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Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

Posting rate is just a little bit sad. PM me problems, issues or the specific hold ups you are having, and I will try to deal with them.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

Where the Hell is Masaki? Even I want to get started IC. This slow posting rate is getting old.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation [Characters]

For example, when the wielder of this unique trait touches a sword, they will gain the knowledge of all who have wielded the sword, and knowledge of all battles that sword has taken part in, and the events leading to how the sword is where it is now.

I personally don't find anything aside from this line a problem, but the problem it presents is... well, I dislike it greatly. I do have a suggestion. I know you have your Null Void blade, and I firmly understand that is the true purpose of the ability. Let's say we put a limit onto the trait that allows the user to gain the knowledge of "all those who have wielded the sword" to "all those with Jubin no Shindo who have wielded the sword" so that she gets the benefits from her Null Void blade or personal, familial artifacts, but can't just pick up a Warbringer Sword and learn about every battle from every user. A secondary edition to this would be "knowledge of all battles that sword has taken place in"; I don't mind that ability at all, if they're made into premonitions. She can study the past using the ability all she wants, but I don't want her instantly learning 'everything' about a centuries old item, and be able to use it. I would also add a function of difficulty for longer-ranging memories, e.g. memories from the Second Great Shinobi War would be easier to recall than memories from the First, and so on.

Do those editions sound reasonable to you, Ouroboros?

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation [Characters]

This Kekkei Genkai is unique in the way that some Akizakura have developed it. Users are able to feel objects and 'empathize' with them, literally assimilating part of the substance into their own body and taking on its properties. e.g. the user touches metal and assimilates it into their arm, giving their arm metallic properties for a short duration, or until the user willfully cancels it. This gives birth to hundreds of possibilities, and by assimilating with the Chakra of another they are able to gain insight into their abilities. The assimilation aspect is hard to control and due to this, young Akizakura may only assimilate parts of their body with objects at a time, and cannot perform full-body assimilations just yet, nor can they perform multiple assimilations at once.

A very special trait of this Kekkei Genkai, which only a fraction of those who are born with the Jibun no Shindo are then also born with this, is the ability to feel deep connections within people and objects through mere touch. For example, when the wielder of this unique trait touches a sword, they will gain the knowledge of all who have wielded the sword, and knowledge of all battles that sword has taken part in, and the events leading to how the sword is where it is now. This skill is emotionally overwhelming as it transfers memories and experiences into the user rapidly, which is a portal for negative emotions and positive emotions alike into the user. As such, it cannot be used continuously and drains the user's mental energy.

Slow down just a wee moment. I literally jumped Innue, a Chuunin from the genius Nara clan, for having the ability to offensively use Chakra Scalpel even a little, much less a genin with little combat/surgical experience with it. Even if it's just a small scrape, a genin using it in that context is a) unfair considering the bar for the jutsu and medical jutsu in general that I have set for the roleplay b) a testament to chakra control that no genin-level shinobi should just outright have, especially without experience.

Aside from that,. I find the fact she can gain empathatic abilities from touching objects slightly absurd without the mention of physical chakra. I won't entirely say it's impossible, especially given realm of creativity, but I would like a mechanic of "chakra adaptation" to be applied, in which the Kekkei Genkai makes her chakra physically adapt to whatever chakra she "empathizes" with. If she's taking on the qualities of steel, she should be doing so because she has attached herself to said material and currently can form her own chakra to its, considering basically every material object has a physical chakra to it. In that sense, the jutsu is better understood, there is a mechanic behind it, and it can be dealt with by someone with similar sensory abilities, or merely Byakugan, Sharingan or Mind's Eye of Kagura. I believe you actually began along this thought, but I want it fleshed out more.

Another thing I want fleshed out more is the person-to-person assimilation. I want to know the exact potential of this.

Lastly, there is a mechanic here that has already existed within this specific continuum revolving around the... transmission of memories and skills through an object. In short, it could create someone just as if not more powerful than Sai, and for that fact was destroyed. i don't want something like that again, and I don't specifically like the idea of anyone getting the information and 'memory' of an object, considering there are items such as Shira or Kirugetsu's swords that could synergize so well with the ability that it could grow exponentially broken. If anything, I would push for the omission of this ability entirely due to its potential and difficulty to maintain.

Overall, I like the concept. I find it interesting, deep and refreshing, but there are certain aspects that I can see being used as functional conduits for more potential than even Shira, whom previously was the most controversial character accepted.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

Get further in the roleplay, and you may see it.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation [Characters]

I don't see any reason why..

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

So, for anyone wanting to know just how overpowered I made the Jounin Commander, there's a CS for him. He's pretty broken, but for good reason... most of it was given to him.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation [Characters]

Shin Uzumaki

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Name Shin Uzumaki, The Howling Wind of Konoha
Age 29 | Gender Male
Alliance Konohagakure
Rank Elite Jounin
Position Head of Division A, Konoha Jounin Commander
Favorite Food Spiced Beef
Least Favorite Food Tuna, sweet foods in general
Favorite Phrase "It's easy to take an opportunity; making one is difficult"
Hobby Read literature from before the Era of Sai

Appearance

Shin stands at average height, only fifty-eight inches without his boots. He also lacks muscle bulk, but is highly tone with what he has. Shin also wears the traditional armor worn by those who served under Sai, which resembles Traditional Japanese Samurai armor. His right arm lacks any armor as it instead is a grey, alien appendage that appears to be a discolored exoskeleton, although it functions completely as an armor and is has a matte texture. Shin has long, red hair that is a darker shade than his reddened armor. Each shoulder plate of his armor displays a different symbol: the right shows the Uzumaki symbol while the left displays the Uchiha symbol, and on his back, covered by his hair, is a large U shaped piece of metal. His left eye is also alien in that it is a constant Sharingan with three full tomoe, but lacks any scar. Shin has two weapon pouches and several scrolls on his thigh plates, but most notably adorns the Samehada on his back. Shin has a very complex and unique appearance, as most people are often thrown off by his eyes alone. One gentle, blue eye that appears to have the depth of a serene ocean across from a blazing-red Uchiha iris.



