I have a minor request for your posts. I have a hard time following who's talking when, so if you could do something about it like label each person's speech with a "He said" or "He shouts" or something. I learned that in books authors keep it all strait but making sure only one person speaks per paragraph, so maybe you can try that? It's what I had to do when working on the site I write my books on. I use to write in big blocks like what you do, and I love them, but without at least label on each "" section, I'm getting a little lost as to who's speaking half the time.