[b]Comments on Sheets[/b]

On general, for everyone, at the top of the magecraft elaboration section in others, please put things like the Quantity and Quality of magic circuits on the top for neater formatting like these ones on Lucia's sheet.

Also, maybe put some years on the experience/accomplishment section, so we have a rough timeline for your character. You can look at Lucia's example sheet in the opening post as reference.

[quote]Magecraft:
Magic Circuit Switch: Being burned by heat generated by stars
Number of Magic Circuits: C
Quality of Magic Circuits: A+ (Abnormal, extremely compatible with magecraft invoking planets as gods)

Elemental Affinity:  Average One
Crest: ~300 years old (6th Generation)
Thaumaturgical Attribute: Symbology, Future
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You don't need to put Circuit Switch if you don't want to. That one is just flavour. It's like how Shirou imagine a cocking gun to activate his circuits, or how Rin imagine slitting her neck.

[b]Mimi TucknShine[/b]
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[quote]I know the muggle culture well within this town[/quote]
Might want to change the use of 'muggle' here, depending on what sort of character she is. There are definitely some spellcasters in america that refer to non-magical as muggles due to how prevalent Harry Potter is in the cultural zeitgeist, but probably not on official setting like job application, unless being a memer is your intention with her. If so, then it's good. Just want to make sure it's something intentional.

[quote]Personacraft traces its earliest records to a bloodline of demon hunters renowned for producing powerful psychics[/quote]

Hmm...Mimi's thing is all magecraft, yes? Just as a clarification. You can probably justify some weak psychic ability with this background. Maybe some form of psychometry or retrocognition like Fake Shiki in Tsukihime to internalize the 'data' in her clothing into her psyche to reconfigure her personality instead of structural grasp.
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[b]Selene Nightshade Morgrave[/b]
[@Thanatos 7]
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The images are broken, btw.

Remember that this is formatted as if it's a job application, so things like magecraft details, personality, and such, should just be put in others section. Just the short summary.

Oh also, please use lines (you can type hr in brackets to do it) or at least bold the sections like Bio, Accomplishments, etc to divide the sections just so it looks neater an easier to read for future reference. You can just copy and paste the provided format in the character sheet BBCode section for convenient sake.

[quote]Church intermediary[/quote]
Can you elaborate what you mean by Church Intermediary?

[quote]Clock Tower Department of zoology[/quote]

I thought you're Yumina/Botany last we talked on discord?

Now for the magecraft section

[quote]Magic Circuit Quantity: C+[/quote]

What's the plus from? Remember that just like servants, pluses here mean 'conditional increase'. So for example, Lucia's A+ is predicated on her Venus blessing that made her circuits extremely compatible with magecraft invoking gods.

Or for example, some canon mages who specialise in sister stuff like the Edelfelts might have a + because they are very in tune with their sisters, so when they're performing magecraft together, the quantity gets a +. Things like that.

[quote]Attributes: manifestation
This thing's attribute nature is to manifest non-physical things as physical things to solidify things, existing and great to shrink because of it.[/quote]

We last talked it was Tempering and Binding, I thought? Tempering for empowering the curse through the Gu Pot thing and binding to bind the curse into animal familiars or talisman or bound the curse to a target? Manifesting physical things from non-physical things generally is generally not done because it's inefficient as per Mahoyo

[img]https://i.imgur.com/VDujPaK.png[/img]

Shirou does it, but he's special because he has sword origin+sword element+sword reality marble. So he's just cracked for things revolving swords.

[quote]Crest: 1637 ( 18 generations of refinement)[/quote]

I assume this meant the Crest was established in 1637, right? 383 years old. Then your character would be either 7th or 8th gen. Mages tend to live longer, so a generation is roughly 50 years.

[quote]According to the sayings in the world of magi, a magus could only devote all of his effort to research until he was 50. After that, his life should be spent raising an heir... in other words, the "next runner".

-Clock Tower 2015
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[quote]anti Thaumaturge wolf howl that the shops local magic their fur is also capable of dispersing magic making it hard to kill them with traditional magic[/quote]

It's fake, so probably not just a nope to magecraft. The real Church Grim probably has that. Your fake is more on the realm of 'disturbing flow of magical energy', it basically help weaken spell, and maybe if the caster is weak enough cancelled it, but it's not going to just cancel magecraft.

Even Svin in case files, who's supposed to be exceptionally talented super prodigy can doesn't cancel magecraft, he just disturb the magical energy.

[quote]A hunting sniper rifle (No.4 MkI )[/quote]
I'm not saying no, but this seems not 'in flavour' with the family and mage concept overall. She's a mage from an established family that is a prospect of marriage for the Zoology Lord, right? That sort of mage would not use guns. Especially since the Gaiuslink family is part of the aristocratic faction. There is no way the family would be caught dead proposing to a mage who uses a gun. I suppose she can pick it up after getting to America, but that's a recent thing last we talked, right? Especially since she's 20, she should just graduated from general fundamental, and maybe a year maximum doing enforcer training/being a mage of the Botany Department. I don't think she would have enough time to practice using a sniper rifle yet? That seems more advanced, no? 
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[b]Derald Smith[/b]
[@Silverstein]

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[quote]Licensed Medical Toxicologist. (Has a clinic in Whispering pines hospital. tho, his methods of curing a patient is a bit questionable)
Independent contractor<?>
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I don't think he would be a licensed medical toxicologist. The timeline doesn't make sense. He's 23, if he basically used his college years going through Clock Tower education, he wouldn't have the time to study medicine. Also generally the Healthcare World is very strict with 'Evidence Based Medicine', his shady methods would get his license revoked immediately. He can probably just have some alternative healing clinic though. Just not official and more shady backstreet unofficial vibe.

