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"Known throughout the Five Shinobi Nations, the reputation of a mighty hero echoes far and wide! When they speak of her impossible taijutsu skill and raw physical might, they're talking about me - The Incredible Soul Lee!"
Glad to know that she's modest, at the very least.
Character Fields

Name|Aliases
   Lee Soul

Age|Gender
  13/Female

Clan|Rank
  Lee/Student

Affiliations
Konohagakure
Physical Description
 Standing at 140 centimeters tall and weighing 42 kilograms, Soul is easily on the smaller side of the spectrum in terms of size - however, this is not indicative of her personality in the slightest. Whether because she was born as a girl into the Lee clan, or she was simply lucky, she lacks the thick eyebrows and dark hair that are characteristic of her clan.Not going for the classic lee aesthetic. smh. Her hair is cider brown, and kept short due to how longer hair is easier to grab in close quarters. Fitting for her small stature, Soul's voice is high-pitched, yet she can easily talk over most people in a room and grab attention quickly.

	She wore the signature green jumpsuit of the Guy and Lee clans when she was beginning her training, but once her favorite training spot was taken by Kaminarimon Corporation's rapid expansion and construction, she adopted an orange mechanic's jumpsuit to protect against the large amount of soot and grime. Ever since then, she rarely wears anything other than the jumpsuit, only wearing formal clothes in the most necessary of cases. She wears very thick steel-toed boots, due to a time when she stepped on a nail in the Freight yard, forcing her to rest for weeks without training. When performing her "Hero Work," Soul wears a black Fukumen and Zukin on her head in order to "Hide her secret identity." In reality, it is to pay homage to the ninja that saved her life as a child. 

Characterization & Prestige
	Soul is hot-headed, extremely stubborn, thickheaded, and is overall a very dramatic person. She rarely uses an inside voice, and seems to do her best to appear larger than life, despite her very small size. One of her most obvious traits is that she gives herself grandiose titles, typically lying blatantly about her achievements, or embellishing and exaggerating them to ridiculous proportions. She is addicted to the idea of being a "Hero," doing her best to help as many people in the village as possible, even at the expense of her own free time and her grades - to the point where she would commit incredible sacrifices for the most petty and insignificant of reasons if it meant someone else was less inconvenienced. Soul sticks extremely close to a set of morals and rules, which she follows with ironclad focus and usually murmurs to herself when a situation related to them comes up - the very first of which being that she does not use genjutsu or ninjutsu, as Taijutsu is, in her eyes, the most "Pure and Heroic" of the standard Ninja arts (As well as the fact that it costs a large amount of money to learn techniques in the modern day...)Okay, real review stuff starts now. Stuff like Ninjutsu and Genjutsu training isn't learned as a separate course but is wrapped up in the totality of Ninja training. So while applying to the optional ninja classes may be expensive, there are no added expenses to learn things like Ninjutsu and genjutsu. Think of it like being enrolled in a military school, since that's essentially what a ninja academy is, if a rather lax one. Due to her intense following of the rules, her absolute devotion to her training and volunteerism, and the eagerness she reports violations to the Konoha police force, Soul has made very few friends of her age, leaving her almost a social pariah among her peer group.

	Most of the children her age view Soul as a goody-two shoes and a snitch, but most adults, especially the ones that work in the freight yard where she trains and the police force, see her as an incredibly hard worker and someone who does her best to help others.

Origin Story
	Soul was born as a member of the Lee clan, and the single child to her mother and father. Soul spent the earliest parts of her childhood with very little struggle or want for anything, even though her clan wasn't known for their fabulous wealth. She had little plans for her adult life, mostly enjoying the here and the now. She occasionally got into trouble because of her short temper and hotheadedness, but she never seriously tried to hurt anyone and usually was the one to end up worse off after starting a fight. She was a far cry from her current self, which didn't begin to arise until she was eight.

