[quote=thewizardguy]
Alright. But it'll be a fair rating.You lose 1 point for spelling. Sorry, I'm a grammar nazi like that.I like the story overall, but nothing is explained. It does well as a short story, but I prefer knowing WHY things are happening. Another 1/2 point.Your story structure is decent, but slightly off. This is a thing you can't help, and I'm not great at it either. Two points, as this is the most important part of the story.Overall, I give you a 6,5. Now that may seem low, but realize I'm comparing you to PROFFESIONAL WRITERS. And still you score higher than average.
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Meh, 5+ Is amazing sooo =3 =D yaaaay!