Also he's 3rd rate 1st gen mage huh? I think the question is how he get admitted to the Clock Tower. The Clock Tower is basically Harvard. You don't get it unless you have the actual talent, pay a ridiculous amount of money, or have connections. Even Waver, despite his weak practical magecraft is at least very good in general magecraft theory and he's 3rd gen, meaning his family has been around for over a century, at least.

[quote]Derald wears a scarf that conceals his true identity and his presence. It functions just like a pseudo-presence concealment of the assassin class. Its unnatural scent of dirt and 2nd hand cigarette smoke dulls the senses of any human to a degree, making him almost unrecognizable to those who rely on those senses alone.[/quote]

He's a Frame so magecraft-wise he's pretty subpar. The scarf would work, but probably not on anyone who aren't just ordinary civilian. Think how Waver's hypnosis in Zero basically wore off several times. You're not quite that bad, but probably around that level. Definitely nowhere close to an Assassin Presence Concealment.

[quote]Wolfbane pouch
Derald is a master of sleight of hand and an above-average apothecary. He keeps this hidden inside his woven biker gloves. A small dose of this stuff can paralyze his victims. [/quote]

Similar with the above, if the poison in magecraft in nature, it probably would only work on civilians. At Frame-level magecraft, he would probably be better suited just using mundane poison. They would be more effective for a much cheaper price.

[quote]Derald is a chain smoker, like a real chugger of this stuff, causing him to have a weak constitution due to years of substance abuse. This curse/blessing serves as a double-edged sword to him. On one hand, he is almost immune to poisoning and other mental interference curses. On the other hand, he is pretty much susceptible to other harmful causes of magecraft and natural mortal wounds.
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Again, with Frame-level magecraft, he wouldn't be 'almost' immune to poisoning and other mental interference. Some resistance is fine though. You can even make the cig actual mystic codes like the ones Waver have in Case Files.

[quote]His family crest is a decade old and is not even considered a magus’ house.[/quote]
A decade old? That mean it's created when he was 13? So likely his parents didn't have crest and was able to convince a mage from an established family to help him make the crest. As the process for making a crest is:

[quote]Crest Splitting - the practice of taking a small portion of the Magic Crest from a magus of the main family and transplanting it into someone else.

Originally, the first generation of a Magic Crest was developed by implanting a fragment of some lost Phantasmal Species or Mystic Code, called a 'core,' into the body. Of course, since you were implanting a completely foreign object into the body, the rejection response was far stronger than what one would see when receiving a Crest from a parent. By suffering through those rejections for generations, the core would slowly become saturated with the hosts' magecraft, and thus the Magic Crest would be complete.

However, magi that used this method to produce Magic Crests were all but extinct in modern times.

While there weren't that many from outside previously established magecraft families that decided to pursue it, those that did typically received a Crest Split from a much more historied family. Of course, since it was a transplant from a stranger, the intended function of the Magic Crest - to act as a crystallized mystery - was all but lost. Even so, it was a method that would produce results many generations faster than starting from scratch, and it was much easier to control the development of a Crest made in such a way.

[i]-Lord El-Melloi II Case Files[/i]
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Probably should elaborate on that more. You can maybe lean into that angle as to why he's in the Clock Tower, sponsored by that mage or their family. Just need to make some backstory how Derald's parents were able to get that favour. You can put it in the other segment since it seems an important part of the backstory.

Finally, please elaborate on the magecraft more. You can look at Lucia's example sheet as a reference. No need to be as detailed as Lucia's, but at least the elemental alignment and attribute, and a general overview of what he's doing exactly. Feel free to ask me on discord if you need help

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[b]Winnifred Pylypyshyn[/b]
[@wikkit]


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[quote]Psychometry - Archetype Installation[/quote]

So this is still part of the psychic ability and not magecraft, right? I know the basis is Tsukumogami, but that seems like more of a spiritual evocation magecraft. I guess it can be a form of psychokinesis? Though psychokinesis might not fit the whole 'talking to object thing' you're going for though.

You can probably do a mage with psychic ability if you want to? Psychics are basically a 'new cognition channel' so maybe she just sees objects' past history and construction as a 'talking spirit' (the spirit doesn't actually exist, it just appear like a spirit to her). And then from there, since she has detailed info about the object, she can then extrapolate a more 'ideal version' of the object. For example, because she know intimately the history and the construction of the knife, she can extrapolate how the knife was when it was brand new and where in the process of the construction it could have been improved to be sharper, which she then project around the knife as a shell projection.

Something like that? So she does simple magecraft assisted by her psychic power.

[quote]I own a large sledgehammer.  I keep it because it's the most pleasant object that I've talked to.  It has previously displayed the ability to damage incorporeal entities and I'm not very certain why this is the case beyond possible intersection of the overuse of psychic application and my own attachment to it.  I keep it in bed while I sleep.  I cannot afford to lose it.[/quote]

Usually, unless it's a Mystic Code, or have some other special property it wouldn't be able to damage incorporeal entity. If this a hammer with some special circumstances that you want to keep a secret/mystery feel free to DM me on discord.
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