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So overall he is a fit, that said there are a few little things…

Firstly - [i]and this was my fault[/i] - his planar lineage needs to be added in. I added the mystic monk class [i]after[/i] the character sheet was submitted. I thought I had made that little edit to include mystic monk in classes that required a lineage but I noticed that I had neglected that. As he is a water plane based character just add in “Water Plane” for his lineage which goes between his level and HP. My apologies for that little error.

Secondly, there is an anomaly in regards to the location of Kichirō’s origin. Esaad’s entire northern border is basically wide open sea. Tawr borders them to the northeast and somewhat to the east and Dahard of course to the south/southeast. To add to this, Kichirō’s East Asian theme (name, look, and overall style) puts him at odds with being native born to Esaad, Tawr, or Baneghora which are respectively themed after a combination of Iran and Arabia, ancient Egypt, and India. I had planned on expanding things in the near future and east/northeast of Baneghora would be various lands based upon China, Mongolia, Korea, Japan, and etcetera. So I ask that you do some proper adjustments and have him hail from the east.
To provide some assistance in avoiding heavy reconstruction of Kichirō’s backstory, Sharaqan priests, sages, and monks travel far and wide to spread the teachings of the prophet and the mandate of the Great Father. In some lands they are more welcome than others but it would definitely make sense that they could go far beyond Tawr and Baneghora. This can still coincide with his backstory of Kichirō being given to the Sharaqan faith.
Overall it’s just a minor issue of geography.

Thirdly, a minor adjustment, perhaps change or edit the quote? It is meant to be a direct character quote. That said I will allow simply removing the Japanese and changing Bruce Lee’s name out with Kichirō’s.


So to summarize;
- Add in the planar lineage. (My foul, again.)
- Make the requested edits to his backstory to line up with planned expansion and remove geographic inconsistency.
- Change/edit the quote.

All else checks out; scores, profile, personality, etcetera. Make those minor edits and ping/message me when you’ve done so. 💯
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