[quote=@AceSorou] [@zapdos] Changes made, blurb complete. Also, I'm not trying to "win" the RP. I'm trying to tell a good story. Don't worry. [/quote] Thanks for doing that! The CS looks good, it is approved. When I make the OOC, feel free to put it in the characters tab. [quote=@Izurich] Those are fair assessments! Yeah~ I had the feeling that she's a bit too strong for a week-old superhero career, but since I had no benchmark to compare her against, I decided to lie on the stronger side then nerf as necessary, instead of the other way around. Also, I have specific replies to this part of your review: If we're going by Marvel and/or DC stuff? I don't know... it's pretty wild there, anything goes, a sword that can cut through concrete or steel is even nowhere the strangest thing around. If we're going by Raiden from MGR, his sword cutting through steel is like 99% of the gameplay, it even has a whole in-combat minigame revolving on how to best cut those steel stuff, just so you have a full context on why I put that in. Regardless, this is your universe and as the GM, your word is Law. If a supernatural sword in this universe can't cut through steel or concrete, then so it shall be. [hr] Finally, and most importantly, I've made the edits! [/quote] Fair point regarding the nerfs. Regarding the sword in a Marvel, DC or MGR context; I've never paid too much attention to those universes (idk what MGR even stands for lol), my knowledge of stuff like Spiderman is very casual. I know more about the "lore" (if you want to call it that) of a years-old superhero RP on this site than about those things. I just try to keep in mind if the powers seem to have any corresponding weaknesses or gaps in their usage; I admit it might be subjective, but I do the best I can to keep it fun and balanced. My impression based on what you wrote of the sword was it was more mechanical than mythical, so thanks for letting me know that. I'm not opposed to that aspect of her power "upgrading" (becoming stronger, however you can think to phrase it) to eventually be able to cut through those things as the story progresses. Anyway, the CS looks good now, so once I post the OOC you can put Camile in the characters tab. [quote=@AceSorou] God, my character comparatively looks low effort. And isn't nearly as powerful... Any tips on presentation? [/quote] Personally, my formatting tool is Microsoft Word :P Izurich has better formatting than I do though, so go with her methods if you want a fancy CS.