CallaLily180 — Roleplayer Guild

Tearstone said
We're writing in typical story format, in third person limited, rather than first person/first person omniscient.

Since clearly you, yourself, have not been in a zombie apocalypse, nor are ever likely to be.I would say "when did -you- do all this?" but I'll be nice.

There's some grammatical or spelling errors in a few places but no big deal.

A paragraph or two is acceptable, more is usually good, usually somewhere around 3 to 5, so don't be concerned with trying to hit the RP Guild's typed character limit per post, each time you post.

The overall length is probably more appropriate to Advanced, which is great. I would say that with the few things I find wrong, this is probably High-Casual, which is an unofficial designation here.

If this character is merely a well-trained lawyer (per your character sheet).. Why fly for a murder case?

She must really like to smoke, a lot. You reference it a lot.

I do have a question about the camping/hunting trip - Did they get jumped on the way out, or on the way home? And how close to town were they?---

To answer your questions in order;

1. These are all memories. That is why I wrote them in first person.

2. Not sure what exactly you mean on this one but I wrote all of the back-story to explain the trip.

3. That is one thing I should explain. English isn't my forte and I'm not a good writer.(I know right?)

4. I was wondering what the exact limit was and since I usually don't write much I wanted to have something big for good measure.

5. I did little research on this part, my fault.

6. She very much does, she is fully addicted to it.

7. They were right outside of the city. About half a mile out at most.

I think I will do a quick edit. I apologize.

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