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If we are marked to die, we are enough
To do our country loss; and if to live,
The fewer men, the greater share of honour.
God’s will! I pray thee, wish not one man more.
By Jove, I am not covetous for gold,
Nor care I who doth feed upon my cost;
It yearns me not if men my garments wear;
Such outward things dwell not in my desires;
But if it be a sin to covet honour,
I am the most offending soul alive.
No, faith, my coz, wish not a man from England.
God’s peace! I would not lose so great an honour
As one man more, methinks, would share from me
For the best hope I have. O, do not wish one more!
Rather proclaim it, Westmoreland, through my host,
That he which hath no stomach to this fight,
Let him depart. His passport shall be made,
And crowns for convoy put into his purse.
We would not die in that man’s company
That fears his fellowship to die with us.

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Saburo Uchiha, “Kimyōna”



Break Down




Saburo's sharingan quickly spotted the oncoming kunai. That was a simple task for someone with the sharingan. In his mind, Saburo rehearsed the words he'd read in the history books about the Uchiha clan. As Izuna Uchiha, brother of Madara Uchiha said once.. 'I curse the misfortune of those who do not have the sharingan.' With a quick movement he simply moved his upper body and head to the side, effectively dodging the kunai thrown at him. As soon as he knew he was in the clear, his eyes flashed back from the kunai to Daiki, who was only now moving to grab Anemone. A useless endeavour. Saburo had expected a holder of the sharingan to atleast know that, when you had it activated, you noticed everything, almost like it was slowing time. His second hand moved to grip Madara's Gunbai and he lifted it from the ground again, holding it horizontally to prepare for his next move.

Saburo was ill impressed by Daiki's words, not paying them much mind and only offering a quick retort in reply. His grip around Madara's Gunbai tightened as he spoke, preparing for the attempt that everyone knew was coming. There was no hesitation from either side, testimony to the fact that there was a battle going to happen. Although the killing intent that Daiki may have had, Saburo completely lacked. Anyone with a good sense for killing intent would know that Saburo wasn't fighting to kill anyone. “You speak highly for a human being with the sharingan, whom does not even bear his true surname, Uchiha Daiki. You shouldn't speak of things you do not know, denoting that I think you have it completely wrong regarding my eyes. I serve Konoha. You may not see that, even with your sharingan.”

Using his improved sight that he gained from the sharingan, Saburo would swing his gunbai horizontally, causing another very big gust of wind to push Daiki away again - this time, small but very painful cuts, like paper cuts, would appear on his body if he were caught in the jutsu. It was clear that Saburo didn't intend to give him an easy time just because they knew eachother. As soon as Daiki was gone from the area again due to the push backwards that he received, Saburo would wiggle his feet underneath Anemone's blade and kick it upwards, before catching it in his right hand whilst he planted the gunbai in the ground again with his left hand. Saburo wasn't Madara Uchiha, by all means, and that meant that despite a good knowledge on the gunbai, he wouldn't be able to swing it using just 1 hand.

And that said, Saburo was willing to test out just how good this gunbai fared against weaponry. With a quick toss he threw the weapon towards Daiki, easy to catch if Daiki wanted to. But as Saburo got into position to enter combat, he noticed in the distance a man with a white armband raising his hand and then lowering it, before making a fist with his hand. That was the signal to pull back, and keep overwatch again as they had done from the beginning. “Daiki-kun, I didn't know we were friends, denoting I have always considered us colleagues. And I never betrayed anyone. Maybe your trust. But I never asked for your trust, denoting you only have yourself to blame if you feel betrayed.” It seemed that although Saburo's appearance had changed in the last two years, his weird mannerisms in his speech hadn't.

