doom seems to be an Aspect that comes across as just narrow enough that it might not have a whole lot going on, we may just see the same things going on with it. A lot of it seems to be coinciding with it just bringing about the end of things, though I do like how you have described it. You have described it in a rather chilling fashion as Doom is the end of things, no matter which way that end comes it happens. Props to you on that one.

The persona is exceptionally well-written and it gives me a good idea as to what the Monarch of All will be dealing with as this arrogant upstart god claims that everything, including Him, will end. He is nihilistically arrogant and that offers a flavor that is only enhanced with him not favoring neither mortals nor the divine. 

Your sheet is accepted. This review may be brief but that is legitimately because I had little fault to actually find. Good job.

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[@WrongEndoftheRainbow] for Epsilon

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The patent Knowledge god.

And a sheet that’s very much on the minimalist side, and I had similar concerns with Palus.

The biggest concern we have with Epsilon is that this narrow aspect he may not have an incredible amount to do, not enough plans to follow through on. But you have assuaged my doubts for the time being as Frettz has brought some of your ideas to our attention. That said, I think that the Aspect needs to be expanded on a bit more, not saying you haven’t given us plenty of ideas as to exactly how you wish to use this Aspect, but I think it needs a good bit of meat on the bare bones of it. It is just that what is had now is a bit narrow and deserving of a bit more exploring. What is it all he can do to shape the world around him using his expert knowledge? He can teach well and invent well enough but what does that mean for when mortals come around? What is it that the Aspect of Knowledge can be used for in the grand scheme of the roleplay? Once these are answered I will be more than happy with Epsilon.

The personality is where we actually did like Epsilon, he comes across as vengeful and petty which is not something we often see in a knowledge god. Though you aren’t giving us much of his desires past him just wanting to collect knowledge and hoard it, how will he interact with people? What is it going to be like if he finds those who seek to hide knowledge away from the masses? Does he even care about such trepidation amongst mortals of knowledge is threatened to be destroyed? 

Then we come to the True Form, you do make an exception that mortals can withstand the form for about a day. Since you make this to be the exception and not the norm, some of us are willing to allow it. I will allow it.

The sheet is accepted with the caveat that you can expand upon your aspect and persona a bit more, he comes across as a bit one-dimensional and I feel that needs to change. 

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