	At the age of eight, Soul became lost while playing in the woods - she never discovered how far she had gotten away from Konoha, but she didn't return to the village until nearly two days had passed. After collapsing from exhaustion and nearly blacking out, a ninja from Otogakure discovered her - after feeding and giving her water, he had explained that he was a chuunin on a (D-ranked) mission to gather supplies from Konoha and to return back to his village. He had quickly returned Soul to Konoha, despite the fact that he had already gathered the supplies needed to complete his mission. The ninja left without asking for any reward, before Soul could even ask his name. His kindness had left a massive impact on Soul's life and development, sparking her burning passion for becoming a hero and ninja.While I like the idea you have of her being inspired to be a ninja by the action of another ninja, this scenario is too mundane in my opinion, and she would've been found long before she met this guy. Remember that not only do the Byakugan and Sensor ninja exist, but Inuzuka hounds(which would definitely be available to the police force) would easily find her within hours, at most, of her disappearance being reported

	From then on, she trained nearly every day, doing her best to replicate the ninja that had saved her life. Due to the Lee clan having a lack of funds compared to many other clans in Konoha (a large chunk of which were being spent simply to send Soul to the academy)Now while you are given the majority of control over how the clan you chose functions, the gm's found it a bit hard to believe that the entirety of the lee clan would have trouble paying theextra funds to send one student to ninja academy, even if they're one of the poorer clans, simplely because clans tend to have quite a few people in them to shoulder the budget. In all honesty, if you're apart of a clan, then you can probably afford well enough. Someone without a clan, however, would have a significantly harder time of it., Soul was forced to rely on the taijutsu her family was known for in order to accoplish her goals. She entered the academty as soon as possible, and even with intense practice in taijutsu and her physical training, she refused to learn any form of ninjutsu or genjutsu - combined with her poor academics, this quickly gave her some of the lowest grades in her class. She is still seen as one of the worse in her class, both due to her self-imposed restrictions and her unwillingness to use techniques outside of her limited specialization (AKA, literally anything besides Taijutsu and Shurikenjutsu)

Character Development & Conceptualization
	OOC: I'd love to see the massive differences between the Taijutsu of old and the rapid development of technology in the modern age. Even more than this, I'd like to see how an extremly stubborn and rigid character like Soul would interact with other ninja her own age - especially if they went against her moral compass. Or if She was ever put in a position where she was forced to go against her own self-imposed rules in order to save people.

	IC: Soul wants to help as many people as humanly possible, viewing her life as a gift from the ninja that saved her life - she could care less about ninja ranks, and only pursues higher ranks in order to take higher ranking missions, that could help more people. She wishes to eventually help all the people of Konoha accomplish their dreams, but even more than this, she wishes to find and thank the ninja that had saved her life and led her down the path to being a true hero. 

	Conceptualization: While initially starting off very similar to both Rock Lee and Might Guy, I tried to differentiate her heavily by making her motivations far more different. Rather than trying to be a "ninja that only uses taijutsu," I attempted to use the lack of prevalence that the Lee clan holds to excuse the lack of focus on other jutsu - in the modern day, learning many jutsu is very expensive due to commercialization, and some people simply can't afford that. This is exemplified in the fact that Soul's skill in Ninjutsu and Genjutsu is never mentioned - she simply does not care if she is skilled in their use, as she cannot afford to learn any even if she was. While both her and Rock Lee have strong moral compasses, they differentiate heavily in personality - Rock Lee is polite, refuses to give up, and is not above using dangerous taijutsu on his opponents (seriously, the front and reverse lotus are ridiculously deadly). Soul, meanwhile, is brash, quick to anger and steadfast in her morals, her strict training caused more by her extremely potent discipline and adherence to her self-imposed rules, rather than Rock Lee's motivation and perseverance to be a ninja.No issues here, I actually really like the idea of this character and think she provides some interesting counter-points in relation to the rest of the cast. Honestly, if you wanted to keep the poverty angle, then maybe making her clanless might work better. Also makes her the Sakura of the group in that she doesn't have clan backing like everyone else, which could be explored in interesting ways. Food for thought, but it really depends on what aspects of the concept that you feel is more important to the charrie over all
Triple T's

