[quote=@Aqutanama] Please take a look at what I have so far. If this is something that isn't accepted then I can try for another character. Either that or change this one up. Writing at 2am not so good. If the above seems aggressive I can't use words at night. Sorry. [hider=WIP] Name: Valathos NN: Val Names he was called by the faction his mother was with: Hey You, Little Boy, Smelly Boy, Dum dum Sex: Male Age: 13 Height: 5’9” Max Height 6’6” (When he is older) Weight: 90 lbs Max Weight: 250 lbs Hair Style: Long hair down past his waist Hair color: Brown Right Eye Color: Brown Left Eye Color: Blue (Covered by an eyepatch) Child Genius Grade: 1st year Biography: Some say that great power has a great cost. Either that or one trains in order to gain said power. Val lost his world. Some would probably think that being reborn in another world would be great. However, that was not the case for Val. He was in his midlife and had a family that loved him. Fate, coincidence, bad luck, bad timing. These were all things that people would blame. He was happy with his family. However, his happiness wasn’t something that could be kept. Something had to go wrong to get to where he is now. His death was abrupt. He was out shopping for his family when he fell over. Blacked out. When he woke up he was in the arms of his new family, his mother and a wet nurse. in a different world. It wasn’t like he didn’t know the troupe. Isekai, traveler, summoned, regressor, taken, punished, and so on. He knew enough that when he was a baby he spent his time learning the language as well as anything else he could. Speaking the language was a lot harder than the written and writing. It is possible it was because he already knew two other languages from his original life. That isn’t to say that the language was hard to learn, just harder than the reading and written versions of the language. The village Val grew up in was too small for him. His mother was a traveling mercenary and never home. That isn’t to say that she didn’t spend time with him. However, he did get lonely while growing up. She would bring him anything that he wanted. For Val, he wanted books and information first. After that he wanted craftsman tools and a shop. His mother spent money, and pulled some favors from friends, in order to set up an official shop within the small town. While there weren’t many people that visited the Guild of Adventurers would frequent the town just to see the young boy. They would tell him stories of the world and about the main cities and towns. It didn’t take him long to invent a few things from his original world. These things would make normal life a little easier, efficient. Tools, foundations, recipes, and so on. However, he kept most of these a secret from the outside world. While it was usually hard to recall this information in his previous world it was as if he had full access to everything he had seen, heard, or experienced. This isn’t to say that he could recall every exact detail of a memory. He just had raw information from said memories. Everything was easier to learn because he had foundations on just about every crafting subject. Martial and military training started when he was able to run. Every day he would run until he couldn’t. To say that energy is wasted on the young was incorrect. It was more like the energy they used was in a smaller package. That and they were still growing, so healing was a bit faster. To not damage himself he made sure not to overdo it. Stretching was part of his mid day regiment. Martial Katas were part of the night time activities. Every other day he would do some weight training. However, to not cause strange growth he didn’t do it too much. Endurance, strength, dexterity, agility, wisdom, intelligence, and charisma. He tried to focus on these things and found ways to enhance each through each craft. Otherworldly knowledge could lead to bad situations. Therefore, he kept most of his inventions to himself. He had several books full of inventions and technology paths. Most of the things he wanted to make would most likely scare people. However, it was nice to know that most of these thoughts were solid within his mind. It was almost as if he had another realm within his mind he could step into. While his imagination was powerful, almost nothing was close enough to the real thing. This is why he wrote down most of his concepts. He was usually quiet and chose to watch people and their reactions. The flow of life. This could be because he was introverted in his previous life or that he just didn’t have anything to add at the time. However, no one really knew why it was. There were points when he would talk about crafts and get excited, showing his age. His usually dull bored looking expression changed to one of a child who was passionate about a subject. All of this led to people calling him paragon, prodigy, gifted, genius, and so on. Most of these people were the adventurers from the Guild his parents were part of. He was not one to believe in gods or goddesses. However, that didn’t mean that they didn’t see the young man and his accomplishments. Deities were all always doing strange things throughout the years. It was a surprise to him when he received blessings and boons from the deities. He was