[quote=CallaLily180]
To answer your questions in order;1. These are all memories. That is why I wrote them in first person.2. Not sure what exactly you mean on this one but I wrote all of the back-story to explain the trip.3. That is one thing I should explain. English isn't my forte and I'm not a good writer.(I know right?)4. I was wondering what the exact limit was and since I usually don't write much I wanted to have something big for good measure.5. I did little research on this part, my fault.6. She very much does, she is fully addicted to it. 7. They were right outside of the city. About half a mile out at most. I think I will do a quick edit. I apologize.
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It's alright on most of those things, I was just pointing out what I saw. Researching background is a good idea. Its not as important in Casual level as it is in Advanced. My question was mainly about how/why she was flying out for a trial in a different location. It's not impossible, just improbable. So, I was just providing my line of thinking and what I know about the legal system here in the US. I'm not saying she couldn't have gone off to work a case, just asking the how/why, in the context of what I provided. 

Everybody has been writing in "memory" or flashback form, and it's still third person, which is my point. The thing is, unless your character is littarlly speaking and relaying those events, they aren't telling the story. You are telling -their- story as you witnessed it, or as it transpired. So you would say, "Maribeth nocked an arrow on her string, and pulled back on it, sighting carefully before letting it loose with a deep thung. The arrow zipped into the walker's eye and exploded out the back of it's head, dropping to the ground like a puppet with it's strings cut." Rather than "I slipped an arrow onto the bowstring and settled it into the rest, before pulling back and looking along the fiber sights at my target. I let the string slip forward launching the arrow with a deep thung from the limbs. The arrow shot forward and punched through the eye socket and out the back of the head." Same story, but the first is as though you are telling what Maribeth did, like in a movie. Rather than you, CallaLily, being the one to draw the arrow, line up the shot, and loose the shaft to kill said zombie. 

Another thing is, this has all already occurred as it has been written. It's the past, it's history. It's not saying "i will do something" it is "Maribeth did something". So it's -all- memory. The story is most often told by an observer, someone who was there. Unless Maribeth herself is relaying it, and then that is going to be hard to do, as it will juxtapose the difference in writing styles. 

Now, I'm not bashing on first-person writing. Some of my favorite books are written like that. For example, The Dresden Files by Jim Butcher are wonderul. I,Jedi by Michael A Stackpole is another one. There's nothing wrong as far as perspective or point of view goes, or writing in that way, but it's not something that works too well in a role-playing written format. 

I'm also not saying you have to change your post or anything, but it's something to take in consideration for the next one. As is, it works decently.