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Deadland Wasteland. [Beware Zombies! They Bite!]

MusketMan.

Are you, by any chance, a Full Metal Alchemist fan? Your character is pretty much a copy of Alphonse & Edward, with Gonzo being the Edward. He lost his arm so he gave himself a robot arm. His little brother's body was destroyed, and he wants to give it back to him. Same here, only difference being that Alphonse lives on in that armour. Now, much like Edward, Gonzo is a genious albeit for a different reason. Both read books that their father owned because he wasn't using them anymore, Gonzo because he simply didn't use them, and Edward because his father wasn't there.

I can't feel like you took an already existing character and tweaked it to fit this setting rather than create your own :/

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This is not representative of Aeonumbra's (the GM's) opinion, and is based solely on my own observations. I'm just giving my two cents, and any corrections made should only be made because Aeon says so.

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That Golden Object... Fiance. Same area.

...Dude. Thule is nuts/mental/insane/not-right-in-the-head.

That was an engagement ring xD

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Actually... no. You don't. You don't even know if there's flour or sugar in this world :P

Nobody's Battlerama!

I would prefer to write my own character's conclusion as she's a tricky one to write.

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Where and how you wake up is completely up to you. You could wake up in a tree and subsequently fall flat on your face on the ground if you wanted to. So him asking questions is perfectly alright, but you may want to wait for Liza/Frenetic to post, then.

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You just go ahead ^^ Same goes for everyone. Aeon and the rest of the guys are welcome to post as well. I do think we can skip the "line of progression" or whatever this one time xP

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Monochromatic Rainbow said
Not to harass you further, but I noticed that one of the other characters appeared to have been allowed a gun (with limited ammunition, I see.)?I'm guessing this is just an exception to the rule, and one can't have had a knife of some sort on their person when they... eh, shifted worlds?EDIT: Fixed the background, she now burned an innocent worktable instead.

It is stated that you can have a few "odds and ends", so having a knife or something like that is fine. I'd just like to avoid further guns as, like you say, this was an exception based on the fact that he is the sort of coward character that would use one to hide behind.

Bright_Ops said
Okay, edited and updated my character a little. Hopefully it will meet peoples standards this time.

It was no surprise to anyone when Thule dedicated himself to be a survival nature guide, learning how to survive in a wide range of environments (Often times by visiting them himself) and showing others how to avoid becoming just another one of those people who vanished into the wilderness and was never heard from again. Even before the incident that claimed his family he loved going out into the wild and afterwards he would often flee to places were he could be close to nature whenever he was frightened or just felt the need to get away from everyone else.

I would like it if you could flesh this out more, but it's just a minor thing. He's approved as it is, but I'd be happy if you could expand that to also tell a bit about some of his exploits, perhaps. I'd especially like it if you wrote how he learned about it. Did he find a teacher, what was his name, how did he find him. How was he taught? Something like that so it doesn't feel like it's just thrown on the CS :)

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Monochromatic, I can't find anything that's wrong per se. There's just a bit of the background you missed.

At seventeen, she was doing much the same thing, right up until she woke up one morning in the workshop, with the aluminum she’d been working on when she fell asleep a molten puddle on the floor.

This is still there. That's about it... I'd say it's approved :) So is yours, Eldritch.

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Not off the top of my head. Once I've finished dinner (waiting for the pasta to boil right now) I'll give it a look. And if there's anything more you'll hear from me. Same to you, Monochromatic :)

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Monochromatic Rainbow said
Alright, I think I've fixed it to correspond with what you said to fix, how's it look now?

I'm going to make some dinner and get something to eat. I'll give it a look after that.