[quote=Ellri]
GravityFlux. You asked for feedback on the sheet. Aside from a small bit, we couldn't notice anything wrong with it. We quoted that here:Considering his age (you changed it from the original 37 to 36), it makes even less sense to have any mention of the gulf war. We'd suggest highlighting a bit more on more recent wars instead, and if you feel the need to mention the gulf war at all, make it instead relate to his reason for joining military.This section feels a bit sparse, and it doesn't entirely make sense. If Homeworld Security and the IOA wants someone for the program, they won't care much if (s)he is busy in some war merely affecting a minor Earth nation or two. They've got the clout to take pretty much anyone in the SG-participating nations' militaries. Of course, it could've been that he said "no" till he felt "finished" down there. That would build up a stronger impression of his stubbornness. Pretty sure that anyone going offworld, especially in a leadership role, would go through more than a quick briefing about the SG program. We'd suggest adding a short tour or so as an SG team member/leader. While there's been no mention of the USAF having any Canadian SG-team(s), a lot could have changed as IOA and Homeworld security rose to more prominent positions. We at least wouldn't send someone as a leader on a mission like this unless we've tested their mettle against aliens.One final question: Why was he promoted? They generally don't promote anyone simply "for their services". Maybe he did something to make him truly stand out during his SG-initiation? We'd usually tear far more holes in character sheets, but we're not a GM in this RP, and there wasn't much else worth tearing at. The rest of the sheet just did not have anything that we saw worth picking at. In other words, we liked the rest of it.
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Again, I wasn't quite done, but yes, this is what I needed
Thank you so much. Now I can make it better. Thanks so much