[quote=@princess] Hi there. Thanks for your time and effort. I love his look and personality. Well written, but you seem to have some misunderstandings and need more information. Your [b]occupation[/b] and subspecies of demon will not be accepted. The roleplay is settled in an alternation dimension where Earth is called Avalia. The GMs and I feel that it is best you change this as in this RP, demons come from an abyss and the Gods hate them. Celestials will be the ones who help souls pass. It is not so much like the Greek underworld. The spiritual realm here would be on Mount Celestia. There is no God of Abyss, just Lilith who is the mother of demons. The only beings that can reforge spirits into other races are the Gods. As for your history, he can be found in an orphanage and mistaken for something else, but he cannot start as a human(They are unnatural in Avalia as well), he would be a demon that was born in the abyss and got there somehow. Could also be a demon who didn't know he was one. Great job on the stats. You did this very fair. However the abilities: - No chronosense. This can lead to potential issues such as the character-revealing another's secrets, etc. - Life force absorption is too overpowered. Maybe replaceable with a weakening touch rather than straight-up killing them. - Arcane knowledge is kinda vague and needs more detail to understand what you are going for. - No Death Realm and Living realm connection [/quote] Thank you for your time and explanations! I will have to think more about the species I want him to be and what I want him to do before rewriting and getting back here for another chance!