As he prepared to leave the area, he shot Shouken a final glance. “Hokages' are replaceable. Konohagakure is not. The 11th follows the interests of Konohagakure.” As Saburo surveyed the small plaza once more, looking on the singular broken down house, as well as the cat statue, he spoke again. “You will be free to continue towards the Hokage in a second, I am sure. Please be safe.” His words were strange of choosing for someone that had just entered combat with his peers and was now leaving again. Especially since he asked them to be safe, despite the fact that he might've killed them if they pushed the limits of what Saburo could allow. However he didn't give them time to think about it, jumping away onto the roofs almost immediately and following the 11th corps squad leader he had been assigned to. With a blink of an eye, his sharingan had receded again and his eyes were black as normal.

Saburo Uchiha, “Kimyōna”



Reverted Attack




Yamato left the scene, supposedly to go after the Kage. Saburo didn't move, as it was too late for Yamato to make a difference. Well, and besides that, there were several other 11th corps there to move onto him if he did arrive on time. Saburo's Sharingan stared into the sharingan of Daiki, and witnessed the chakra moulding inside of Daiki. Preparing himself for the strike Saburo quickly threw Anemone away, to his left, about half a meter away from Saburo. If he wanted to, he could grab the sword again rather easily. But the sword was more or less useless to Saburo. He didn't need it, he was just holding onto it to make sure Daiki didn't have a proper weapon. As soon as the fires fueled up, Saburo noticed that a second figure was approaching now too. He fueled the flames with his own wind, which ultimately would only quicken their deaths.

Since they were fighting back, Saburo had the right given to him by the 11th to counter attack and eliminate the threats. With a quick movement he grabbed a hold of the gunbai on his back and readied it, making it seem like he was going for another Uchiha Return. But that would be a bit of a waste given the opportunity that was presented to him by Daiki. “Daiki-kun, unknown-kun, please stop resisting, denoting I wish you to throw down your arms and surrender. That way, the 11th may spare your life.” he'd shout out over the sound of the roaring flames. With his gunbai now in hands and the flames roaring in, extra hot because of the added wind, Saburo waved the fan back and forth aiming it at the fire. “Gunbai fanned wind!” The motion of waving the gunbai, paired with moulding chakra into the fan, would start a strong gust of wind that was even stronger than the gust of wind done by the Uchiha Return.

The flames would prove, ultimately, to be Daiki's worst mistake he could make. With the wind now coming from the gunbai, and thus the other side, the flames would quickly be overturned and pushed back. Given the fact that the new ally Daiki had found had used wind to fuel the flames.. well, Daiki and Chen would quickly find themselves in a tough spot. Without giving them much chance to react the flames roared back into their faces, coming closer at an even higher speed due to the strength of the gust of wind from the Gunbai. There was barely any chance to dodge, and a hit was quite certain. Especially since the flames burned even warmer, the damage would be greater than normal.

Saburo thought about telling Daiki their goals, that he was just doing his job. But that would go against the code of the 11th, to never disclose any information. It was going to be punished by execution if he did tell Daiki. So.. he shut his mouth and let Daiki think what he wanted to think. As soon as the flames calmed down again, Saburo would hold Madara's Gunbai in one hand, planting it on the ground as he stood idly by, waiting for Daiki to speak again. His sharingan stared back at that of Daiki, and though it was not visible, Saburo was planning to use genjutsu on him if the need for it arose.



Yamato Minamoru, “Young Master”



“Watashi wa Kami, I am God.”
My name




Yamato soared through the air, with Yuna following closely behind. That was, atleast until she moved up to go side to side with Yamato. She shot him a glance but Yamato ignored it, looking straight forward as he saw the plaza coming up quickly. Her words didn't bother Yamato, although he wished she'd keep her nose out of bussiness that it didn't belong in. “That wasn't just any member. That was Saburo Uchiha. He worked with us on several missions. Daiki and him both have ths Sharingan, and there are plenty of other shinobi around there. He'll survive..” The last words were said almost as if Yamato didn't wish it to be true. As if he wished Daiki would simply die in that fight. Daiki.. with his cursed eyes. It was people like him that once got Konoha destroyed. Itachi. Sasuke. They were all traitors to Konoha. Madara. Every Uchiha so far has considered in one way or another to kill off Konohagakure people.. Yamato was sure that Daiki was no different. And although Yamato didn't care about Konohagakure as much as he should, he cared about his family. And right now, Konohagakure was the home to the Minamoru clan.

