Skallagrim advised that I have you guys critique me on [URL=http://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/658241]this[/URL]. He said that you might find places to interrupt my post (?) or what he might be able to use to his advantage. So... would anyone mind doing a newb a solid?

[B]EDIT:[/B] Either LeeRoy or MelonHead would appear to be most critical, and by extension useful, when it comes to dissections. Just an observation I've made while reading this here OOC.