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Hey, I've been practising writing, and I'm currently writing a story called Tales of Heartstone, for lack of a better name. Could some of you guys please proofread it? I'd really appreciate it if I could get you guys's honest opinions and criticisms. Thank you!http://matthijs.noyce.eu/category/my-stories/tales-of-heartstone/
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I liked it. I really did, although for some reason the captain reminded me of kunkka.