“And yes, I'd be blind if I didn't see it. It doesn't matter. If they attack us, we kill them. Easy as that.” he said as he closed in on the plaza even more. Finally he reached the edge of the roofings, jumping down immediately and landing directly infront of Tatsuya. He would appear out of nowhere, arriving fast as he could, meaning that Tatsuya would barely see him coming until he had landed.

Yamato had stretched out one hand to cover Tatsuya's chest, to hold him back. As soon as he knew that Tatsuya wouldn't do anything rash, such as charge in on the woman, he'd lower his hand from his chest and put it on the sword, forcing Tatsuya to lower the sword. Let the Hokage rot. Yamato thought to himself, but he wouldn't say those words. Instead he simply looked forwards at the woman that was after the Hokage. “Hoy, genin.” Yamato said whilst looking at the woman, though his words were aimed directly at Tatsuya. “Don't you know playtime is over?” he said, looking back at Tatsuya only slightly out of the corners of his eyes. He grinned, but it wasn't a 'fun' type of grin. It was the type of grin you had when you were about to dive into something you know you shouldn't dive into. “Stay out of my way if it comes down to it.” he said, looking forwards again and making the grin fade from his face. But he wasn't about to charge in - he'd have done that if the woman had made attempts at hostility or aggressiveness. But instead she just stood there, looking at them. She wasn't doing anything. And.. from that Yamato concluded that she wanted to say something. The Hokage wasn't dead, so if she wanted to simply kill him and get out, then she could've done that by now. Instead he laid there like the pathetic man that he was. Tsk.
@floodtalon I was guessing it was because it was your entry post but I agree with spodes. However I also see most times that once people ease into the RP a bit it becomes easier to write 2 paragraphs.
@knighthawk Well first see about lengthening and describing the aforementioned things better. We'll see about the rest later, okay?




The robed figure's eyes flashed back as she noticed a sudden surge in the air around her. She was going to be late to defend herself regardless, but she didn't seem worried and continued her attack on the Hokage. Her eyes flashed back forwards, knowing that an intervention was on the way to stop whomever was now behind her. Her steps now approached the Hokage who was still sitting on his knees, holding his stomach. With a simple motion the woman grabbed two kunai, one in each hand, and ignored the others that were attacking. They, too, would get an intervention. As the buddha appeared the woman got in range of the Hokage and sliced him across his back four times, not deep enough to be meaningful attacks but certainly harmful enough to impede him a little bit, as well as show off to Konoha shinobi that there Hokage was a mere mortal, too.

As the buddha dissapeared again, so did the robed figure, jumping back towards an open spot that she noticed. There she stood, a kunai in each hand, before putting them away. For the first time since arrival she spoke, though her voice was changed and sounded very deep, obviously changed using some sort of voice changer in the mask or a jutsu, perhaps. “Drop the Hokage hat.” the voice said, as the woman stood idly by waiting for an answer. The Hokage simply sighed as he got up again, slowly and somewhat failing powerwise. But he stood up, a remarkable feat on it's own. As he finally stood up completely, he simply smiled with a smug smile before pointing at the robed woman. “Never! It's a symbol of the Will of Fire! I'll never give it up for someone like you!” The woman didn't answer, but only rapidly went inside of her robes with her hands, before stretching her hands forwards. From her hand flew six shuriken, headed straight for the Hokage. But before they hit the robed woman quickly formed handseals, before forming shadow clones of the shuriken, multiplying them to atleast a hundred shuriken. “You will.” the voice said again as she looked at the hundred shuriken rain down upon the kage. With a last ditch effort he formed several seals, but was too late with his jutsu to avoid damage all together. He was hit by atleast ten shuriken before he poofed away, leaving behind only a tree stump that fell to the floor with a clunk. Yet again the Hokage chose to escape..

