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    1. Jazzy 12 yrs ago

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Take all the time you need. No rush bro.
All right Eklispe, let’s get to work.

Unfortunately I have to say that your sheet REALLY isn’t up to par with most of the others. There are many errors that we require you to fix if you want to participate. I understand you might be upset hearing this, but this is the advanced section, and we have high expectations.

First off, the picture doesn’t work. We normally prefer worded out descriptions rather than pictures. It’s almost an unspoken rule that a picture can accompany a description to provide extra support or to solidify the description you provided and give others a mental image of your person. Using a picture alone, in my opinion, is lazy and shows a lack of care for the character you are creating.

This RP isn’t anime either. You can have green hair if you really must, but if has to be dyed and your character will be seen as weird for it.

Your personality section is heavily lacking, more details there please.

Your history is… iffy. I’d talk to Allen about that one.

Your power at first glance is okay, but upon further inspection it shows to be not really acceptable. I like how you went for something that’s not entirely combative based, but I’d prefer you make up your mind on what its capabilities are. What it’s capable of from what you’ve seen is far from mundane. That’s LIFE SAVING. Mundane is semi useless. And given it’d ability to produce weaponry as you say, what is stopping you from just producing a sword, or a laser gun, or some other object with no drawbacks? The power doesn’t really have a weakness and isn’t detailed enough for us to make a good call on it.

Refer to the characters Allen, He Who Walks Behind, Leonerdo, or myself make. We try to make sheets that we want to see others make. Try to go into the detail we went into.
He cant be taken seriously ever.
Your character is allowed to have offensive capabilities, just don't make everything about their power battle orientated. Characters like Henry (my own) has a lot of offensive strengths, but his true strength lies in his ability to survive over fight. He's a cockroach per say.

If you want to go with Lithuanian princess guy, be my guest though. That sounds hilarious.
Describes Allen perfectly.
Kynapon said
Well, I posted the Cs... Now it's time for you to tell me everything that's wrong with it. Please do so because I'm cringing at it myself.


Much better thank some stuff we're gotten. It lacks some detail, but I think you'll flesh her out a bit more as the RP goes along. The history kinda cuts off, but it's not that big of a problem.

You have my thumbs up.
Leonerdo said
I am offended.


Good.
We dont always post about them in the OOC. Most of the members are in a skype group were we converse and stuff. Where we collab is posted in there far more often than not. If you want to join in just PM Allen your Skype username.
Most of our posts now are collaborations between multiple people. If you make a character and want to join into a collab we can help you real time with your writing if you need it.

What your job is right now is to make a charcater and work with us with any problems we find. We're looking for less combative powers right now. If the sheet meets our standards, you're good to go. I'd recommend reading either Allen, Shade, or my own sheets if you want examples of the detail we look for in sheets.
Schradinger said
I'm sorry guys, but I don't think I'm going to be able to continue this RP.


Sorry to hear that. It was nice having you around though. You're welcome back any time.
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