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Forum: Casual Interest Checks
interested ;)
I would probably be more interested in a SC rp where it was about grand scale wars, and the dialog between battles. Kinda like the games.
Interested indeed.
That was a little less civilized, than I had hoped for.
In all fairness your understanding of where to place a comma is not just wrong my Scandinavian rules. It's wrong (or lacking) by the USA and English too. But who cares? I wasn't disturbed by your way of writing. I only notice things like that, when I analyses a sentence. I rather not take your writing apart and show examples, because I feel like that would only offend you. And again: It didn't stop me from enjoying some good ol' RP.
If you wanna give constructive criticism, then please be ready to occasionally receive it. Even if you believe yourself to be a better writer than someone, that doesn't mean you can do absolutely everything better than them. No one is attacking you.
As my post stated, I'm not out to argue. I only asked for one thing: An understanding of what exactly was lacking from my CS.
Simply stating that everything is wrong is not helpful to anyone, and slightly childish.
I don't expect to walk out of this agreeing with you. And I don't need to. If my only argument is that I disagree, then I will not write a response at all.
But if you tell me that nothing worked in my CS... then yes... I do think you are lying. Lying because you possibly think, that statement can make me angry or hurt me or something. I can sure as hell always find something good in everyone's posts, and I don't believe mine is so bad it would be hard to find (that possibly sounds like I'm angry because I use words like "hell", but I'm not). I actually don't consider my writing "bad" at all.
If I make you angry, then please take a small break to calm down before responding. I'm sure no one wish for dramatics.
You don't need you to make a long list of flaws or good/bad sentences about my writing. You could probably have finished explaining it to me by now, if you had chosen to focus on shedding some light on what I asked.
Just shoot me a PM with a statement about what you would advice me to work on and why. Just make sure you explain it properly. Now, you don't have to say what is good, just don't say that nothing was right (that doesn't help anyone, and again: It's childish). This is a simple task and quick to do. I can't make you, but from one writer to another: I do believe in all fairness I deserve it.
In all fairness your understanding of where to place a comma is not just wrong my Scandinavian rules. It's wrong (or lacking) by the USA and English too. But who cares? I wasn't disturbed by your way of writing. I only notice things like that, when I analyses a sentence. I rather not take your writing apart and show examples, because I feel like that would only offend you. And again: It didn't stop me from enjoying some good ol' RP.
If you wanna give constructive criticism, then please be ready to occasionally receive it. Even if you believe yourself to be a better writer than someone, that doesn't mean you can do absolutely everything better than them. No one is attacking you.
As my post stated, I'm not out to argue. I only asked for one thing: An understanding of what exactly was lacking from my CS.
Simply stating that everything is wrong is not helpful to anyone, and slightly childish.
I don't expect to walk out of this agreeing with you. And I don't need to. If my only argument is that I disagree, then I will not write a response at all.
But if you tell me that nothing worked in my CS... then yes... I do think you are lying. Lying because you possibly think, that statement can make me angry or hurt me or something. I can sure as hell always find something good in everyone's posts, and I don't believe mine is so bad it would be hard to find (that possibly sounds like I'm angry because I use words like "hell", but I'm not). I actually don't consider my writing "bad" at all.
If I make you angry, then please take a small break to calm down before responding. I'm sure no one wish for dramatics.
You don't need you to make a long list of flaws or good/bad sentences about my writing. You could probably have finished explaining it to me by now, if you had chosen to focus on shedding some light on what I asked.
Just shoot me a PM with a statement about what you would advice me to work on and why. Just make sure you explain it properly. Now, you don't have to say what is good, just don't say that nothing was right (that doesn't help anyone, and again: It's childish). This is a simple task and quick to do. I can't make you, but from one writer to another: I do believe in all fairness I deserve it.
