Hidden 5 yrs ago 5 yrs ago Post by Genon
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@SimpleWriter Okay, I finished my Quirk so I decided to post a WIP sheet to work it out with you. I decided to combine the scream element with the physical enhancement idea, but made the scream a consequence of abusing his body by storing up too much sound for too long. This makes the collateral damage a suitably rare event, making its dangerous aspects justified, as it's basically a superpower meltdown. Is his Quirk acceptable as written?

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@Genon

You need to end it with [/hider] in order to actually hide it. Should look like this:

[hider=Alex Wade]

Your CS Here

[/hider]


You also have an errant color code that's going to mess up your hiders, since RPGuild is going to mistake your "hider" as a "color" and end up breaking the hider wholesale.
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@Ryonara

Oh, I actually didn't see this. Hadn't refreshed the page yet, and I ended up fixing it on my own. Thanks for the advice though!
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@Genon I'll check that tomorrow. It's getting late here, I'm heading to bed. :P

@Tenma Tendo The second one seems easier to make a Quirk out of. It actually sounds like a good MHA Quirk alright ! I'd like to see a CS of such a concept !
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@Aerandir Hello there! :)

Here are the weaknesses to both;

1. I was thinking that their body would be more accustom is living in the water, so they'd constantly have to keep themselves hydrated and the like. Using the second part of their quirk would result in losing water a lot fast than they would normally. The body parts they change into water are still their bones and flesh so losing water (via fire or extreme heat or something) would be the same as losing said body part until enough water is ingested to reform the limb.

2. Kinda mentioned a little about before. So no overlapping of tattoos. The weight of each object they put inside of them is the same, so the more stuff they have in them, the heavier they get. The properties of said items are still there, so things like metal detectors will go off on her tattoos. And if a tattoo were to get cut or anything of the sort, said item will morph into their skin, causing excruciating pain and maybe even deadly consequences depending on the item. (The more I type about this, the more I wanna go with it lol)

It would be legs with fins instead of toes, if that makes sense? So they can walk and still be able to swim ^^
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@SimpleWriter Cool! I'll get to work on it now! :)

Edit: Oop, sorry for the double post lol
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@Tenma Tendohiya,

Makes perfect sense thank ya!

And yes, the second idea sounds legit the more ya talk about it. Can’t wait to see the cs!
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Okay, he's my first attempt, let me know if there's anything i should fix! Also apologies in advance if there are any typos ^^"

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@Tenma Tendo I really like her! she seems adorable.

if it can't be turned off, I would think it's a mutant quirk....possibly.

Edit: Also.... I really want that cloak/jacket. in the second picture XD

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@Tenma Tendo This Quirk is fine as it is, I think. She can't put too many big objects in herself (This is going to become awkward fast) and just storing things isn't useful enough that I'd think it's OP without a limit. Beside the amount of things she stores is limited by the size of her own body and available place for tattoo, as well as being vulnerable to lose them if she'S wounded. I think this Quirk already feels like a Quirk enough as it is.

I'm ready to accept this character as it is, just wait for BlackCat's Approval. :)

@Ryonara From what I see, I think you can post the CS, but make sure BlackCat said it's fine, too, first.
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@Heartfillia Thanks! And she does have the ability to turn off her Quirk, so I don't think it would be Mutant? Her Quirk does change parts of her body, so maybe it is Transformation? Also same about the jacket, it's so pretty ^^

@SimpleWriter Yeah...a lot of things about her Quirk can be taken out of context lol Glad to know the Quirk is sufficient and thanks for partially accepting me :)
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@Tenma Tendooh well yeah then I would say transformation haha. Derp

And I might have started online shopping for one when I saw it 🙃
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@HeartfilliaCoolio, I'll finalize it in my CS now. thanks!

And lol that's such a mood xD
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@Genon Nice, another Accumulation quirk! One thing I'll suggest, though, is either lowering the current strength/speed cap or shortening the time limit. Fights and similar situations aren't likely to last long enough for even the minor side effects to set in. Also, a fight is likely to get pretty noisy, so he'd be able to benefit easily from high-level sound absorption. If the backlash started earlier, that'd balance things out.

@Ryonara Yep, looks good to me, feel free to move him to the Characters section.

@Tenma Tendo Again, looks good, and I agree Transformation fits best. Post away (and ohh, SimpleWriter, why am I not surprised at your wording xD)
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@LuckyBlackCat Thanks, I'll move her over right now!

Does anyone know if there's any good place to jump in now?
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@Tenma Tendo I suggest joining the Discord to discuss it more easily, if you have Discord ! It helps tons.

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@LuckyBlackCat

Thanks for the feedback. What do you think would the most appropriate timeframe? I'm personally leaning towards an hour as his maximum time limit, since he was also intended to be kind of a stealthy hero. The boost in speed makes him kind of a ninja when he's not directly fighting, but I had the idea of making him vacillate between a stealth role and having a sonic weapon for stopping villains non-lethally (or riot control). He's going to have a music shtick too. The main reason it was so long was because with his super-speed, I envisioned him as spending long periods in the field with his silence field up, staying out of sight, tailing criminals and eavesdropping on secret meetings and stuff.

However, I didn't want to reduce the time limit without an exact figure from you.
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Thanks guys.

Also, I'm sorry if I haven't been on much. Here in the Philippines had been a suckish week lately.
It's not only damn hot that my wires for the net fried but I'll be back by next week cuz effin finally I get to have my paycheck to fix my stuff.
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@Genon I don't like how you wrote this Quirk. It's too versatile, not focused enough and not well balanced in my opinion. Gaining speed and pwoer from storing sound sounds just like an excuse to have another hero with super strength and speed, which are two things that are supposed to be a lot more rare in MHA than other super heroes stories. I just feels like literally everyone wants that, and it's a bit annoying to be honest.

A quirk that blocks sound around himself and store it to use it back in sounds shockwaves sounded do-able, but I'm not ready to accept the accumulation part that makes him stronger for no good reason.
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@Genon Yeah, looking over it again I've got to agree with SimpleWriter. The speed and strength don't seem to fit with what you're going for, and a stealthy character wouldn't need those anyway. Releasing the stored-up sound waves would be a good enough combat application.
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