[quote=Darkmatter]
Decided to split this Chapter post into two parts. The first for Shankee, the second for Bawzel. The former will be summoning all the adventures and the latter will be calling for his generals (sicarius, inspector and NPCs (or other players who join between now and then)).Well then, it is good that you took the criticism constructively and I would be delighted to have you on board The thing with advanced is they require time investment. They have the most reading/writing but also the most reward. The plot and character development are to a higher standard. All I ask is to make the character a part of Enduwin make it fit. Feel free to create a new race even, we have a lot of humans Mostly, it's just that the grammar, syntax etc need to be maintained to a high standard and all's good 
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The character sheet for the BB shows me nothing. Literally. It's all smoke and mirrors and doesn't tell me anything on how to destroy him in one uber powerful strike from my non magical swordsman. Wtf. Fix it. I need to know his weaknesses and his flaws and everything that will help me make this into a short lived RP. Otherwise this is going to take time investment, development and real effort. 

Also. I thought advanced existed because some people aren't good enough to write concise posts that are easy to read and understand in as few words as possible? I didn't know that advanced offered rewards... I thought it was a pain in the ass. 

And I suppose he could have been hiding. But where? Behind a tall bush? Plus he's an Aries. He doesn't hide, even if he should. Uh. I understand that Aries probably don't exist in this RP. But that's how he is being played.