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4 yrs ago
Current Friendly reminder that whatever you're feeling right now is normal. The world is in shock, and everyone copes with that differently.
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4 yrs ago
Just wanted to give a shout out to any healthcare workers on the guild. You guys are way braver than I am, especially those of you going in even with health issues. Thank you so, so, so much.
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4 yrs ago
Merry Christmas all!
4 yrs ago
@VampireTwilight don't let anyone pressure you into anything you don't want to do, if they respect you, they'll respect your boundaries
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5 yrs ago
Happy moon anniversary everyone! :D
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@ZAVAZggg For your consideration I present -

Most likely not unfortunately, I may have been a little overeager, and would likely have had to drop - best of luck with the rp though!
HELLZ YEAH
Oh damn that's so much cooler than the site i use
@KingOfTheSkies Okay I gotta ask - where are you getting these kickass fonts on your CSs? 😍






@Lmpkio Should we just post our characters from the int check straight in the char tab?
Ooh, this looks cool! I remember having a Shinsengumi phase a while back lol, to the point of watching, like, 40 hour long episodes of a live action thingey I had to trawl the internet to find 😅 I was a normal child wat Just curious, would it be historical characters or original characters shoved into the historical scenario?




Unperturbed by Vinnie’s outburst, Alice folded her arms, gaze shifting from coolly indifferent to deadly as Reika spoke. The other woman had always been impulsive, greedy, even. Whilst her hunger for power had before been a minor inconvenience, now it seemed it was putting them all at risk. And she was the liability, apparently.

“Tell me Reika, where exactly do people think you are? Because I just told that circus I’m at home with Snowball. Although I suppose big, bad drug dealers like yourself don’t need alibis.” for the last part, she let her voice turn sickly sweet, as if speaking to a child. It was petty, but she didn’t care. She enjoyed winding Reika up, and even better if she could prove her wrong in the process.

“And honestly, I wouldn’t go boasting about that particular alliance,” her gaze drifted lazily to Vinnie, more particularly, to the spot of red just out of reach of the clean swipe of the napkin, “Although I suppose I shouldn’t be surprised the two thugs at the table banded together.”

She shifted slightly, angling to adress Leo. He was logical. Smart. Realistically, the mole could be any one of them, and he knew it. That didn’t mean Reika wasn’t a danger though, the same for Vinnie, but it seemed the others would take some convincing, “Empirical evidence?” she said, calm, “Reika’s grab for power seems awfully empirical to me, as does Vinnie’s…” she trailed off deliberately, before, with obvious disdain, Tantrum

She gave Vinnie a look, “By the way, you missed a spot.”
Okay! So! Here are my critiques :) I didn't go into too much detail, because personally I don't find nitpicking to be particularly helpful, especially in contests like these with a time limit, where no one is going to be able to produce a perfectly polished, perfectly edited piece of work. That said, if anyone's planning to develop their work further and wants more in depth, sentence level feedback, hmu and I'll be happy to give my two cents :)

So, in the order that I opened my reviews up in google docs (because ranking is also unhelpful imho) -















I genuinely wish I could vote for more than one lol, and it was a tough choice, but I'm gonna go with @gowia because I found the protagonist to be interesting, and the take on the prompt comparatively original (also it made me feel things)
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