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Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

@deadpixel101: Once again, accepted.

@Descartes: I'll need you to alter a few things to make this character mesh with the setting a bit better. As I told Jerkchicken, civil disputes don't make sense in this setting since everybody has much larger problems to worry about than differing ideologies. Even in a sprawling metropolis, people would still be struggling just to keep the place standing against the wrath of the gods. Now, if you wanted to connect it to the gods, making the foreigners people who want to try submitting to appease their wrath, then this might work better. Or, perhaps they are outright under the influence of the gods and are carrying out their destructive work. The divine light wiping out the monsters wouldn't happen in this world. I have plans for the gods, so right now there can be no divine intervention. How does he maintain his drunken behavior, or even his existence in the village for that matter? The village has a bartering economy. He offers no goods or services, yet he is somehow obtaining what I called a scarce luxury. Trader visits would be very rare, and they wouldn't be lugging around mass quantities of alcohol on the rare occasions that they do visit. Perhaps he could use his healing skills to be a doctor. And, there's two more minor things. I'm going to ask you to nerf your sword a bit. Either limit the substances it can cut through, or reduce the time it glows for to something around a 5-minute range. 30 minutes is a long time for unlimited cutting power. Lastly, just put a bit more description into the shrine.

@Gamerdude369: Accepted

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Yea, people pretty much know each other. The population of 500 includes the children and the elderly. And even if a character is intentionally isolated, there are so few of those people that they would be known for being isolated, like the "weirdo brewers" we have in the works.

Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

Sure. As long as you promise that you'll use both of them equally.

Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

Well, thank you for the effort deadpixel. At least you proved that my expectations can be met.

And Guy Senpai, with that, you are accepted.

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@deadpixel101: Accepted

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@Mayadere: Accepted

@Jerkchicken: Thank you for elaborating on your POI. Now, address the issues with the history I previously mentioned. Also, what kind of magical power does the belt have?

Naruto: Of Compassion and Tyranny

Apparently the rebel attack had gone favorably, for before long the Imperial soldiers began retreating. Those poor souls that had no clue how to defeat Ryozan were only to happy for an excuse to flee, but for most of them, engaging Tōketsuha had sealed their fate. "Kōri Kasui no Jutsu!" Ryozan made a few quick seals, and a dozen spikes of ice emerged from the ground. The soldiers were correct in thinking that they could outrun him so long as he wore that macabre armor, but they were mistaken in turning their backs to him. With a single gesture, the spikes flew out of the ground, and into the backs of seven fleeing soldiers, which served as motivation for their comrades to flee a bit more quickly. And that was the end of the battle for Ryozan. He could see some shinobi giving pursuit, but he decided not to join them lest he interfere with a sensitive operation and earn himself a permanent exile.

With a sigh, he released his Seiryu no Kawa and began walking back to the entrance to the village where he would wait for Takeo to give him his answer. The ice melted off of his skin, leaving a bloody puddle beneath him. As he returned to what he hoped he would still be able to call home, he leaned against the wall next to the village gate and awaited the Jounin commander. If Takeo wished to hear him, Ryozan would be in plain sight.

Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

@Parser: Thank you for elaborating on the POI. Just put the bits about trading booze with the villagers, being a weirdo, and his training in the History section and your profile should be good.

@Professor_Wyvern: Like Parser, put the bits about being an old weirdo in the History, and elaborate on the POI. A nice descriptive paragraph like Parser wrote will do.

@Mayadere: looks good so far.

Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

Jerkchicken said
I thought the god war was some mythical event background event that happened way way way long ago. Also the underground part of the swap is a simple cellar

The benevolent gods are the myth. The cruel and oppressive gods are the current reality. Kado Village is a safe-haven from that. As I wrote in the details, it has a population of about 500 people, and the current society has only been around for 100 years. And if there is nothing notable about this underground of the swamp, then perhaps you shouldn't tantalize my imagination by calling it a "secret underground" and nothing else. lol. Still, the POIs need to have a good amount of detail, like the three I provided.

Guardians of Kado Village (Anime Inspired Fantasy)

@Professor Wyvern: Pretty much the same review as Parser's. What information can he garner from talking to inanimate objects? Elaborate on how his life choice of exile has affected his position in the village, and describe the hut in detail.

And a question for the both of you: the purpose of the points of interest is to add life and atmosphere to the village. Are the still and the woodcarving hut so significant that they can accomplish this? If so, write about the relationship to the village.