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Pretty sure this sounds like an issue with the specific device. Something that the various antivirus/malware thingies you ran did not uncover, @WiseDragonGirl.

Formaroth: Battle for the Throne

since some of the best stuff seems to be from cawanor, the equivalent of spanish steel could perhaps be Cawanori Steel?

Formaroth: Battle for the Throne

interesting concept, @chayden13.

We do have a few questions for sheet that you could think on, either clarifying or changing as fits for you... Just some thoughts, as this is Duncan's RP, not one of ours.

For the exports on the family...

<sub>Main Export of Goods: The Legon Forest’s main natural resource is timber, as Legon is the single largest forest in all of Formaroth. The entire clandom is completely covered in forest. However, this timber is largely untouched, as the clan’s religion considers the forest holy and that trees should only felled out of utmost necessity and never in wanton excess.

The Clandom also has extremely large ore deposits, possibly the largest in the world, due to it being situated between three major mountain ranges. However, the industry level of the Legon clans is relatively low and so much of these stores have not been tapped, especially not on the level of its neighbors, such as Cawanor.

What the clans are truly known for is their craftsmanship. They are one of the most skilled smithers in Formaroth. The metalworks that they create are of no equal. From weapons to jewelry, the Legon smithy’s create some of the finest quality goods. The Forest also are known for their furs, as there is are large amounts of game within Legon.</sub>

They've got more timber than anyone else, but they don't export it.
They've got vast amounts of mineral ores, but they have no large industry for using it.
Then they're famous for their craftsmen and smiths, having some of the best of these in Formaroth.

How does these last two add together? Is it that they make some of the best weapons available, but they only make a few each year? Do they only make for personal use? Or is it something else?

From our experience, expert smiths and craftsmen usually requires a fairly decent supporting industry. That does not mean, of course, that this is the only possible solution.

Jewelry usually requires precious metals, but it could also use gems. Mining for such requires industry, as would panning it from rivers. Refining gems is especially demanding. Or do they trade for such? if so, what do they trade away to get gems and such?

Which nations/families do they trade with?

What sort of armor do the people in this nation produce? Do they have the necessary industry to produce scale or plate mail? Chain mail? Or only leather-based stuff?

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We suppose that others, like @Klomster, could delve better into weapons skills, but it does seem like being expert with all three of longbow, longsword and shield would be pretty demanding of any warrior, as we think they require fairly different training regimens.

We see lots of interesting potential here, though. We would recommend reading over after composing text, as that tends to root out more of those pesky errors that sneak into sheets when the author forgets to keep an eye or three open.

Formaroth: Battle for the Throne

It might not be a bad idea to get a more accurate and complete map crafted sometime, @TheDuncanMorgan.

The current one lacks useful details like where Nyhem is located.

These days we're too busy to craft something ourselves, otherwise we might've offered to do that.

New Gm

The only one capable of making such a change is Mahz, but getting hold of him is not all that easy and may take time.

Oh no! Killing is bad?!

A truly monstrous monster is one the reader can associate with and to some degree understand.

That does not mean their code of morality needs to be human. In fact, it can be quite inhuman and still feel justified.

A monster's attack (and/or kill) can be explained from the mindset of the monster, the victim or a third party. Sometimes, it can feel even more monstrous if the one describing it doesn't have the full picture. Say the monster is some sort of human-snatching giant. What a bystander might see is only a huge, monstrous hand reaching through the window to snatch its prey. It glimpse a vague shadow for the body, or it might not. The act of not seeing anything distinct for the monster's body could fire up the imagination, and it could end up inventing an appearance based on its own fears mixed with its observations.

Seeing such a snatching from the perspective of a bird in flight would probably not be nearly as terrifying. At least not if the author is good at describing things in the above bystander example.

Yes, the idea for the example is kinda like Roald Dahl's classic BFG. We just had to pick something.

For monsters in general, focusing on the monster's non-human traits could also personify it.

EDIT: Got a challenge for you people:
Try writing an example of either a monster attack, or a killing.
Either from the perspective of the killer/monster, the victim or a bystander.