only ten when this occurred and he couldn’t figure out why. He did nothing to gain favor from the gods or pray. He focused on himself in order to get somewhere in this crazy world. That and he never met his father. He was unsure as to who he was. It wasn’t something his mother would ever bring up on her own. It was like pulling teeth to get her to talk about it. Therefore, he would never show his interest. It wasn’t like he didn’t have male figures in his life. The Guild members treated his mother like a mother or sister depending on age. Which was strange because she didn’t seem that old. She was maybe late twenties. He did bring up wanting to know his family on his mother’s side of the family. However, she was almost as closed off about that as his father. He didn’t know why or what was going on but continued his work and research. His mother spent less and less time at home as she was training new recruits. On his twelfth birthday he asked to join in with the new recruits. His mother seemed put off by the concept but gave in after seeing the hope in Val’s eyes. She was aghast when she saw how advanced her son was. Others praised her for raising him well. Her response made it seem like she had nothing to do with it. People just assumed she was being modest. A year after advanced training, his mother told him about her family and father. She was from a wealthy noble family and her father was a higher up. Someone that should have not been with her. He was a bastard son in his last life as well but he was acknowledged in that life. This one he didn’t know who his father was. She didn’t directly tell him in order to protect him. He grimaced at the thought of someone being so high up that this needed to be done. She handed him two rings from each respective family and informed him of the schools. The thought of going to a school bored him. What could this backwater teach him? Perhaps they could teach him about the gods? Thus he set off on his adventure with some supplies from his mother and her guildies. (This is where he rode off with a horse drawn carriage full of basic crafting stuff and food. Don't forget the food.) Powers: Core Ability: Transcendent Creation The ability to craft up to Mythic and Divine items. Does require specific materials in order to do so. Furthermore, this ability allows him to know how to craft everything from his original realm or world. Blessing from the Gods/Goddesses of Creation and Craft. Branch Ability: Field of Space This ability allows him to create a field around items in order to shrink or grow the items. Furthermore, he can create fields that exist outside normal perception. These fields are harmless but can store items which he can access from anywhere. This gift was bestowed upon him by the Gods and Goddesses of Trickery. Branch Ability: Ocular Analysis This ability allows him to see the flaws in everything. Furthermore, he can see what materials items are made of and gets an analytic analysis of the item. This includes what was used to make the items, which tools were used, the temperature of the flames, the methods and techniques used, and who made the item. This gift was bestowed upon him by the Gods and Goddesses of war. Branch Ability: Heart of the First Spark Heart of the First Spark grants him immunity to fire. Furthermore, he can control flames at will. However, he cannot create flames to do harm. His heart fire is the strongest flame in existence. Flames he produces are used for crafting in some way. Furthermore, Blessing from The Gods and Goddesses of Fire. People of interest n/a [/hider] [/quote] So, I'm not a GM, but I'm at least semi-familiar with the lore for this setting... ish. I did help throw together the devil/demon part of it, after all. But I digress. So, we do a lot of the lore discussion in the Discord chat, so it's understandable you'd not know. Therefore, I'll lay out a couple things. Feel free to take them with a slight grain of salt and await a chime in from Killa, tinyking or Rofls. Firstly, I will say that an isekai character should be fine. We have -I'm fairly sure- one confirmed isekai PC, who is literally possibly a variant and/or direct transfer of a character from the original version of this RP before it was rebooted. So, yes, that aspect at least should be fine. Mind you, nothing is directly confirmed yet. That character is being kept mysterious currently (they even have their CS hidden from everyone except the GM), so as I said before: grain of salt. (EDIT: I am told that isekais from Earth are specifically banned while others/original settings are fine, but you'll need to ask about the specifics on how far that goes). I'd say the first major issue with the backstory is that the world the RP takes place in is actually very scientifically advanced. We're talking full-on cars, computers, internet and cell phones. The works. It's not clear due to the fantasy vibes, but this world is actually quite advanced, despite having many fantasy elements also being highly prevalent, such as magi-tech. Now, granted, it may simply be that it's Rhea that is the most advanced city/nation in the world (which is where the RP currently takes place), so there could be some nations that are still a bit behind the curve. Regardless, it's highly doubtful that