[quote=@ClocktowerEchos]
Looks good although in your outlook it sounds like you're already wandering around a bit; at the start of the RP, everyone is starting near each other around a cluster of mana wells instead of having already been around for a bit. It'd also be fairly obvious he didn't take a wrong turn because he'd also have no memory at all of how he got there, his last concrete memory being something unrelated.
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Ah, that was mostly some poor phrasing on my part. my b. Changed it (and extended it) to:

'The infinite caverns of the Underynth meanwhile are at least not entirely alien to him, being comparable to some of the older and wilder bits of the celestial realm. You could almost convince the delivery devil he’d simply wound up in some out of the way part of his home realm if it weren't the inter-dimensional detritus and denizens littering the place. The same can't be said of the settlements, which pale in compression to the bureaucracy's sprawling arcologies within which a being could live an eternity of productive comfort without ever worrying about what lay beyond it's walls. To live in the Underynth is to stoop to a level primitiveness never even considered by most of those of Donovan's reality. '

[quote=@ClocktowerEchos]
Aside from that, the mana-powered tarot phone would also be running solely on battery until properly attuned to the Underynth's ambient magic. 
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I'll pop a change in for that too: 
"Tarot phone: A smartphone with the size and thickness of a playing card that was able to run off of ambient mana back home, but will need some magical fanjangaling to hook up to the Underynth’s own native mana field. It isn't doing too well functionality wise disconnected from the celestial bureaucracy’s internet equivalent either."