Gowi said
On pending CS’s from: Thatguy and Ben.I feel a little divided on this one as I have no doubt of the enthusiasm and drive for Ultimate DC in the last few seasons though I do feel I have to stress that while I don’t want to come off as being opposed to Andy’s (and Master Bruce’s) inclusiveness – I feel that to up the quality control of this as a roleplay I have to put some objectivity in the ballpark and concern myself with grammar/spelling and narrative. For Ben, there’s a lot that I see that need to be went over—may I suggest a word processor or something of that effect that covers grammar as well? I don’t want to bar people from the roleplay, but I want to push it to a quality that some of the people I’ve consulted with desire and I can’t promise them quality like this. This is not an outright denial, but I’d like to see more out of the applications (both of them) before I make comments of consideration. I am not Andy, but I am not Thrawn – so I think I offer a comfortable middle when I ask for a little more than last time. However, I will stress that this isn’t a developmental circuit either. If you want to run in this low advanced / high casual roleplay then let’s show me that dedication; if not, then perhaps down the line after some more time and development I’d have changed my tune. I apologize if this seems overly non-inclusive, firm, and shattering – but I made a promise to myself and the players when this responsibility got handed to me and I’m trying to go for it. The word of the day is Quality Control and I do not know how to enforce it without burning bridges. I hope that much is understood. I know that this seems to go against "have fun"... but I've always felt we should strive for something more than careless fun when sitting down to write something together where it is fun . I hope that isn't seen in a negative way.I am in the chat if informal chat is more appropriate, but otherwise 'tis my judgement.TLDR – Revise your apps, work on grammar & spelling, show me a sample with a little more drive or convince me through other means that you're still able to commit to this game.Taking a look, will let you know judgement. The sample shows some narrative I particularly look forward to reading and all of it seems to check out. The Gypsy / The Spirit (with a dash of Nightshade/Shade) blend is particularly interesting and I can't wait to see where you take it on with. Accepted.
Well I’m not quite sure, what you mean. I have looked over my CS, and I really only found 2-3 places or so, that needed to be fixed (according to my understanding of the English language, of course).
I realize, there are slightly different comma rules in Scandinavia (I use those, cause I’m from there), but after reading yours and mine (Based on the OC intro post of this RP) I do however come to the conclusion, that I could teach you where to place a comma. That possibly seems like a low blow, yeah. Hopefully you see it as a fair point, and believe that I have no intentions to analyze and argue over verbs and stuff. I just want to be sure that, that is not, what you are talking about. I assume your understanding of quality control, on an advanced RP, don’t involve that kind of grammar and syntax.
Which lets me to assume that, you are talking about, how well I bend verbs and stuff like that, right?
Well, as I wrote, I couldn’t really find much wrong with what, I had written before. And what I have written before is more or less the standard, I'm able to write with, once the IC starts. I guess that is bad news for me, because that does mean, I can’t be a part of the IC.
Just because I was a part of the previous season (and a positive force I dare say so), you, of course, don’t owe me a spot on this one. This is your RP, your rules and your understanding of right and wrong (just like any GM).
I do however (hopefully the other players will agree) believe, I deserve to walk out of this with a perfect understanding of what exactly was wrong/not good enough with my CS. Because, like I said, I couldn’t find anything wrong.
EDIT: This is a shame, of course. I had really missed the previous RP and was excited to see it start again. There are also a lot of great people involved.
Gowi said
Added a bit to the plot, nothing conflicting but hey.
Could you include a line from my characters experiences?
Maybe just the fact that Zatanna has traveled to Gotham and her purpose or something.
cool ;)
Archangel89 said
It sounds like Zatanna and Stevens might make a interesting team Ben
Oh yeah, that sounds like an idea ;)
Well , I imagined, I continued, right where I left off actually. Maybe I have forgotten something. Dunno.
The last part of the backstory in the CS is pretty much, what I did with the character, before the site went down.