this OC is going to be bringing any "inventions" to the table that would see him classified as some hereto before unseen genius... unless he's been born in some very secluded/isolated place from the rest of the nations before finding his way to Rhea at some point. However, this is not to say that he couldn't be seen as a prodigy in general. Given his adult mind and the biological learning speed of a child body, it is quite possible with the right planning and resources that he could learn far more things than anyone his age should ever be rightly be capable of. So, while he's certainly not going to be bringing any revolutionary inventions to this world that they likely haven't seen before, he can still easily be a shocking child prodigy and be considered a genius for his achievements. Really, on an objective level, it would be hard not to consider him one in any case. Not sure if I'd call this an issue so much as a random unexplained factoid, but holy shit. This guy is 13 years old and nearly 6 feet tall?! Damn, the Hulk called. He wants his muscles back. Dude be rolling up looking like he's about to be Hercules from Fate/Stay. In all seriousness, it's not an impossible height or anything I don't think, just extremely unlikely/rare. I can't see many people believing he's actually physically 13 years old when told. There doesn't seem to be any explanation for his monstrous growth/development pace, but there doesn't necessarily [i]have[/i] to be either. It's just a bit of a head-scratcher. Okay, now, the power section is where my advice is going to be extra shaky, but I can say a couple things. For one: To my knowledge, no-one gets blessed by multiple gods. They just get multiple powers from the same god. Not saying it's impossible, just that no other character in the RP has this type of setup going on. I don't know if anyone has asked about it, so I can't say anything for certain. There have been some exceptions where -instead of a power outright- others have magic weapons or a very significant item that resides in and takes up a power slot (as one of Letter Bee's characters, Ken, does). Honestly, you'll need GM confirmation or denial here. Also, just in general. The way the powers are structured is that you have one main CORE power, the central power that all your abilities are built around. Then you have 3 SUB-powers, all of which branch off of, enhance, or make use of the main power in some way. Again, this leaning more into the concept/assumption that these powers are likely drawn from a single source/God. Now, this isn't a hard and fast rule, but -if not that- the powers tend to be themed around a specific concept or archetype. Again, this is still seemingly reinforcing that idea that all the powers come from the same place/God and fall under that Authority. Essentially, what you did instead was slap down 4 separate Core powers instead of 1 Core and 3 Sub powers. So, I dunno if I can see that flying through unaccosted by the GM. However, I can also say pretty much for certain that there is little reason for this guy to have directly attracted the attention of such a huge number of gods. If we're talking about gods that might notice without being told by another, the only ones that matter are the God of Spatial Boundaries/Realm Traversal (who might note the interdimensional intrusion), the God of Stories (a known meddler, who has a bit of an infamous and... [i]storied[/i] (heh) history with the RP in the version before the reboot, someone that would likely notice a major change to the "narrative"), and lastly, Gods that deal with souls/reincarnation cycle. Other than that, this guy's entrance really doesn't have any innate ramifications to it that would attract divine attention in mass, and regardless of his status, he's just one guy and not that important in the grand scheme of the universe. The Gods don't require prayer or anything to bestow blessings (although some may require it on an individual basis); they're just looking for Heroes/Champions to serve their interests and/or snuff out the remaining dark embers of the Great Evil that lay scattered throughout the world. Overall, I think you might be overcomplicating it with the powers. It looks like you really want this guy to be a legendary-smith-type dude down the line, so honestly, I'm pretty sure all but the "Field of Space" power could easily fall under the God of Smithing's domain. Just have that be the singular God that blessed this guy, and you should be good. That said, if you're really attached to the "multiple gods" thing, feel free to bring it up with supertinyking. Ultimately, he's the final word on the matter of how viable it is. As a final note: Since you likely haven't read through the other CSs yet, you should know that we already have a good few "legendary crafter" type characters in the mix (though some of their sheets aren't public yet). So, if you go for the crafter route, you're more likely than not to just end up in an arms race and/or clash with those characters in terms of role in the story. If your heart is set on crafter, then go for it, obviously, but I just wanted to point that out. You said you had some other character ideas and/or changes you could make to this one, so it might be a good idea to start considering them.