[quote=RedSavant]
I don't think it's my place to critique another player's signup, but I will say that I have no idea where you're going with Yamato or what role you intend for him to play. You have an idea somewhere in there, but it's almost impossible to pick out among the non-sequiturs and vagaries in the bio and personality sections. Why does he need en to stay awake when people are talking to him, especially when he himself volunteered for a service role? Why was there an 'intellectual minority' studying him? What makes him anomalous?From a story perspective, though, this is more important: What are his goals in life, and what will he be striving for in the roleplay? If his one and only goal is to protect the Mitsumine heir and he's already doing that, he has nothing to aim for, and no reason to be involved with any characters aside from Ryuunosuke. The charm is a possible hook, but none of our characters have reason to know his mother or recognize the charm even if they were to see it, so that would have to be a hook explored by you yourself, or potentially by Sylph as Takeshi. 'Strong, silent type' characters are very hard to play in ways that make them interesting to write for and for other players to interact with.Just my two cents.
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[quote=Heyitsjiwon]
Hmm, I got a different vibe from his character. To me, Yamato seems to be going through a life-long crisis of identity and that his entire life is in itself a journey to discover who exactly he is and what it is that he wants in life. It just so happens that he is very good at fighting, but whether that is something he truly enjoys is a different matter. But I do have to admit that some of the things that are introduced could be fleshed out more, and that just leaving them makes his character seem a bit erratic and odd.
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Ty. I needed stuff like this. (I kept updating him when I was half-awake lol)

As for Yamato's story, he's someone- similar to what Heyitsjwon said- who's apparently [i]searching for some things[/i]. I have quite obviously not made it clear in the biography because it was more written like some quickly written summary of his existence made by some commoners. And he is, indeed, going through a identity crisis that heavily affects his interactions with others. I will be updating the bio with a heavily modified format, because I haven't clarified several things.

1. His mother's alive, but he himself doesn't know of what the charm actually is or does. He uses it to try finding his mother. (He finds his mother's whereabouts on his own)
2. He isn't exactly "justice-man," but rather, does most things for personal benefit.
3. He's mute, meaning that he really can't talk in any vocal way.
4. His goals are to find his mother, protect the heir, find a way to overcome his deficiencies, and be someone his mother always wanted to be.

For his personality, Yamato is silent, but bizarrely mischievous when nothing special is happening. It does bring up the question as to whether that's his actual personality or not, but the strange actions he does usually winds him up meeting many people. That's ironically how he got to meet over half of his enemies as well.

For his skills... they need a rework. Nuff said. I really didn't know what to put in there, but after reading some of the Character Sheets in here, I think I got the basic gist of it.

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Thanks for the feedback. Is there anything else that's bothersome? Like I said earlier, heavy editing is something I've grown accustomed to, so... yeah. o.o