The robed figures eyes flashed side to side quickly, before spotting the Hokage upon a roof on one knee, picking the shuriken out of his body and throwing them down. Her eyes flashed towards that of her companion, not saying a word but transmitting an order clearly without a word. Keep them back while she gave chase again. This was the last time she was running after him too. Games were over. She took off again and left behind the crowd, moving rapidly to avoid being caught by anyone. She started jumping again from roof to roof, keeping up with the hokage rather easily. Although he had regained most of his strength, he wasn't particularily fit for battle at the moment. Granted, she could make him bend over in pain with just a simple handseal, so regardless of his strength, this was a lost battle for him.

As they moved the woman went into her robes again, this time not simply following him, but actually going after him. She threw some kunai at him with explosive tags, blowing them up when she figured they were close enough. Somehow the Hokage gathered enough strength to dodge it, jumping ahead slightly to get out of the main blast area. It wouldn't prove to be enough any longer. With the same trick she threw more kunai with explosive tags, this time exploding them a bit later as they were aimed directly in front of him. The explosion caused him to fall over, hit the roofing tiles and fall down into the street below. Wasting no time, the woman jumped down and grabbed the Hokage by his collar and dragged him with her as she jumped on, towards the town square again. As they arrived there, she dropped him down on the wooden platform again, in the now desolate square. It seemed most of the civilians had fled the direct area of confrontation between the woman and the Hokage, expecting things to progressively get worse.

This was not the case.

It was about to be ended, here and now, as long as there was no further interruptions. The Hokage attempted to get up, leaning on his arm, only to be met with a swift kick in the elbow, to keep him down. He groaned as he laid there, with a couple shuriken still stabbing out of him. Then, the robed woman dropped down through her knees and formed the Ram handseal. She stared deep into the Hokages eyes as she did so, looking at him. There was no emotion, no nothing. After the handseal the Hokage screamed in agony again as something inside his body curled up and hurt him very badly. After she persuaded him to stay down this way, letting him know she could do this at any time just by this demonstration, she stood straight up and waited for the inevitable backup to arrive yet again. “Keep the hat for now.” The Hokage groaned in pain as he slowly unfurled from his fetal position, looking up at this mysterious person who didn't even seem to grant him the respect of looking in his eyes. “W-who are you.. you vile beast.. destroying our nations' prosperity..” The woman responded softly, still looking at the streets that she expected the shinobi to pour out of. “No. I am saving it.”



Saburo Uchiha, “Kimyōna”



Uchiha Return




Saburo had spent the entire day pretty much preparing for a large scale 11th corps operation. After some time in the 'normal shinobi lifestyle' he was recalled by his superiors, being written out of the normal forces without much interference from anyone within those forces. It seemed to be common place for ninja's to be placed in and out of there coming from the 11th, so no real questions were asked. In reality, he was just placed there to gather intel for the 11th corps leader at that time, Mikagura Shimura. However it'd been some time since he'd heard from him, so the recall was quite a surprise to Saburo. On the other hand, during his 2.5 years off, he had procured a rather valuable artifact. Madara's Gunbai was now in his possession after a rather influential interference from the 11th. He was handed it after lengthy discussions between Mikagura Shimuza and the current Uchiha clan leader.

However today something was going on - Saburo was sure of it. He was called in early, woken from his sleep by fellow 11th corps members, before being ordered to get ready in his uniform. For some reason they were also ordered to wear their, often ceremonial, white wrappings around the arm that said 'the 11th corp' on it. No questions were asked by anyone. That was the way they were taught. Within five minutes everyone was ready to leave. During the short travel towards the village center there was a small briefing, detailing mostly that they were being sent out to stop people from interfering. The reasoning behind this was left out but the 11th corps always acted in the favor of Konohagakure, so as such the orders were undoubtedly going to benefit the village.

