My CS is pretty much done! Just have to expand on my powers in the morning but, bedtime is calling my name!
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So can I make a CS or is it closed to new applicants?
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Zordon said
Question! Is this the SAME Metropolis that Superman exists in? And if so, is it concurrent with him, as in is he there now? If we break out of prison, I'm sure Superman would come after us.
It was originally going to be, but Soul decided to just make it have the same name.
Okay. I'll be going into detail about my power soon. Aside from that, is my CS satisfactory?
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Okay. I'll be going into detail about my power soon. Aside from that, is my CS satisfactory?
First female prisoner! Woo!
Looks pretty good so far, I think the character interaction would be interesting, a couple of things though...
- Why was she killing people with superpowers, is there a reason for it, could you explain that or go into detail with it?
- Not so sure about the necklace inhibitor, I think they only come in bracelet form. It's not a big problem though, so unless Soul says anything about it, I would just ignore this part.
- Try not to make your power too OP.
Other than that, I think you're good to go.
Her Schizophrenia kind of messes with her and prevents her from being OP. Luciana/Luci are always battling for control of the other.
And yes, it's such a sausage fest in this prison :P
I only added the necklace as a way to keep 'Luci' at bay. It is also malfunctioning as the bracelets are, hence the "same technology" reference. I could cut it out and just make it so that the guards actually have to dose her.
Edit: OH! As for her killing those with super powers, or suspected of having super powers, she's kind of a villain killer. (My brother called me the Dexter of Super Humans) I wanted to leave it vague but, there is a method to her madness.
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And yes, it's such a sausage fest in this prison :P
I only added the necklace as a way to keep 'Luci' at bay. It is also malfunctioning as the bracelets are, hence the "same technology" reference. I could cut it out and just make it so that the guards actually have to dose her.
Edit: OH! As for her killing those with super powers, or suspected of having super powers, she's kind of a villain killer. (My brother called me the Dexter of Super Humans) I wanted to leave it vague but, there is a method to her madness.
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Name: Luciana Mendez
Alias/Nickname: Luci
Age: 24
Appearance: Luciana has a surprisingly curvy frame thanks to her Hispanic lineage and has dark brown hair nearing to black. Her eyes resemble a reddish brown shade of Mahogany and compliment her lightly tanned skin. She is seen normally wearing loose clothing that hang from her 5'5" frame and do nothing to show off her feminine figure and everything to emphasize the muscles she has trained for years to maintain.
Personality: Luciana suffers from Dissociative Identity Disorder (DID) and mild Schizophrenia. She has two distinct personalities; one being very kind, timid and preferring defensive combat that responds to 'Luciana' whereas 'Luci', the other personality, while charismatic - is deadly by nature and is more closely described as a Lioness hunting her prey. 'Luciana' prefers not to use her abilities and will favor unaugmented physical combat if possible. She will use her power as a last resort and even then, only defensively if at all possibly. Using her abilities causes her to slip into 'Luci' and become more violent. 'Luciana' does not have as much control over her abilities as 'Luci' does being that she does not embrace them as her counterpart has. This means that 'Luci' is not only the more violent half but also the more skilled of the two.
Biography: Luciana randomly decided to turn herself in one day on the street, drenched in another persons blood and tears streaming down her face. So far, she has been linked to 17 murders, 9 cases are still being considered. All victims were suspected of having super powers. No court has been able to truly pin her with the murders for...lack of evidence.
Life in prison has been a blur, as the MSP has kept her severely sedated by providing her medicinal doses throughout the course of the day. The medication keeps her in a state of grogginess and within her 'Luciana' mindset. As the doses wear off though, a more charismatic and erratic version of herself becomes present.
Skills: Luciana studied gymnastics and Muay Thai growing up and has nearly perfected the both of them. This has made her an excellent combatant and can move fluidly when focused. Her actions, however, become more violent if her "less sane" counterpart is present.
Powers: Gravity Manipulation
Gravity Field: The ability to increase the gravity around a person and make them feel as if they were a mime truly stuck in an invisible box. This can also render them immobile, depending on the the force Luci exerts onto them.
Immobility: Luci can also render herself immobile as if adhering herself to her position or figuratively nailing herself into the ground.
Simulated Speed/Strength: While not all of her speed and strength needs to be simulated, Luci can reduce the amount of gravity around her body to make her movements faster and make objects lighter for her to lift. Adversely, she can also concentrate the gravity around her, allowing her to walk on walls with ease.
Levitation: Training her ability to reduce gravity, Luci has learned that she can levitate herself as well as others, though others requires more concentration. She has not mastered this skill but believes she will be able to simulate flight. Her levitations have only lasted upwards of 20 minutes at any given time.
