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Well, back in feudal times you were grown up with 16 if I remember correctly. Younger rulers were not unheard of either. It is how monarchy sets itself up for disaster. When the previous generation is dead, the heirs might only be 2. They still get placed on the throne, even if the power rests elsewhere. It very well may be that this coup was not of the brothers design, perhaps there was some kind of bigshot involved behind the scenes, waiting for a moment when brother and sister had a falling out and made use of the boy's anger to gain the realm. Not everything will be as it seems.
Personally I rather like the image of a gentle queen, it will contrast nicely with the backstabbing nobles and vicious warriors. Not to mention, nothing is impossible to corrupt. Especially under such extreme circumstances.
Here is my CS, which will in no way live up to what I just typed.
Derp, about making your character more indepth, something that might help is a summary of his time with the mercenaries till now, maybe a specific story from that time, for example how his subtle nature once aided the band on a mission, how his love of women and drink placed him in trouble or how his fear of his brother has influenced meetings with members of nobility or knights. So far you have given us his origin story, but things have happened since then. Events that shaped him from a man who only ever really brawled to one who could be relied upon in serious battle by his comrades. Since this RP is for a large part about the mercenaries, you should try to establish your role within the mercenaries more clearly. If you were a fresh recruit, your history would work, but your character is old and thus implied to be more of a veteran.

Adding more depth to his personality and skills would probably help too. For example what topics anger him. The mercenaries will undoubtedly already have come across some of them already, with bad results, so tripping people up with that would be unfitting. Also whether his respect toward authority would prevent him voicing his outrage at those topics or not. How he is calculating should probably also be pointed out. Does he just not let emotions influence his decisions or is he calculating in other ways, always looking for escape routes and scape goats, no matter the situation or something like that? This can also be worked into his skills, naturally stealthy can mean, in my opinion, two things. Either being able to sneak well and having a good instincts for creaking floorboards and such or being unremarkable, forgettable. Sharp mind comes back to what I said about calculating, specify in what way he is sharp minded. What mental skills does this apply to? Social situations? Scouting? Both of these take a sharp mind, quick to notice things that seem strange, but they are still completely different fields. On that note, he spent a lot of time brawling, so does he have a reputation? Could he come to an underground fighting tournament and get recognized as "Theo the Dirty Drunk" or whatever?

There are a lot of questions one can raise about characters. Most of these will remain unanswered in the CS and most of those again may never come up, but make use of these things nonetheless. Every little piece of trivia can add to the depth of your character and be used by others in the RP. If you do not note how Theo acts drunk, people will be a lot less likely to have their characters note his tendency to dance on top of defeated opponents while singing nursery rhymes.
Since I assume Joachim is cleared, please remember to add him to the first post.

That aside, I would like to ask about gender equality. Since there are a number of female warriors among the mercenaries, I assume it it differs from feudal europe?
Since you have a section for accepted characters, would you prefer to have character sheets sent to you through PM for approval or is throwing them into the OOC alright?
I will have to see if my schedule permits it but if that is the case, I would very much like to see where this will go.
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