When it ended Zatanna and her father had battled Zachary and Manuel Carlito, at Gotham National Bank, and defeated them. Unfortunate both villains disappeared. And since Zatanna had so obviously teleported through Gotham (to save her father) the secret identity of Zatanna Zatara was not so secret anymore.
They had interrogated the killer doll and found out about the Council of dark magical user, who greatly outnumbered them, 10 ot 1.
They are planning their next move with the computer genius, Lucas Carr.
I don't know what in the CS or told her that fits best being mentioned in the intro.
The last part of the backstory in the CS is pretty much, what I did with the character, before the site went down.
When it ended Zatanna and her father had battled Zachary and Manuel Carlito, at Gotham National Bank, and defeated them. Unfortunate both villains disappeared. And since Zatanna had so obviously teleported through Gotham (to save her father) the secret identity of Zatanna Zatara was not so secret anymore.
They had interrogated the killer doll and found out about the Council of dark magical user, who greatly outnumbered them, 10 ot 1.
They are planning their next move with the computer genius, Lucas Carr.
I don't know what in the CS or told her that fits best being mentioned in the intro.
Character Sheet:
Name: Dave Cutter
Age: 34
Appearance:
Brief Description: There really had been no question Dave was gonna join the military. His father had been NAVY, his uncle had been NAVY, and his grandfather had worked in the Pentagon.
After a strict childhood, military school and 2 years of boot camp, in the middle of nowhere, he became US soldier. The hard work only paid off when bureaus starting showing interest too. One thing led to another and suddenly he didn't need to spend time in some foreign hellhole, he was CIA.
Being a CIA operative he had been monitoring an international criminal, currently located in Tokyo, for the past 6 months. Then something happened. Something no one could have predicted. Buildings fell like dominos and roads became infernos. Something bigger and more terrifying than anything else made Tokyo tremble and fall. Hell had begun and David was suddenly caught in the middle of it.
David can both act from the goodness of his heart and yet make cold calculate decisions for the bureau. Surviving in a warzone is what he is good at. He is well trained. But he is in the dark on this one, and orders no man should do alone has been placed on him. His supplies are limited, the bullet in his concealed weapon are few. Dave is only one man and can’t possibly fight his way out of all scenarios the world now throws at him. The biggest threat are not always bombs, collapsing building or giant monsters. Sometimes the biggest treat are the people around you, and Dave is completely alone.
Dave is placed right in the destruction. He is caught between helping his fellow man and carrying out the cruel order from a barely working walky-talky.
Can he be trusted? Maybe. Maybe not. But he does know right from wrong when he sees it.
Name: Dave Cutter
Age: 34
Appearance:
Brief Description: There really had been no question Dave was gonna join the military. His father had been NAVY, his uncle had been NAVY, and his grandfather had worked in the Pentagon.
After a strict childhood, military school and 2 years of boot camp, in the middle of nowhere, he became US soldier. The hard work only paid off when bureaus starting showing interest too. One thing led to another and suddenly he didn't need to spend time in some foreign hellhole, he was CIA.
Being a CIA operative he had been monitoring an international criminal, currently located in Tokyo, for the past 6 months. Then something happened. Something no one could have predicted. Buildings fell like dominos and roads became infernos. Something bigger and more terrifying than anything else made Tokyo tremble and fall. Hell had begun and David was suddenly caught in the middle of it.
David can both act from the goodness of his heart and yet make cold calculate decisions for the bureau. Surviving in a warzone is what he is good at. He is well trained. But he is in the dark on this one, and orders no man should do alone has been placed on him. His supplies are limited, the bullet in his concealed weapon are few. Dave is only one man and can’t possibly fight his way out of all scenarios the world now throws at him. The biggest threat are not always bombs, collapsing building or giant monsters. Sometimes the biggest treat are the people around you, and Dave is completely alone.
Dave is placed right in the destruction. He is caught between helping his fellow man and carrying out the cruel order from a barely working walky-talky.
Can he be trusted? Maybe. Maybe not. But he does know right from wrong when he sees it.
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