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Abaddon looked at Pete and let out a hiss. It wasn't a threatening one though, merely a sound of acknowledgement and slight surprise. This was one of the metas that was close friends of another hero named Starbird. While Abaddon and Starbird did manage to work together, the two were uneasy about each other due to a difference in methods and ideologies. How was that cosmic idiot doing anyway?

"Fine, but just remember that I do things my own way. If a couple of suckers need to get gutted or eaten, don't interfere."

Abaddon crawled into the building, still clinging to the ceiling where Persona was at. He'd distract him and hope his new ally would get the message.

"Come on man, you're holding up the line! I need to cash in on my checks and have money to give to your mom at the club tonight!"

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Automaton said
Do you mind if i re-write this Entry?.

Rewriting it would be a good idea. Also, be sure to try and improve the grammar a little bit. Punctuations such as commas and periods where they need to be is important. On top of this, try to work on detail, it makes for a more interesting story and character and makes it more enjoyable to interact with your character cor other RPers.

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I just realize how much I sound like an English teacher...

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Barioth said
Also on the character interaction issue, if your character is looking for a news job, I'm sure information on a crime that has been blocked off by the police would be useful * nudge nudge*

Problem is is that some reporters were allowed special entry to get something out. Why didn't I notice the problems with this -_-?
Ok, we'll make it to where they were only allowed to say "Hory shet, explosion! But the cops are working on what happened."

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Personas ability could be more like Chameleon's ability, where he can assume the shape of a person but then need some bit of studying as to how that person thinks and acts to imitate them perfectly.
Either this or the DNA sample thing.

I however don't really see much of a problem with the current ability, so we'll just let it slide until further explanation.

As for the interaction.... yeah, it is a bit of a problem right now, and this RP requires interaction in order to be what it's supposed to be. Still thinking of what to do. Also, keep in mind that this is the beginning of the RP, we're barely on like page 2, so things might get off to a slow start.
Perhaps your characters can have past history with each other? That way it'd be easier for them to interact and have grounds for doing so.

Automaton said
Name:James AatroxAlias:ExicutionerGender: Male Age:27Powers/Abilities:Regular Red lantern abilities except he can use constructs (explained in Bio)Personality: James is a very quiet and passive person, not really saying what he feels and letting people get away with things. He often dosent show his feelings to people, he wont really express his feelings at all really he just pushes them all down inside and hopes someone will ask him if he's okay, and even when people do he says he's okay he hates that about himself. Backstory: " Well...I got this ring one night while I was walking home from work, on the way home this other red lantern just grabs a guy off the street and rips him and half. Ya, like actually in half. Anyway, the guy was walking with his daughter. She is crying and screaming as the red lantern approaches her. That day I found my girlfriend having sex with another guy, and I got fired so I was already angry but this...To murder a father right in front of his daughter. I hated him the one of those rings come down and slips over my finger. And here we are now." Alignment Status: His own/ the red lantern corpslook: with ring on: http://www.deviantart.com/art/Red-Lantern-3-159023297without: http://th04.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/326/b/1/cute_black_guy_by_temaruu_nara-d5lv8xf.png

Now as for this...
I'm sorry but I think I'll be rejecting this. I think it's mainly the writing that bugs me, and the fact that the Red Lanterns are portrayed as killing machines that will kill basically anything for no reason. That may have been the case before, but seeing as how they now have rational thought and are actually all about chaotic justice (bringing punishment upon the guilty), this is an inaccurate portayal.

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Jeez, I think at this rate we might as well try and get this thread moved to the casual section...

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Scipio was well away from the coffeee shop area and was now more in the nicer parts of this particular town of Arcus. Despite this, news of an explosion at an old apartment complex reached him through the large screens on some of the buildings around.

"Sheesh, well that sucks..."

"#Perhaps we should go back to the site later today and do some forensic inspections of our own? See what's worth bombing an old, practically empty building."

"Good idea."

Just as Scipio was thinking, an explosion occurred. He could even see the flames of the rising fireball from where he was standing. Quickly, he jumped into action, sneaking into a secluded alley to allow the symbiote to shift over him.

"#The bomber?"

"No, this is an explosion big enough to bring down a whole building. The one at Starbird's death site-"

"#Was only confined to a specific area. Okay."

Abaddon leaped onto the side of the wall and climbed all the way to the roof of the building.

BOOM

Another explosion.

"Christ, was today the day all the villains decide to go apeshit?!"

Abaddon ziplined and swung from building to building, perch to perch. Those were controlled explosions done by someone with a remote. But where?! A couple of gunshots alerted him to the location. A bank.

"There, at the Gelden Bank!"

Abaddon made his way there, clinging to the wall just above the building to assess the situation before going in.

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Automaton said
If this is still accepting i am willing to make a Rage lantern :DDD.

This is still accepting, so feel free to post a CS. I've got a Rage Lantern as well, so it'd be interesting to see the two interact and work together or something.

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Hoy, I think I have an idea on how to make Starbird's death significant to the first major plot I have planned for this.

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Master Crim said
Dont worry, if there is nothing really going on I can make something happen if it is okay. It will be later tho, if you mind waiting then...

Heh, "making things happen" was the point of this RP! Like I said in the OOC, you guys are all free to start arcs/plots and events of your own. If you're a villain, blow some shit up or something, or put your next big scheme into motion.
Heroes can do the same in starting things, though in this case I'd assume it'd be introducing a nemesis and then gathering help.

@Barioth: I've done the same, and the filler character was kind of like Starbird, except his name was Obliterate.

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Police cars rushed to the site where Starbird had been killed in. Part of the apartment was ruined by a recent explosion, so the authorities proceeded into the building with caution. After a cautious walk up the stairs, they came upon a shocking scene: the corpse of Starbird and his wife. Could this really be happening? Could somebody really have killed a metahuman known for his cosmic abilites with nothing but a bullet?! Everybody was suddenly on guard, fearing that the perpetrator might still be around somewhere watching.
The apartment area became a restricted zone in no time as the authorities blocked it off. A team of news reporters arrived as well, gaining special permission to enter to report of Starbird's death....

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Yeah... I've realized a bit too late that maybe there should have been a starting event to set things off...

Sorry guys, first time GM noob moments and all. I'll see what I can do...