As soon as they arrived, the 11th corps more or less sprung into action. A giant buddha was erected by a fellow corpsman, which stopped most of the attacks sent by his former friends, Aoi and Akio in particular. Shouken was also there, he noticed. He just hoped that Shouken didn't train on genjutsu interference as much ever since that one time.. not to say that Saburo hadn't gotten better. He also noticed something that needed to be stopped right away - Daiki and Yamato were both headed for the intended VIP. Without receiving the order, but mentally 100% sure on his duty, he jumped forwards taking the large gunbai with the tomoe on it from his back. He landed right in front of Daiki and Yamato and prepared himself to take the full blow.

“UCHIHA RETURN!” But that hit didn't happen. He quickly placed his gunbai in front of the two, completely shielding himself, as well as the robed figure from damage. Using the gunbai the way it was intended, the gunbai took the chakra from the Yamato's attack and blocked the sword, making it plunk right off and land in front of Saburo's feet. Both attacks were easily nullified, and then the Gunbai did exactly what it meant to - it transfered the fire chakra in Yamato's technique into wind chakra, sending back a gust of wind strong enough to blow both Yamato and Daiki packing, pushing them back in the dirt. With a quick move of his foot, Saburo placed his foot under Anemone and then whipped it up, catching it mid-air with his free hand after which he put the gunbai back on his back again. “Yamato-senpai, Daiki-kun. Please do not interfere. I will kill you.” he said with a noteable disregard for their former relationships as comrades, if not friends. Saburo quickly glanced around at the area, looking at all the 11th corps members he could see, before looking at those that were in the area whom were not 11th corps. The 11th was outnumbered in this case. But that would not matter, as long as the mission succeeded. He'd then look back at Daiki, closing his eyes briefly only to open them revealing his own sharingan, staring directly into that of Daiki, holding on to Anemone tightly. He knew that Anemone was summoned from a scroll but Saburo figured he might not be able to unsummon it as easy as that without touching the sword.



Yamato Minamoru, “Young Master”



“Watashi wa Kami, I am God.”
Remain as we are




Yamato noticed while charging headlong, seemingly the only one willing to take on this person face-to-face after Daiki decided to throw his weapon, that all the ranged got blocked pretty much instantaneously by a giant Buddha appearing.. but he was sure he could make it. A sudden blur appeared in front of them, too, nothing visible but a man in a trench-coat kicking the air.. seemingly nothing there. But he likely wasn't there for a reason. Perhaps an ANBU was trying to sneak in a kill on the robed? No matter. Yamato and Daiki would finish it. As long as Daiki stayed with him.

Suddenly he noticed a blur passing him by as he extended his fist outwards to punch the woman. Was that a sword? Did Daiki just throw his sword? Looking back confirmed that Daiki did indeed throw his sword. “Idiot.. they never should've promoted you.” Yamato mumbled as he felt his fist connecting with something. Looking over, expecting to see the robed woman, he instead found himself staring at a white-wooden board. His fists were suddenly extinguished, too, and he felt that the chakra he put into his attack had seeped away. Almost immediately he heard a familiar voice. “UCHIHA RETURN!” “Nanda.. wh-” Suddenly the Gunbai unexpectedly sent out a gush of wind, and Yamato managed to cover his body and face just in time by crossing his arms in front of himself. Minor cuts appeared on his arms and hands as he dug his heels into the dirt, slowly being pushed away. There was approximately 30 meters between Daiki and Yamato, and Saburo, when the gush stopped. Slowly Yamato lowered his hands, clenching his teeth together as he realised who was in front of him. “.. sharingan.. ofcourse..” he slowly mumbled, before looking at Daiki. His eyes suddenly widened as he looked at Daiki's eyes. “Doushita.. so you are cursed too?” It was a surprise to Yamato, as he only knew now that Daiki actually had the sharingan. He would deal with that later.. however all respect that Daiki had earned in those two and a half years, it quickly dissipated in just this one instance.

But at that moment he also realized that the Hokage had dissapeared, and that the woman was now already jumping after him again. This was turning into a chase around Konoha rather quickly. Not wanting to waste time, but not wanting to risk being stabbed in the back either, he looked at Saburo with angry eyes. The anger from being interrupted, by a person he knew none the less, coupled with the idea that Daiki owned a kekkei genkai.. it fueled his rage. His eyes made that part clear too. “Screw this fool. He's below me. Besides, you have the Sharingan now don't you Daiki? You don't need me if you use that.” he said in an annoyed and mocking tone. Let these two duke it out, he thought. If only Daiki hadn't thrown his weapon like a fool, he would have something to fight Saburo with. If he wanted to, atleast..

