Foster
Shadowheart
Simply Not Real
Not a Sayan
DaemonsRevengeYeah, I rushed her out the gate a bit so I could have her out for look and critique before I stepped away from the cpu for the rest of the evening.
I'd say those are mostly fair critiques, and I will likely post Cinis for this game if a 'C' name is still needed. But I will also go ahead and address the comments given I don't think I'll be able to sleep till I do lol. As soon as I posted this character I was already super iffy about most of the things ya'll brought up.
Glad you like that name :D sad it doesn't fit, should have re-read the FP closer, my bad. I did choose the description poorly. I picture to have this strong but lonely sort of face, reminiscent of a solitary hunter. Went with wolf because bats have wolf like faces. again my bad.
Sorry, had meant to add the symbol link, must have forgotten in my haste. this is it writhed in a ribbon.
KNIGHT! That was the word I was looking for! Thank you, that much better suits her.
I struggled ALOT with having the weapon turn into a gun, with the whole blind thing. Went with a berreta simply because its the more recognizable gun, but yeah a smaller caliber would make more sense. Though, if she is to be introduced later after refining I personally think I would remove the gun transformation all together and make it so the head launches off, connected to the staff chain of significant length making it a flail or sorts as well as a grappling hook perhaps? Though when pyrra's weapon is a sword, spear, and a rifle I feel like a full length bec de corbin, especially given I described the proportions of the head to be much larger than a traditional one, could become a gun. But again, I don't think I would have her use a fire arm in a polished version.
And yeah, I am generally unhappy with this rendition of her back story. Especially the hunter scene, was focused way to much involving that trigger for hunting I guess. Can't argue with the fact that it over all doesn't fit with her later personality. And yeah realistically her burns would have been worst, but it is unnecessary to the character for them to be that much worst. Fleshing it out more would be that her mom was the target and she only got hit with enough to burn her eyes and good chunk the area above them due to proximity would likely help with that issue if it is really a important one.
Though again I don't feel it is any less realistic that say Blake being an apparent orphan as far as we can tell running with a violent activist group?
As for your comments @Madninja324
I think your over thinking the weapon realism in a rwby game a bit much. I mean, Ruby herself has a weapon that would weigh an impossible amount to be handled with the grace, speed, and elegance she does. I mean she is 14-15 in the series right? Yet she can cut through a whole tree with no effort with one handed swing? Withstand the recoil of a sniper rifle so strong it can launch her and effect her entire bodies momentum? But my ballerina (one of the more physically demanding dances) cant wield a pole arm that would be the collective third of that kind of mass and weight with equal ease?
I see Bijou wielding the weapon kind of as it is; a combination staff, hammer, ax, spear. Just as ballet is a combination of forms and positions ranged to make a dance. Her weapon, when wielded with the wild exaggerated prowess of a character in the rwby universe would have an incredible sense of rhythm and style. Hack, smash, stab. One two three. Swing, thrust, cut.
I'd say those are mostly fair critiques, and I will likely post Cinis for this game if a 'C' name is still needed. But I will also go ahead and address the comments given I don't think I'll be able to sleep till I do lol. As soon as I posted this character I was already super iffy about most of the things ya'll brought up.
Glad you like that name :D sad it doesn't fit, should have re-read the FP closer, my bad. I did choose the description poorly. I picture to have this strong but lonely sort of face, reminiscent of a solitary hunter. Went with wolf because bats have wolf like faces. again my bad.
Sorry, had meant to add the symbol link, must have forgotten in my haste. this is it writhed in a ribbon.
KNIGHT! That was the word I was looking for! Thank you, that much better suits her.
I struggled ALOT with having the weapon turn into a gun, with the whole blind thing. Went with a berreta simply because its the more recognizable gun, but yeah a smaller caliber would make more sense. Though, if she is to be introduced later after refining I personally think I would remove the gun transformation all together and make it so the head launches off, connected to the staff chain of significant length making it a flail or sorts as well as a grappling hook perhaps? Though when pyrra's weapon is a sword, spear, and a rifle I feel like a full length bec de corbin, especially given I described the proportions of the head to be much larger than a traditional one, could become a gun. But again, I don't think I would have her use a fire arm in a polished version.
And yeah, I am generally unhappy with this rendition of her back story. Especially the hunter scene, was focused way to much involving that trigger for hunting I guess. Can't argue with the fact that it over all doesn't fit with her later personality. And yeah realistically her burns would have been worst, but it is unnecessary to the character for them to be that much worst. Fleshing it out more would be that her mom was the target and she only got hit with enough to burn her eyes and good chunk the area above them due to proximity would likely help with that issue if it is really a important one.
Though again I don't feel it is any less realistic that say Blake being an apparent orphan as far as we can tell running with a violent activist group?
As for your comments @Madninja324
I think your over thinking the weapon realism in a rwby game a bit much. I mean, Ruby herself has a weapon that would weigh an impossible amount to be handled with the grace, speed, and elegance she does. I mean she is 14-15 in the series right? Yet she can cut through a whole tree with no effort with one handed swing? Withstand the recoil of a sniper rifle so strong it can launch her and effect her entire bodies momentum? But my ballerina (one of the more physically demanding dances) cant wield a pole arm that would be the collective third of that kind of mass and weight with equal ease?
I see Bijou wielding the weapon kind of as it is; a combination staff, hammer, ax, spear. Just as ballet is a combination of forms and positions ranged to make a dance. Her weapon, when wielded with the wild exaggerated prowess of a character in the rwby universe would have an incredible sense of rhythm and style. Hack, smash, stab. One two three. Swing, thrust, cut.
