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Joining the WIP train! Still need a writing sample and might tweak some things here and there, but--

Edit: No longer a WIP

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We gonna have a discord for this going forward?
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@Asura Your point-buy checks out. You didn't put the name of your background in the features tab, just pointing it out. You also still have the spellcasting tab in there, though you can't actually cast spells yet. I won't ask you to remove it, but you will need to update it to the paladin rules ^^;
The Order of the Golden Lion isn't one of the original suggestions, I think? We'll need to discuss that.

@LordOfTheNight Your AC and HP are way too high - you're a level 1 bard, with a base HP of 8 plus your constitution modifier, which from your numbers is +2, and you would only get 12 or 13 AC, depending on your dexterity modifier, since you start with leather armour. I assume from your stats, you're going for standard human, not variant; I will inform you, the number in the brackets is for your modifiers, not your racial bonuses. Additionally, your stats are not viable. To have the stats you do, that would be either 20 points, or 28 points, not 27.
You have too few proficiencies - Bards have proficiency in three skills, and three instruments; Charlatans have proficiency in Deception, Sleight of Hand, the Disguise Kit, and the Forgery Kit. As a human, you speak two languages - common and one other. Your lute counts as a weapon for the purposes of this application, as it is your spellcasting focus.
You appear to have missed some of the colour areas, and there's a section that technically should be inside the hider - I think you're missing one of the /hiders.

@DrakeEricsen The picture is fine, don't worry about it. Your stats check out, but you have too much HP. Clerics start with a base HP of 8 + Constitution - you should have 12 total, accounting for your dwarven toughness trait. Also, you have proficiency in Vehicles (land), not Vehicles (cart) - you can use them all.
Your Arms and Armour should be in the following format;
Armour | Chainmail | Shield
Weapons | Battleaxe | Light Crossbow
I don't need to know the damage it does and the information on any spells you have can be put into the spellcasting section.
With the short story - I admit that the fault is on me, for this, but it's far more likely that you would have met Sebastian, not Cassandra.
I already know what the cleric, dwarf and mercenary backgrounds give you proficiency in. You don't need to tell me that.
Please do not abridge the text regarding your features - if you must, use this website to copy-paste them (with the exception of the Mercenary Veteran, which isn't featured there).
Linking the pages of the spells isn't enough - please follow the format I laid out; look at Cayden's spellsheet for an example. I trust you guys to be accurate
As for your origin... we'll discuss that in PMs. I have an idea for that.

@Tangletail Ah, the boi. Remember, Storm Sorcery is your subclass, so that should be in brackets. I'm curious as to how he learned to speak Gnoll... that isn't a language choice, you see, unless I've been misinformed. There's also a couple of places that you missed changing the colour code, but that's fine. You also don't have/won't get any expertise tools/skills unless you multiclass, so you're safe to remove those.
Huh. I didn't think about non-armoured classes. You can remove that line from Arms & Armour.
Tempestuous magic counts as a Class feature, not a Spellcasting rule. Also, please change 'Prepared Spells' to 'Spells Known', as Sorcerers operate on that rule.

@Vertigo I didn't think about having tools in the arms & armour section... hmm. Well, I won't say remove it, but please remember to separate different items with a |.
I already know about your origin, no need to apologise for that. XD
Most everything else looks good; I just need a writing sample from you, and it'll be complete!
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@Asura I'm pondering that. Games with a discord have a reputation of killing the OOC... but I am much more easily reached on Discord. I also wouldn't want to exclude people based on the fact that they don't have/are unwilling to use Discord; for the foreseeable future, I'll say no. This may change later on.
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Your point-buy checks out. You didn't put the name of your background in the features tab, just pointing it out. You also still have the spellcasting tab in there, though you can't actually cast spells yet. I won't ask you to remove it, but you will need to update it to the paladin rules ^^;
The Order of the Golden Lion isn't one of the original suggestions, I think? We'll need to discuss that.


Might as well keep it in. Will save me time when it unlocks at level 2.

The Order of the Golden Lion was the best fit I could find among the various knightly orders of Faerun for both geographic location (Elturgard, a theocratic nation just north of Greenest, is led by priests of Torm, the god that the order is dedicated to serving), their habit of sending knights out on quests to atone for past misdeeds done in the name of Torm (why a knight is escorting a pair of hoodlums to Greenest) and what oath I'd like to take (Oath of the Crown, which has tenets that line up well with Torm's portfolio). None of the options provided stuck out to me, and I took them to be options, not required choices.
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@Asura I never said they were required. I just meant that we'd need to discuss it because I was unsure if it was homebrew or not, and I'd need to know their tenets, their ideals and goals, etc.
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@CollectorOfMyst Ah. Gotcha. I didn't get how the modifiers work and yes I realized as I looked over my stats that I went a point over and will edit it once I am at my computer.
I apologize for the confusion. Comes with being the FNG I suppose. So, could I use a rapier and a lute or am I restricted to just the lute?
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@LordOfTheNight You can use both. The rapier is a genuine weapon - I'm just counting spellcasting focuses as weapons, as they allow you to cast spells with the material component.
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@CollectorOfMyst Gotcha. So to make sure I'm not making any more mistakes, tge sleight of hand, insight, and acrobatics are fine but I need more than these 3 proficencies, right?
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@LordOfTheNight Correct. You have automatic proficiency in Deception and Sleight of Hand - as a Bard, you can choose any other three skills.
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@CollectorOfMyst Alright, I do believe I fixed it. Let me know if I need to tweak anything or if I've done anything wrong
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@LordOfTheNight


I admit I did kind of forget that you're a new player, but please remember if there are any questions, you can ask. We were all new once, so it's not an issue for us to answer questions.
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@CollectorOfMyst According to the calculator I have used an even 27 points.

2 in STR
5 in DEX
4 in CON
2 in INT
7 in WIS
7 in CHA with +1 racial bonuses across the board.
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Here is my contribution and possibly the youngest character I have ever played by many years. It is not often I play bright eyed, lively novice sorts.

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@CollectorOfMyst Who ould be the one Id most likely meet
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I'll make those changes. But maybe not until Monday.
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@LordOfTheNight I see. Therein lies the confusion. Your stats don't reflect what they actually should - which is the final number. So these numbers in the column labelled 'total score'.


@Tangletail It depends on where and how, tbh. Sebastian is the one that you're more likely to encounter if a fight is involved - he knows where to look, values fighting prowess, and is more likely to interject himself if a fight breaks out. Cassandra is more the one to wander the streets looking for someone who looks suitable, as well as acquiring the supplies they need. She's more of a negotiator but is willing to fight if things look dangerous.

@The Harbinger of Ferocity We've discussed your character, so most of this checks out already. The only note I have is that we don't need the whole thing when it comes to spells (you only need the first letter for the components, spell effects can be shortened - eg, Guiding bolt can be shortened to 'attack +4, 4d6 radiant, next attack has advantage'). However, I'm not going to nitpick too hard, especially since this is only meant as a reserve character.
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That it is, all the better too to know there's no actual issues with the presentation beyond minor details like that, @CollectorOfMyst.
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I just realized about the number of Clerics and Paladins.... this is starting to turn into a crusade XD
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