[quote=Stitches]
A very decent, lore-abiding application and a nice concept in general, also very impressive to be able to make out of what patchy history and facts we've been spewing forth whilst you were writing it! It's a bit of an improvement on our behalf - we'll try to make a more concise "history and background info"for all of you, but if you've read it all carefully, you'd notice how...well, messed up the District is. -Very- dictatorship-styled, and the Defence Team get in on everything.Things that you'll have to alter, Spriggs:● It looks like Ash has had a pretty tough life, and whilst the Squad part was understandable and medication would've been taken for it...they wouldn't have let Ash back on the team after the car crash. Logically, they would've let Ash back in by the skin of her teeth after being prescribed anti psychotics - nobody wants a crazy soldier in their army.● What team is she in? Ranged, or Offensive...? I'd assume one of the two, judging by her fighting style. (Join ranged, we're much better than Hovelmeier's team*)*We're completely NOT biased against whichever team you choose, mind. They all basically work together in training, missions, etc.Things that we're going to improve: We're going to add a quick 'opening' to the plotline, and get a floorplan for the base. Also, the CS template is under work, but only add the extra details if you want to. We do, however, want you both to take a look at fixing the alterations before being accepted. Thanks for applying, though; it's really inspiring for the two of us to see people interested enough to join up.
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Shes in Ranged. 

Do you want me to completely change her history to something else or just alter it a little ?

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