History Shin speaks very little of his history before the resistance, but much of it is known. Shin was, for a very long time, considered the second strongest shinobi alive. He served Sai, his uncle, and was trained by his father, Sai's brother, from birth. Shin spent his entire life being honed as a shinobi by some of the strongest men in the world, and became a Jounin at the age most graduated the academy. He fought and served alongside the Regime of Sai before Sai even took it over, more serving his father and grandfather than Sai. Shin has stated that he saw Sai strike down his father and grandfather, and even surrendered his allegiance too Sai when Sai activated his arm, as it had a similar mechanism to the Cursed Seals. Shin has told others that his arm is a replacement grown by Sai after he lost his arm in Kirigakure. The history known of Shin is mostly told by Shin, and he has claimed that most of his power comes from a single day. What he means is that on the day Sai took over, Shin took the scraps. He took the Samehada from Sai's lover, the eye of his grandfather, the seals of their best friend and left behind the will of his father. Shin claimed that it was on that day, that he saw how his family was willing to cut down Sai and his lover, that he knew he could not serve them, but also that Sai was a broken man after he took the heart of who he loved. In that sense, Shin claims that he joined the resistance before it was even made.

Roughly a year before the war, it was revealed that Shin was a double-agent working alongside Hitori Uzumaki, Hosuka Uzumaki, Kirugetsu Hozuki and several others that were leading the resistance. Shin had been feeding them information, allowing them to reclaim their villages and giving them knowledge about the specific strengths and weaknesses of each part of Sai. It was also Shin who deactivated the fortress that Sai turned Amegakure into, and disarmed the traps he set. Shin worked as an inside agent until the last moment, then allowed Sai to die even though Shin took no actual part in the battle. Since then, Shin joined Konohagakure, claiming that wherever Hitori would have been, Shin would follow in spirit. Shin has since faced an incredible amount of skepticism with only the highest ranks of Konoha truly trusting him.

Personality Shin lived a twisted life, made into a weapon since birth, and parts of that still show. He is cold and calculating with all of the intelligence of his familial line. Shin, however, has proven time after time to have a heart and to value things like love and family, to the extent he was depressed and completely torn asunder upon seeing his family ripped apart because they forced his uncle to choose between his family and his love, then seeing everyone die due to it. Shin believes no one should have to choose between a life of servitude to their country and cause and a life of love and family. For that, Shin often pressures the older shinobi to retire, telling anyone getting 'rusty' that they should let a new generation take over. Unfortunately, he is well aware that Konoha needs its full militant force. For those he does not wish to retire, Shin pushes them to grow and become powerful. Unlike those before him, who trained him to be a shinobi without passion, Shin believes that true power comes from passion and he believes that he never truly lived until he fought for a cause: liberation.

Nature Release Wind
Important Items Samehada, sealing scrolls (the scrolls contain a formula that places a seal onto the ground and allows Shin to use time-space jutsu within the field, which is roughly 25 meters)
Combat Style: Shin is skilled in essentially all ranges of combat. Since birth, Shin was raised to be a ninjutsu-wielding sensor, and became a Jounin using high-ranking Wind Release. Shin was also skilled with taijutsu, but to a far lesser degree. Shin never picked up genjutsu, although he does have a small arsenal of such, and he is in no way a medic-nin. However, Shin was given a large boost to his taijutsu with his arm, which is covered in a steel-hard exoskeleton derived from the jutsu of Sai's familial line. His arm is stronger and faster than his own top speed, and he uses the nature chakra of his arm to tame the Samehada. Thus, with his strength and the tamed Samehada, Shin is highly skilled in close range combat as well as mid and long range combat due to his Wind Release. With his Uzumaki heritage, Sai is also relatively hard to kill and has stronger chakra than a regular shinobi. He also bares the Sharigan, but truly only makes use of its passive effects of movement and chakra reading, which makes his sensory skills even more accurate. Lastly, Shin is skilled with fuinjutsu, being one of the only known time-space users in the world. The summation of his strength led most to believe he was the second strongest and possibly now is the strongest shinobi alive.

Note: Shin is an NPC, so I'm not making a full jutsu list for him. To anyone wondering why he has so many 'skills', most of them represent one of the original founders of the Sai Regime. His arm represents Sai, his time-space abilities represents their best friend and his eye represents his grandfather. Lastly, his prowess with ninjutsu is a trait shared with his father.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

I'm sure you're heart-broken, Tastua.

Naruto: Birth of a Better Generation

So, I've had complaints that the audio was too quiet. I gave it some gain through editting, so it should be louder to anyone interested.