Talents

Mechanics
Perhaps "Repairs" would be a better descriptor, but Soul's skill in fixing and operating machinery far exceeds her skill in fixing most other things. Due to her devoting all time not used for training to help out the people of Konoha, Soul has a large degree of experience with repairing things that most villagers were too lazy or confused to fix themselves - usually things such as doors or creaky doorsteps. Her real experience comes from the Freight Yard she trains in - the employees there have used her as cheap labor as she would work for a simple "Thanks" - as a result, she has become very intimate with complex machinery, which is jarring considering she is not the sharpest tool in the shed. Okay, now we're getting into the bigger issues with the sheet. It doesn't make sense for a girl of 13 years to be able to fix things like complex machinery, nor do I believe the freight workers would let a little girl do their job for them, for reasons of safety and accountability, if nothing else. Plus, this connection with the freight guys isn't mentioned at all in her backstory, and while I get not adding every little detail, this seems like something that should've been touched on in the bio, at least a little. But ye, I'd probably bump this town to her knowing her way around a toolbox because of how much she helps people fix things, but her having similar skills to a mechanic doesn't really work, not with this reasoning anyway.

Taijutsu
It is no surprise that a member of the Lee clan is skilled in Taijutsu - compared to most members of her clan, Soul is not especially unique in her taijutsu skill or physical traits. Despite this, compared to the average ninja, she is a taijutsu specialist of extreme prowess, if only due to the fact that most ninja don't focus on taijutsu as heavily as their ninjutsu. She refuses to learn fatal techniques, as killing is against her moral code.Tone this bit down a bit. She's a 13 yr old girl that has yet to actually graduate, so saying she's more skilled than the avg. ninja, which includes both Chunin and Jonin, is a bit much for a character who isn't supposed to be a prodigy. I get that she's supposed to share similarities with Lee, but Lee was a prodigy of taijutsu himself. In essence, you need to limit the scope of her abilities so that she can be better than the avg. student or genin in this field.

Physical Fitness
Soul is incredibly devoted to her physical training, and is supported entirely in this effort by her Clan members. She had been training ever since she was saved by a ninja from Otogakure at the age of 8, and has trained 5-6 days a week ever since, usually for 6 hours or more. At her current level of physique, she puts the vast majority of ninja to shame physically - her large degree of strength and moderate skill in shurikenjutsu has allowed her access to a very unique fighting style. She is incredibly fast, to the point where few can match her speed - and her large amount of stamina makes those that can keep up with her unlikely to do so for long. Same as above, this needs to be toned down to be more in line with the power level we're going with here.

Pain tolerance/Durability
Even with her Physical Fitness being ridiculous for someone her age, Soul is exemplary when it comes to the amount of pain and damage she can take without falling unconscious. She had been especially focused this trait during her training, upon realizing the danger being a shinobi presented. While she rarely uses the Eight Gates outside of her training, this Pain Tolerance has allowed her to fight far longer than most people should, and minor injuries are sometimes completely ignored - The fact that she cannot feel paper cuts anymore was a source of great amusement to younger children in the village. This freakish resilience to pain has made her a natural Eight Gates user.
Okay, a lot of the GM's were really iffy on this ability, mainly because it's one of those weird ones that can be abused. Not only that but unless her nerves don't function properly, having this level of pain tolerance naturally doesn't make sense. Toughness and Pain tolerance are things you build up natural throughout your life, not something you're born with. A better way to run this would be that "her training has made her tougher as well as strong due to the wear and tear on her body, so she can take quite a beating" or something of that nature. And even then it might be a little . . . iffy. honestly, I think that being a Strong Fist taijutsu specialist and someone attempting to learn 8 gates already implies a certain level of toughness without explicitly stating it.

Shurikenjutsu
The only form of Ranged combat that Soul is willing to use, she is fairly average when it comes to normal shurikenjutsu - her real talent comes when she uses heavier ranged weapons. Due to her intense training, she is physically strong enough to throw far heavier objects than others would be able to, with similar speed and accuracy to those using lighter weapons. This has resulted in her using ridiculously sized objects that she finds mid battle as ranged weapons.I wanna say that's not how throwing things works, like, at all, but also I realize that this is an anime-based rp, so physics are a bit relative. . . but only a bit, in this case. Can she lift? Yes. Can she lift 'ridiculously sized' things and chuck them as quickly and accurately as a shuriken? Not even close. Like with everything else, ya need to tone it down a few notches and try to keep it more within realistic parameters. We're newbie genin, so we ain't going to be doing any really crazy shenanigans like that, not yet at least.