Black Hole Manipulation: This is an advanced level of the gravity field ability and requires an immense level of concentration and force, pinpointing a single target and increasing its gravity infinitely at such a quick pace that a black hole is created. 'Luciana' is unaware of this ability and 'Luci' has only been able to do it once. She passed out afterwards and woke up in prison.
Other: 'Luciana' has very little control of her powers outside of herself, being that she cannot use her power to manipulate others or even inanimate objects. And, while 'Luci' is more comfortable with her power, 'Luciana' is constantly within her, battling her mentally and can cause great distraction to 'Luci' during pivotal moments of battle.
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Her Schizophrenia kind of messes with her and prevents her from being OP. Luciana/Luci are always battling for control of the other. And yes, it's such a sausage fest in this prison :PI only added the necklace as a way to keep 'Luci' at bay. It is also malfunctioning as the bracelets are, hence the "same technology" reference. I could cut it out and just make it so that the guards actually have to dose her.Edit: OH! As for her killing those with super powers, or suspected of having super powers, she's kind of a villain killer. (My brother called me the Dexter of Super Humans) I wanted to leave it vague but, there is a method to her madness. c:
Unless Soul says otherwise I think you're accepted.
And with that I'm going to watch the new episode of Arrow and redesign Spider-Man.
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Big Sister AM said
Actually, schizophrenia and split personalities (Dissociative Identity Disorder or DID, in technical terms) are not the same thing. Dissociative identity disorder is what gives people several "distinct personalities" as you described Luciana/Luci having. Usually, people think that schizophrenia is spilt personalities due to "the voices" as schizophrenics sometimes have and are most often portrayed with. Actually, it can be anything from paranoia to downright voices telling them what to do.Anyways, what you want is DID, not schizophrenia.
I can't believe I forgot that, I usually remember stuff like that... I need more sleep.
Anyway change it like Big Sister said then you're in.
While her personalities are distinct and separate, I was still planning on incorporating the aspect of voices. I suppose I'll do more research of what exactly I'd like to portray and what it would most accurately be described as.
Boom. She now suffers from DID and Mild Schizophrenia, to give me that "voices in the head" aspect I wanted while more clearly explaining the personalities.
Thank you Big.
Thank you Big.
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Boom. She now suffers from DID and Mild Schizophrenia, to give me that "voices in the head" aspect I wanted while more clearly explaining the personalities.Thank you Big.
Good, feel free to make your post anytime.
k back to arrow and spider-man.
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You're very welcome, Zordon ^_^ Details are my best friend and I use too much time surfing around on Wikipedia (and I have a very dear friend who suffers from schizophrenia (which is spelled differently in danish, might I add, and in a pain to spell in english for me))But please, don't call me Big. Makes me feel fat :p Call me Big Sister AM, Big Sister, Sister, Sis or AM ... preferably AM, as that was part of my old username, too, which I changed because people kept misspelling it..:EDIT:.Also, I won't be posting today as planned. I finished helping my uncle with his chimney, so now it's time to get some work in on the green house out in the back yard and get the lst few glasses in. After that, dinner with my grandparents... so... yeah...
Understandable AM. Didn't mean to make you feel fat. D;
I probably won't post for another few hours but, I'll definitely post today. May just elaborate on my character until then.
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Sooooo I'm just gonna make a CS, back in a flash.
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@Soul: I removed the dosing necklace, just to make it easier to explain and to possibly make her story more interesting. Am I free to post?
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Sorry for my absence. Icecream parteh.
Kidding.
Anyways, Zordon; I like your character, but one aspect of your powers makes me itchy. Gravity Field: The ability to increase the gravity around a person and make them feel as if they were a mime truly stuck in an invisible box. This can also render them immobile, depending on the the force Luci exerts onto them. This itches me because there's no way for someone to escape. I assume that if they exert a will or strength beyond the strength you put on the gravity field, they can escape?
Regardless, you're free to post.
Garrison: I am truly sorry for wasting your time. I should have been back sooner. We are not accepting any more applicants, which I think I put on the first page. Sorry mate.
Kidding.
Anyways, Zordon; I like your character, but one aspect of your powers makes me itchy. Gravity Field: The ability to increase the gravity around a person and make them feel as if they were a mime truly stuck in an invisible box. This can also render them immobile, depending on the the force Luci exerts onto them. This itches me because there's no way for someone to escape. I assume that if they exert a will or strength beyond the strength you put on the gravity field, they can escape?
Regardless, you're free to post.
Garrison: I am truly sorry for wasting your time. I should have been back sooner. We are not accepting any more applicants, which I think I put on the first page. Sorry mate.
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