Quickly Yamato dashed off again, past Yuna. “With me. Leave that idiot Daiki to his own devices. He doesn't need us.” he said as he passed by her, headed for the location that the Hokage and that weird robed person were headed in. He trailed behind them heavily, however, and if anything were to happen to the Hokage, Yamato and Yuna likely wouldn't be on time.
@knighthawk If you're looking for full blown control over an element then you're not gonna face resistance, you're gonna face outright denial.
@CrystalApple Alright. Let me know when you're done.
Well yeah but I am very much so against elemental control like Gaara had. In the anime he was cool but it quickly becomes rather cliché when everyone can do it. You're about the fourth that has requested it.

technique to water prison only costs half as much jutsu


I'm sure you meant chakra, in which case that sounds okay.
@knighthawk Your appearance description is much too short as well as the personality section. Take a look at other CS's and compare it to yours.

Weapon, tool or object name:
Purple gourd
Weapon, tool or object type:
Weapon
Description:
One gallon of liquid poison worn his hip. Just like the one on his back, he infuses it with chakra in order to manipulate the water of the poison as a weapon or blend the poison into his water gourd at a 1:1-10:1 ratio. The poison itself is a paralytic agent absorbed through the skin. At minimum it numbs the skin and effects the abilities of opponents with a full body sensation of 'pins and needles'. At worst case, a direct hit in the mouth or the like, the chest locks up and the enemy suffocates to death as the lungs refuse to oxygenate.


Oh okay, it's a one hit kill if you put it in someones mouth. That's a no, there's no 1 hit kills on jutsu or weaponry.

Also I am not sure on the KG. It seems okay, but then as a water shinobi you can always just make water come out of the ground and convert that to chakra. That basically gives you infinite chakra.. so.. you need to clarify a bit.
@CrystalApple 'seeing emotions' are iffy. I don't mind the part where they can see emotions, but the part where they can directly influence them seems irky to me. I'll explain why;

as a writer I make my character be mad. Suddenly a character with the power to change emotions on others walks in, sees that my character is mad and decided 'fuck that shit' and makes him happy instead. That completely messes up the flow of things, and probably also messes up plot-related stuff. So therefore I'm gonna keep that in mind whilst grading. If it's like your KG description (only uses it to use better genjutsu fitted to an emotion) it should be OK.

【Sexuality】
Asexual


Congratulations your character just became a major romance target for Gin and Shin.

Jutsu name:
Peace Be the Journey
Rank:
A-Ranked
Range:
30 Meter Radius
Description:
A powerful jutsu, the clan member channels chakra through the Yokuatsugan and into a thirty meter radius around them. Any conscious organisms within that range have the regions of the brain that control anger and aggression shut down. Animals will approach the ninja and do no harm, and opponents who are affected by the genjutsu will walk away from the Kussunagi Clan member. This jutsu is ineffective against characters who are more clever and smart than the clan member, and violent actions taken on the part of the clan member will dispel the technique immediately for anyone directly observing these actions. This technique lasts for up to seven posts.


Okay this is basically the kind of influencing emotions thing I was talking about. The foundation is good and technically in the naruverse it should be possible. But in illustration, if you are fighting a major bad guy all it really takes is for you to use this technique. It'd be a one shot and since it's an AOE attack there's no dodging it.

Fighting a bad guy, he's really angry and aggressive, everyone is all riled up. In walks your character, *poof*, suddenly the bad guy turns into a nice little sheep.

Unless the effect only carries over to your character, in which case the bad guy would attack all the others and this jutsu would be pretty useless, because as soon as you go to help them the genjutsu dispels itself.

So this one needs _heavy_ reworks.

