Just adding some small helpful things to your CS's review, by the way.
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When she was 18 she got hit by a car making her instantly dead. 
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You could re-word this to: "When she was eighteen, she was hit by a car and died instantly."

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A necromancer came to bring her back alive, What the necromancer exactly did is unknown but She wacked up near the school Athalia. 
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She *woke* up, actually.

There might be some other grammar-wise aspects that could be improved, but I have to go to a birthday party because my girlfriend forced me to do so. It will probably suck but oh well, a man has to endure such things.

See ya'll!