[@yoshua171] for Cath Melainea
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I'd first like to begin by complimenting the aesthetic and formatting of your sheet. It has a lot of visual appeal, and that helps with readability too.

Jumping right into the substance, I'm not worried about the potential toe-stepping since I believe both Kho and 404 said they're fine with some overlap over what Rosa and Ruina cover here. Now, I seem to recall you mentioning the duality of tempering and how you mean to take its literal meaning (strengthening objects) as well as its more metaphorical, as it applies to people and the mind. I do like that because it gives you a lot more flexibility and is interesting; however, your aspect section does not seem to allude to that at all. I would like to see some concrete examples and/or boundaries set out in order to help define what the aspect is actually meant to entail for your character. 

I like the personality too, assuming that the descriptions from the latter two texts are meant to be mostly accurate. Interesting choice to explain through narrative rather than just walls of omniscient text, too. I presume that this Cathyrian Church will be something that you establish somewhat quickly IC, and I look forward to seeing it. It's good from a GM perspective to be able to note that you seem to already have some interesting plans and creations in mind.

The true form is very good as well. I note that "...become naught but elementals forged in Melainea's essence" feels out of place and perhaps anachronistic given I don't believe we currently have those fantasy sorts of 'elementals' in this RP's setting, but that's a very minor detail to nitpick and I still understood the essence of what you were trying to convey.

Your sheet, once again, is nice and it's accepted -- just please remember my request about you more explicitly spelling out the aspect, and add a bit to that section before putting the final version of the sheet onto the character tab. Minor changes there are the only real request that I have. I'm pretty sure that you intend for this to be a god and not a demigod character, seeing as how she's repeatedly referred to as a goddess, but then again that comes from the Church and her worshipers that have yet to exist so confirmation that's your intent would also be nice. It doesn't directly matter for the sheet whether you're beginning as a demigod or a god, it would just determine what sorts of entrances to the IC would be possible and whether you'd presumably be undertaking an arc in which the Monarch's approval must be earned for an apotheosis and promotion to full god status. 
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