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Just a fish out of water, looking for his next drink.

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Guys, sorry to report that my absence is due to a glitch with all my Internet browsers. Can't access any page besides Google. Will try and resolve fast and get this rolling!
Jasonhero said
What exactly is out of place? So I can target that and fix it?


The age in comparison for what he's accomplished for starters. This "One fateful day, a droid patrol led by some trandoshan mercs. Before the two could react, Jason's master was shot dead." When i read this i have a very hard time imagining what happened on that day, a key point in your characters history. The fact that he spent so much time with the commandos, never being sent back to the temple after being saved. How he still calls himself a Jedi even though he has not had any contact with the order in so long.

I want detail, i want to know what your characters been through. I want to have a feel for how your character will react to what is planned. A lot of your history leaves much to be desired, and i hope you can flesh out your character more. ;)

And Slim, he fits in the scheme of things ;)
Iridious, welcome aboard.
Slim Shady, even though i hate the similarities with Revan, i will welcome you aboard.
ACCEPTED
Jasonhero, I hate to say this but i would like you to re-write your CS, It's not that it's written bad, it's just that it feels out of place in the scheme of things. You dont have to change everything, just add some continuity to it.
Good to see some CS's coming in this fast. I will sit down and look em over now.
Clicky! :) Get them CS's up!


Long long long ago, in a galaxy far away, and divided from this reality, is a place where things went quite differently for the Republic. Now as many of you know, Mace Windu failed to cut down the Sith Lord Palpatine, but what if he had? What if Anikin controlled his anger and let Windu deliver the final blow of justice? Logically a lot would have changed. Order 66 would never have been given and thus the Jedi thrived. The CIS leaders stationed on the planet Mustafar, would not have been killed by Anakin and without the fall of the CIS and the deactivation of there droid army, the Clone Wars would continue on. Worse, knowing the CIS, their manufacturing would increase over time and practically triple their armada in a span of five years. Then of course with their new found strength, they would dare to attack the Capital Planet of Coruscant itself!

This is where our legacy begins. As the droids fall to our planet, and their ships set fire to our skies, the Jedi and the 717th clone division struggle to hold the Jedi temple. At the same time as more and more men are cut down by blaster fire, the clones make a brave attempt to recapture the airfield where they can take the fight to the enemy. Will you as a jedi chose to help them? Will you defend the sacred temple? Or as a clone will you battle your way to the airfield and try to take the battle spaceward? Or do you believe the Jedi are the key and rush to assist them? Dividing your forces?

One choice can affect many lives, the force sings through everyone even to those who can't hear it. A critical moment approaches, what will you do?

Decide.

Hello everyone. This is Nariata, formerly Tankian and formerly Zeoul here bringing you one of the first RP's i mostly wrote. I say mostly because i need to give Chii her due for her help in organizing and fixing many of the errors i made in the process of writing this all those years ago. Now, for the RP the story is clear enough but i will allow you, the player, some freedom in creating your character. You can play as a Jedi, Clone, bounty hunter, sith-esque character and so on.

CS
Name:
Age:
Sex:
Affiliation: (Jedi - GAR - Sith - CIS)
Physical Description: (You can add a photo, just no Anime)
Mental Description:
History:
Equipment:(Everything that i would need to know. You CAN add one crystal to a light saber BUT only one, and along with the benefit, list a shortcoming it creates)
Other: (Whatever else i would need to know)





What has happened



ATTENTION:

http://titanpad.com/Nariata is my titanpad
I agree. Soon moving to OOC when i get the CS made up,so in like 30 minutes ;)
LordZell said
Must we be a clone or jedi couldn't we be a CIS leader leading the charge? Also I find it hard the believe that the CIS would have regained it's strength after the death of the leader Dooku and General Greivous and no inside news about the republic from the chancellor aka Darth Sidious.


You could be. Hence the leeway in the characters, if you want to be a CIS leader than good on ya! I have a set a solid story inplace that will explain the latter part of your post when the IC goes up, remember this is a very different Star Wars universe than the normal one.

I don't care foryour skill level nor your choices in characters(well to an extent) , all i care for is dedication.


Long long long ago, in a galaxy far away, and divided from this reality, is a place where things went quite differently for the Republic. Now as many of you know, Mace Windu failed to cut down the Sith Lord Palpatine, but what if he had? What if Anikin controlled his anger and let Windu deliver the final blow of justice? Logically a lot would have changed. Order 66 would never have been given and thus the Jedi thrived. The CIS leaders stationed on the planet Mustafar, would not have been killed by Anakin and without the fall of the CIS and the deactivation of there droid army, the Clone Wars would continue on. Worse, knowing the CIS, their manufacturing would increase over time and practically triple their armada in a span of five years. Then of course with their new found strength, they would dare to attack the Capital Planet of Coruscant itself!

This is where our legacy begins. As the droids fall to our planet, and their ships set fire to our skies, the Jedi and the 717th clone division struggle to hold the Jedi temple. At the same time as more and more men are cut down by blaster fire, the clones make a brave attempt to recapture the airfield where they can take the fight to the enemy. Will you as a jedi chose to help them? Will you defend the sacred temple? Or as a clone will you battle your way to the airfield and try to take the battle spaceward? Or do you believe the Jedi are the key and rush to assist them? Dividing your forces?

One choice can affect many lives, the force sings through everyone even to those who can't hear it. A critical moment approaches, what will you do?

Decide.

Hello everyone. This is Nariata, formerly Tankian and formerly Zeoul here bringing you one of the first RP's i mostly wrote. I say mostly because i need to give Chii her due for her help in organizing and fixing many of the errors i made in the process of writing this all those years ago. Now, for the RP the story is clear enough but i will allow you, the player, some freedom in creating your character. You can play as a Jedi, Clone, bounty hunter, sith-esque character and so on.

This will be high-casual and all, so any takers.
I have some ideas,let me write something up.
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