[@Sadie] It's a good start! I would like you to work a bit more on it, though. Specifically, I would like you to describe how she came to be a threat to the kingdom, how she eventually was caught, and why it was decided that she be put in the Maw. As it is, she doesn't really stand out. Maybe develop her talents a bit? Just to give her that badass feel. But, like I said, it's a good start! Looking forward to seeing what you do with it :)