[quote=@themaybreeze]
[@JFK]

Thanks for the shoutout, Mr P! Your post was an enjoyable read. A good amount of content to chew on!

If it’s alright with you, I’d like to add a segment to my next post featuring a phone call between Pearly and Joe? She’ll catch wind of where the brothers are and give him a tip-off… In exchange for a favour with no expiration date.

If you’re okay with that, I’d love to run through what that dialogue will look like in the PMs? 

Could be a cool little addition to the subplot?
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Sounds like a grand plan!

[quote=@TokyoPewPew]
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Be careful that you don't make too many massive, momentous plot advancements like this too early, nor too often. The twists, the turns, the complications, the hauntings of other motives (including other PCs'!) encroaching into your own—that's where the fun's waiting. Joe won't be much of a noir protagonist following a simple, linear A→B progression, now will he? 😌 Just a suggestion for maximum enjoyment, not a hard rule I'm enforcing.

Otherwise, good post, and worth the wait. I like details such as the rock-salt and the olfactory notes lending credence to the atmosphere. Ditto Joe's casual racism and offhanded aspersions well-characterizing him from the start.
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Good feedback. I'll be keeping it in mind.