Jutsu name:
Shadow of Death
Rank:
B-Ranked
Range:
15 Meter Radius
Description:
After activating the Yokuatsugan, the clan member makes a set of handseals and channels chakra into the Yokuatsugan in an area of fifteen meters around the clan member. Anyone in the area of effect is caught in the genjutsu. Those caught in the genjutsu will feel the air around the clan member suddenly stir up in a whistling whirlwind, as if displaced by a might ki. They will also feel like they are in the presence of a truly mighty warrior and that they should listen to the clan member. This qualifies as a compulsory change in reasoning for those caught in the genjutsu, assuming that the victim doesn't figure out it's a genjutsu and dispel it. This technique lasts for up to five posts.


Okay, so this one is pretty decent. Except I have one question. As an enemy of this clan member, what would make my mind suddenly go 'he's my enemy but I should listen to him'? I think anyone that is fighting this clan guy will figure out real quick that you shouldn't listen to enemies. In fact that should be their 1st second conclusion. Once again this jutsu has a great foundation but if you put it into the bad guys' perspective it just wouldn't work.

Unless you make it a buff for your allies. In which case that'd make fighting enemy genjutsu experts really hard because every time they cast a genjutsu, you'd need to dispel both your own genjutsu and theirs to free them.

Jutsu name:
Awakening of Love
Rank:
B-Ranked
Range:
20 Meter Radius
Description:
The clan member channels chakra through the Yokuatsugan and into a twenty meter radius around them. Anyone within the area will be even less inclined to fight and do harm and more inclined to show signs of affection and compassion. The exact effect this technique will have on the opponent is mostly variable on who is in front of them and their own personalities. This technique lasts for up to four posts, though the effects of the jutsu may last longer.


Same as your A rank.

You have double Shadow of Death by the way.

Jutsu name:
Path of the Monk
Rank:
C-Ranked
Range:
20 Meter Radius
Description:
After activating the Yokuatsugan, the clan member makes a set of hand seals, giving it an additional effect. Anyone within the area of effect of the Yokuatsugan will feel less panicked and their muscles will relax, making them calmer and more approachable. This relaxation can make wounds more bearable, as usually tensing damaged muscles and body parts causes more pain. This technique normally lasts for up to three posts, but if the clan member repeats the seals during the jutsu's duration, they can refresh its post duration.


How big is the area of effect? You have to keep in mind that as a genjutsu and an AOE genjutsu at that, enemies caught within the genjutsu will also benefit from this.

Jutsu name:
Diplomat's Demeanor
Rank:
C-Ranked
Range:
15 Meter Radius
Description:
The clan member channels chakra through the Yokuatsugan and into a fifteen meter radius around them. For the duration of the technique, the Yokuatsugan makes all within the radius more open to discussion and negotiation, allowing them to move past pride and personal opinion to a larger extent. This will not make those in the radius able to move past particularly heinous grievances or commit impossible orders. This technique lasts for up to four posts.


So I don't see that they automatically have to agree with you. So if you are argueing with someone who's like, really sure of their point, or realises that there's no personal gain from what your clan member says.. they'd not accept. They'd just argue longer.

Jutsu name:
Peace of Devout
Rank:
C-Ranked
Range:
10 Meter Radius
Description:
After activating the Yokuatsugan, the clan member makes a set of handseals and channels chakra into the Yokuatsugan in an area of ten meters around the clan member. Anyone in the area of effect is caught in the genjutsu. Those caught in the genjutsu will see the air around the clan member calm, and they will feel that they are in the presence of a respectable pacifist, even more so if the clan member is actually a respectable diplomat. While this does not impose a compulsory change in reasoning for the opponent, it may definitely coerce those caught in the jutsu to act or think differently. This technique lasts for up to four posts.


This one's OK.

Scholarly poise is a double of the above.

In short, lots of work to do. You're not the first one to try empathy, so I kinda already had a checklist prepared for things that I don't want to see in it. I do like the picture you used for your character and the jutsu are written out nicely so you have that going for you, it's just the content that irks me at this point.
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