 Tools
Weights
Weights, one of the cornerstones in tools for the Lee clan. They are worn around the ankles, and weigh enough where Soul only moves slightly faster than other students her age. When doing upper body exercises and practicing her punching, she wears the weights on her arms instead. In serious situations, Soul will use her Shurikenjutsu skills to throw the weights at opponents, usually when they are too far away to hit with taijutsu. Her weights are only removed in the event of a serious fight that has very high stakes or results in the suffering of other people.
Weights probably aren't 'Lee' specific tools, and just know that you aren't going to be moving at Rock Lee speeds when they're removed. As stated before, Rock Lee was a taijutsu prodigy and also, most importantly, had already been a genin training under Might guy for a full year. Soul can wear them and she can get noticeably faster when she takes them off, but nothing drastic and crazy as we saw in Lee v. Gara.

Senbon
Senbon are metal needles, pointed at both ends. While mostly seeing use in medical ninjutsu and assassination, Soul uses them as a ranged weapon when no improvised weapons are found. She carries dozens, if not hundreds on her person at all times.This is more of a personal issue, but why Senbon? The amount of precision and medical know-how required for them to be even the tiniest bit useful is way beyond anything you've stated for her. And without that medical know-how, and since Soul seems unlikely to use poison, than Senbon are more of an annoyance than a threat, as she can't really throw out a barrage of hundreds of senbon with just two hands, and they would hardly even be that much more effective if she could. I think a better tool for Soul would likely be either something that helps her taijutsu somehow, Fuma Shuriken, or really anything that doesn't require as much precision and skill to use as Senbon.

Techniques

Dynamic Entry
Leaf Gale
Leaf Whirlwind


Shadow of the Dancing Leaf


Eight Gates
(Soul is barely able to open the 3rd gate during her training, and she is unable to use the 3rd gate in combat at all due to the stress on her body.)
Strong Fist

Miscs

Soul's strict adherence to her self-imposed restrictions and her refusal to use ninjutsu or genjutsu has caused her to be one of the weaker members of her class, despite her incredibly powerful taijutsu and physical form.

Soul refuses to use the Eight Gates unless people's lives are at stake.
Okay so, 3 gates is a bit much, though I don't believe you for making the mistake of thinking it'd be okay since the only examples are Rock Lee and his Son, Metal. That said, Lee's a special case and Metal is part of Boruto, which kinda screws over the power scale in a way a lot fo the GM's don't really like. I personally think that Soul being able to open 2 gates as her highest level would be fine, but as a whole, the GM team to want it lowered to 1 gate as your max. Along with that, you need to give a better reason for someone teaching her how to open said Gates. 

Remember that Guy was chastised by Kakashi for his recklessness in teaching such things to a genin, and the reasons for that were put on display after his fight with Gara. Something people seem to forget is how dangerous this technique is to the user, and that teaching something like this to a child would probably lead to no small amount of trouble. . . however, another thing people seem to forget is that the 8 gates aren't a jutsu, but just a result of putting in a large amount of physical effort. Now that doesn't mean someone could accidentally learn to learn all of the gates, you definitely need someone to lead you through the process of opening most of the gates, but for the first one, I think it'd be fine if that was opened due to her clan's intense physical training, but again, only that one. To learn anymore, she'd have to find a teacher, and she'd currently be in the process of trying to open the second gate even if she did.

 However, that's only my opinion on the whole thing, so if you want to get the gates for certain, I'd probably play it safe and make sure she had someone to help her unlock that first gate, despite the risks it can have on her health.
Character Theme


In conclusion, I really like the ideas behind this sheet and think you have an interesting character here, one that is still in love with the fantasy of being a ninja, despite the current trends. That's something no other character really brings to the table and makes her an excellent contrast to others we have in the running. That said, the implementation of all your ideas needs to be reworked, specifically in terms of her abilities and her motivation to be a ninja. The whole incident doesn't make too much sense upon close inspection, so I think choosing something more focuses on helping people aspect(perhaps one of her family is a ninja and inspires her to help people) would work better for the sheet as a whole.
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