Cartwright

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

I iz awake.

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

One thing I could throw into the bin if you're looking about the RP: look at other CSs and try to make yours the same length they are... One thing I am noticing in the CS is a lack of detail.

If you are interested in taking them and will down the road take another shot here here's what I can give:

Why not explain his training? What did he learn?

What was his first encounter like when he returned to the society he once knew?

Why is he trying to find answers?

Ya know.. Some easy stuff that sounds crappy when separated and brief, but when you put them together: bam you made a bio for Zeal.

Look at the other two CSs for reference!

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Better safe than sorry ^-^

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Wayne said
Good stuff, Cart. Added.By the way, if any of you find the religion part of the CS to be inflammatory, leave it out. Religion and opinions regarding religion can be played out good in an RP, especially one set in Afghanistan of all places, but I don't want this to turn into some shitfest where everyone's getting pissed on for being religious or not. Maybe I'm just paranoid, but better to be safe than sorry.

Better start throwing up disclaimers in the rule section

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

CS edited. Check the logs to see what was changed

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Actually, I've been gutting the CS while discussing about it here... Maybe 3 minutes earlier than expected I shall be done!

Wait make that 2.

28 minutes.

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

True.. And besides it looks like the sidelines think we're beating out keyboards and cracking out our Ak47s, shouting "BRUH YOU FITTIN TO MAKE ME BUMP WITH YOU M ABOUT TO SQUAD UP IN THIS BIT."

Regardless, this extra information was put in the CS.. But I can understand it wasn't found. Gutting stuff out takes time. Working from the bottom is faster in my experience.

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Raikage said
Braw not that this is my business but you gotta calm down man, nothing is gonna come of getting angry and arguing.

Carty never gets angry ^.^

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Wayne said
I'm just doing what I need to do as GM.It was a bad idea on my part to just allow free-form CS sheets. You've still got a decent character, Cart. You're not the GM that screwed up with the little details and has to now keep everything in order and get shit changed while also having to juggle with relations with the players. Keep that in mind.

But I was the one who had to toss in a few ideas and bring a gas can to fuel something in the interest check when you said it was low, yes? Don't take all the credit now and throw it at me as a struggle!

The Rotting World: Ishkashim, Badakhshan, Afghanistan (Post-Apoc|furries/non-humans welcome)

Wayne said
It doesn't. Try again.

Fine. Just let me go erase the "Free CS making" notion from my head first ya dictator >:/

ETA FOR EDIT: half an hour. Yes.. Edits take half an hour when this significant of a change must be administered.