[h1]CS Review[/h1][hr]Hi [@Fallenreaper]! I've read your CS and, below, you'll find my feedback and some recommendations. Thanks for getting this finished and have a good move! [h3]Observations:[/h3] [indent]1) Your background research on brewing really shone through. I liked the section on her use of The Gift. 2) I appreciate that you're willing to have her be a bit biddable and gullible without it being a meme. Nuance is good. 3) The cherune bit was interesting and could feed into something in the future. 4) I liked the section on her motivation. It's succinct, impactful, and establishes strong stakes for the character. 5) Inventory is really good as well. The items, as chosen, are both evocative and practical. 6) I like the dancing bit. Just a small detail that helps paint a picture. 7) Overall, in the interest of some constructive criticism, the fit and finish could be a bit better, but there are no glaring issues and she meshes well with the feel of the world and the RPG. Address the typos listed below when you can. Roslyn is accepted![/indent] [hider=Typos][h2]Typo Zapper[/h2][hr]Below is a list of a baker's dozen potential typos that I thought you would probably want to address. I know it's hard to catch them while writing the CS and you've been pretty busy, so I thought I'd give you a cheat sheet and you can zap 'em when you have time. A couple are more recommendations or matters of opinion. Take them as you will! [indent]1) However, she struggles to burden her family and friends with her own troubles. [i]"She struggles NOT to burden her family," maybe?[/i] 2) This also means when someone hates it, she tends to hid the hurt and wonder what happened. [i]"she tends to HIDE the hurt"[/i] 3) Topics she can't speak of or make her uncomfortable, she rather avoid than lie. Genuine means to be sincere after all, not have loose lips. [i]Might be a few late night forgotten words and awkward phrasing?[/i] 4) In terms of languages, I would add 'Hendlish' at the top as her mother tongue. 5) Due to the workplace's tenancies for injuries, she began lessons in binding [i]"workplace's TENDENCY to produce injuries", maybe?[/i] 6) Raising debt forced the noble born family to accept Eustace offer of funds in exchange for Blythe to marry son, Aaren. [i]'RISING debt', 'EUSTACE'S offer', and 'to marry HIS son', I think.[/i] 7) At the time, they lacked the fund and an agreement... [i]lacked the FUNDS, and...[/i] 8) Roslyn wandered from a servant girl [i]mwaybe 'wandered AWAY or OFF from a servant girl'[/i] 9) Still gave him a fright causing her to giggles then apologize. [i]'her to GIGGLE then...'[/i] 10) Her mother's time was starting to dim. [i]maybe 'BLYTHE'S time...' just because there's 'her mother' a lot in this part of the paragraph.[/i] 11) Their once strong bond began to waned in the wake of their mother's death. [i]'began to WAN in the wake...'[/i] 12) ...a small bandage for continually bleeding issue. [i]'for A continually...'[/i] 13) Roslyn enjoys dancing, especially the more fast pace ones. Something about it calms her and reminders her of simpler days. [i]'fast-paced' and 'reminds', I think.[/i][/indent][/hider]