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I completely hear you in terms of personality and such. Most of the time I tend to fill that in IC myself.
Alright, Ciphra, Allen asked me to break down your character sheet. I wont decline or accept your character, as Allen wants to go into detail about your power himself (whether in public or via PMs I do not know), but I'll give some pointers on your character from what I can see.

Your appearance is lacking heavily. I would recommend reviewing some of the sheets made by Allen or Shade as they usually cover just about every aspect for physical appearance, from head shape to scars and everything in between. Personally, these two are my standard when making a human character. Your personality section is also lacking in that your character doesn't seem like a very open person, and a very two dimensional character that is more interested in himself than anything else. I get that he seeks friends and all that, but if he is hesitant to interact with everyone what incentive do other characters to talk to him. I fear for your sake that your character will be left behind due to this roleplay being so heavy on character interaction.

I also feel like you're trying a bit hard here, with being blind, and having amnesia. I doubt you really have the experience required to play such a part due to the mental complications that amnesia can create later on (depression, bipolar disorder, etc). If you really want to go that route, then by all means. But I usually recommend steering clear of mental disability as they tend to be hard to translate to writing if you do have experience with the subject, and are even harder to even do in a remotely accurate fashion if you haven't experienced the condition yourself.

Oh, and we already have a character named Chris. This one's optional, but I would recommend changing it to avoid confusion in the future.

With that, I'll let Allen make the final verdict.
Mr Allen J said
Come to think of it, I should also get around to updating Valjean's sheet with all the people he hates/thinks are inferior to him.


i.e: Everyone

Henry's at a good stopping point. So I'mma chill.
"And jesus man, you need to shave. You look like you have pubes growing out of your face." -Henry to Chris, 2014

We need to make a quotes list of the beautiful things that are written in this RP.
Oh, speaking of you Inferno

I found a song that fits Chris fairly well.

Mr Allen J said
I'll wait for Jazzy before I make another post.


Posteeeeeeeeededededededed.
(Moving Theresa and Dana with Allen's permission)

"I hear you Chris, but don't go around looking for fights. You're in no condition to do that right now." Henry said, looking Chris over. "And jesus man, you need to shave. You look like you have pubes growing out of your face." He said, giving his one armed friend a smile, and nodding when he decided to catch up with Vespera. Chris liked her, he had a good taste in women alright, he hoped Vespera wouldn't be too tough on the poor guy. Then again, Vespera was a woman of many surprises. "Alright, stay out of trouble Chris. Don't get him lost again Vespera." Henry said, nodding to the woman before taking Dana's wheelchair and wheeling her off in the direction of the Administrative building, with Theresa following behind. He assumed that Vera and Sam were close behind. He got lost in his thoughts and let his body run on automatic. He knew the way to the Administrative building by rote memory after so long living here.

He wondered what Vespera would do if they actually hooked up, and he humored himself in thinking about her eating Chris like a spider... or was that a praying mantis? He caught himself thinking about his close friend being eaten and then questioned his own sanity if he found that funny, even in he didn't realize what he thought at first. Dana, Theresa, Vera, and Sam must've thought it was really humorous to see his facial expression turn from thoughtful, to mildly humored to mortified, and then back to contemplative within a few seconds. By this point they were arriving at the building anyways. He looked over his shoulder to see Chris and Vespera were on their way. Good, no one got lost on the way here. Less work for him, and less paperwork if something went wrong since he was overlooking the students at the time. "Alrighty we're here." Henry said, parking Dana's chair by the doors. "Everyone who's a returning student, you can zone out now, you know what to do." He said. "For those of you who are new... Sam... head on in and talk to the desk clerk. Your room mate will be your gender, and your ages will be within about a year of each other. You can also be paired with a returning or new student. If you are paired with a returning student, make sure to ask them about locations." He said, before snapping his claws together to catch anyone who had zoned out's attention like he instructed. "Alright, boring is almost over, but everyone has to hear this part. Sorry guys, protocol." He said, giving a sheepish smile before digging into his pocket and pulling a little slip of paper out and reading from it. "Class will begin at 9:15AM tomorrow morning, so you will want to plan waking up accordingly with your morning schedule. If you are unsure of where to go, ask another student, or your room mate if they are returning. If neither are available, staff will be in strategic locations around the campus and will happily direct you to the location you need to go if you need help." He said, finishing off.

"I wont be working tomorrow, the other Biochemistry teacher will be in the classroom, so I'll be around campus if anyone needs me. I don't know where I'll be yet, but you'll know me when you see me." the lizard said, giving a closed-mouth smile. "Alright everyone, head on in. If I don't see you later today, I'll most likely see you tomorrow."
I would think to distinguish dialogue from narration.
Henry be swagin' it up.
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