Formaroth: Battle for the Throne

For Urd's clothes:
Basically what the picture in sheet shows.
Outermost, she wears a waterproofed, hooded black cloak of some woollen material, edged with woven thread of a golden hue, not shiny.
Right now, her clothes beneath that is made of soft leather, not of any armor-quality, but still relatively durable. Presumably, this is presumably either on top of fine-quality cloth or lined with it. Subtle patterns are present on all of this. It is all designed with function in mind, as she travels a lot and does not bring servants along, and her family hasn't exactly pushed her to be formal all the time.

The quality of her clothes is high, as befits her family's status as cawanori country nobility, but it is not opulent in appearance. As such, it does not stand out in a crowd. The patterns on her soft leather tunic (or whatever it is) is embroidered in with thread colored much as on the image.

She probably has several sets of clothes akin to these available, some of them more suited for court than others. She's not wearing ones most suited for court this day, as she did not wear that yesterday, and she has yet to change, and there's that minor detail that her visit to court today wasn't planned.

Does that answer your questions, @TheDuncanMorgan?

Formaroth: Battle for the Throne

your turn again, @TheDuncanMorgan.

Anyone else working on something (other than that Duncan/lana collab and the urd/duncan collab)?

Settings you want to run, but aren't skilled enough to do so.

to avoid historical condundrums, we'd at least recommend making it clear its alternate history.

Alternatively, you could just set it in a fictional world and rename the factions to make it "yours", @Sypherkhode822.

Coruscant Sacked: Aftermath

@vesuvius00

Rare powers

To make the sheet easier to work out, we think we’ll recommend dropping Psychometry, since you’re fairly clearly set on Force Stealth.

But we will ask this one small set of questions about it, which we’d like to see a response from the mindset of Shiri on:
What use is Force Stealth to Shiri at the present (pre-sacking Coruscant)? What made her want to learn it, and how did she get access to one of the holocrons with the relevant knowledge on it?

While it would have been easy for her to get this knowledge from a Sith Holocron, had she gotten hold of one, Jedi Holocron gatekeepers are notoriously stubborn and not known for sharing lore without reason. We can easily see how you as a player find it very useful for your character to know, but we’d like the above As Shiri sees it.

Note, this is not a denial of the power, but rather that we want to be sure that this is something Shiri wants, not just something you want for Shiri. A request for her justifications, one might say.

Force Powers and Force Potential

These two sections can be confusing at times to keep apart. You’re not the only one who has asked, nor do we think you will be the last.

Force Powers section is in the IC format, as that asks the character to explain what he can do with the Force, both in general range of varied powers and in level of skill. You can of course edit this later as the character develops further IC.

Force Potential is in OoC format and deals with how much raw power your character has, how much (s)he can learn. These limits are far harder than those found in the Force Powers section. Whereas a Jedi (or Sith) can learn to use new powers, his or her raw power is usually not something that can be changed. It is what it was at birth. Does that make some sort of sense?

Here you might also put elements she herself does not know about in relation to her force abilities. Latent powers, forgotten powers, things requiring more self-insight than she has, etc… Unknown flaws (like Obi-wan having terrible telekinetic barriers)

Next question

In situations that will come up in Aftermath, No Jedi will truly be without the Force. The Force is a part of all Jedi (and Sith). It's as much as part of them as their limbs, their eyes or their lungs, but where the latter two can be cut away, the Force is not focused within any single part of their bodies. The Force is everywhere.

Review

why is this here? what do you mean? I don't understand what I wrote that would prompt this little bit of (what seems to be) musing.

Your review questions

This is the trigger segment:

I specialize in the Ataru form of Lightsaber combat, but I’m light and quick in a fight even without a lightsaber or the force with me.

CS

Flaws

Right now, the flaws section is too squeezed-together to make it easy to spot individual flaws. There’s not all that many flaws there currently that are hers personally and that are directly problematic for her. Most of her flaws are species-based, self-sacrificial tendencies and lack of trust for turned Sith (should that happen). That last bit is hardly a flaw at all. Its plain prudence.

If you could spread them out a bit, it’d be very helpful for both spotting flaws and fleshing them out so that they affect her more. Also, it might be wise to consider adding some flaws related to skills and physical capacity.

Long-term goals

What has made her want to become a shadow in the future? Its a fairly specialized “job”, so something must’ve happened to push her onto this path, right?

Escape

Rephrasing that section to say more like you put in your commentary should help fix that.