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ok, thanks, I wasn't sure
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Okay, my computer completely died (again. This is the fourth time in four months, and I've already sent it back to the manufacturer three times...sick of computers) and I can't connect to titanpad on my laptop for some reason. Trying to figure it out, but yeah. It's irritating.

Edit: Titanpad is working, but my pc is not. Not to fear, I have a laptop so I'll still be around to post and everything.
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Yeah, I rushed her out the gate a bit so I could have her out for look and critique before I stepped away from the cpu for the rest of the evening.

I'd say those are mostly fair critiques, and I will likely post Cinis for this game if a 'C' name is still needed. But I will also go ahead and address the comments given I don't think I'll be able to sleep till I do lol. As soon as I posted this character I was already super iffy about most of the things ya'll brought up.

Glad you like that name :D sad it doesn't fit, should have re-read the FP closer, my bad. I did choose the description poorly. I picture to have this strong but lonely sort of face, reminiscent of a solitary hunter. Went with wolf because bats have wolf like faces. again my bad.

Sorry, had meant to add the symbol link, must have forgotten in my haste. this is it writhed in a ribbon.

KNIGHT! That was the word I was looking for! Thank you, that much better suits her.

I struggled ALOT with having the weapon turn into a gun, with the whole blind thing. Went with a berreta simply because its the more recognizable gun, but yeah a smaller caliber would make more sense. Though, if she is to be introduced later after refining I personally think I would remove the gun transformation all together and make it so the head launches off, connected to the staff chain of significant length making it a flail or sorts as well as a grappling hook perhaps? Though when pyrra's weapon is a sword, spear, and a rifle I feel like a full length bec de corbin, especially given I described the proportions of the head to be much larger than a traditional one, could become a gun. But again, I don't think I would have her use a fire arm in a polished version.

And yeah, I am generally unhappy with this rendition of her back story. Especially the hunter scene, was focused way to much involving that trigger for hunting I guess. Can't argue with the fact that it over all doesn't fit with her later personality. And yeah realistically her burns would have been worst, but it is unnecessary to the character for them to be that much worst. Fleshing it out more would be that her mom was the target and she only got hit with enough to burn her eyes and good chunk the area above them due to proximity would likely help with that issue if it is really a important one.

Though again I don't feel it is any less realistic that say Blake being an apparent orphan as far as we can tell running with a violent activist group?

As for your comments @Madninja324

I think your over thinking the weapon realism in a rwby game a bit much. I mean, Ruby herself has a weapon that would weigh an impossible amount to be handled with the grace, speed, and elegance she does. I mean she is 14-15 in the series right? Yet she can cut through a whole tree with no effort with one handed swing? Withstand the recoil of a sniper rifle so strong it can launch her and effect her entire bodies momentum? But my ballerina (one of the more physically demanding dances) cant wield a pole arm that would be the collective third of that kind of mass and weight with equal ease?

I see Bijou wielding the weapon kind of as it is; a combination staff, hammer, ax, spear. Just as ballet is a combination of forms and positions ranged to make a dance. Her weapon, when wielded with the wild exaggerated prowess of a character in the rwby universe would have an incredible sense of rhythm and style. Hack, smash, stab. One two three. Swing, thrust, cut.
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TL;DR (because it really was) Our suggestions;

Move the gun transformation from the Becs de Corbin and over to a buckler, which can be a shield/shotgun or SMG combo. The background, maybe make her blind from birth instead. Blake's background is explained as being part of a peaceful activist group up until three years ago, and she got out because they were getting too violent. Realism in RWBY; the weapons are all designed with no clipping, completely coherant and functional 3D models. Aura makes you super human. Ruby has no combat skills outside of Crescent Rose. And for her style, if you want a dancing style go with a sword like rapier. You don't get more dancer-ish than that.
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So when I was working on Bijou's fighting style and her character in general I was heavily inspired by Sara from Samurai Champloo. Who's fighting style I would call elegant and dance like using sweeping strikes, dance like twirls for momentum, thrusts, and terrifying crushing power. Originally I actually had Bijou with the same weapon as her but thought it would be to on the nose and that a Crows beak would better suit her french knight theme. Perhaps that is a better example of what I mean when I say 'dance like style'.

Given her defensive semblance I don't see the point in giving her a buckler? and while a shot gun does solve the accuracy issue of a blind character it is also one of the most destructive close range firearms one could possible have. If one has any worry about friendly fire being an issue giving the blind girl the shot gun seems to be counter productive to me. I much prefer the idea of the head being launched like a grappling hook like fashion and also having flail like application afterwards?

I tried to get her to work with a sword for months, but eh...it just doesn't suite her. Rapiers and dueling blades simple do not speak to character for me? IDK perhaps its a personal problem and I need to compactly over hall the character.

ANYWHO

Shall I just post Cinis's character sheet? Or are there any alterations you'd like me to make to her character before bringing her over?
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For organizational purposes, only Me, Fox, and Spirit are posting in the character thread, since the characters are being put under hiders with the rest of the team.
But feel free to post her here on the OOC thread, if y have any adjustments you'd like to make to Ciis, go ahead.
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That makes sense. Okay expect to see her soon. I'll give her an once over to see if anything bares alteration.

heh, may add that 'Ciis' ( sis ) as a nick name just to give people the excuse to sneak in the line 'pretty sneaky Ciis'
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Wow you really aren't a fan of word play or puns huh lol.

Okay, no nick names for Cinis.
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No, it just wasn't very good.
besides, Ciis is a bit close to that thing feminazis call people
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I'm starting to have second thoughts with Leon's semblance, as I feel like I'm hitting the sailor motif a smidge too hard. What do you folks say: yay or nay on keeping Waterkinesis?
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1:It's hydrokinesis
2:It works for him, but if you're worried it's relying too much on the sailor theme, maybe something a bit more generic, like like strength?
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That makes sense. Okay expect to see her soon. I'll give her an once over to see if anything bares alteration.

heh, may add that 'Ciis' ( sis ) as a nick name just to give people the excuse to sneak in the line 'pretty sneaky Ciis'


You know, if Cinis was really going to get a nickname...I would have thought it'd be something like Cin...which sounds like sin. I don't think she's the nickname type.
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The funny thing is, I actually read what I wrote as hydrokinesis. I honestly have no idea how that got past me.

But any who, here we are. Once more, with feeling.


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Alright, remove the ability to CREATE water from the semblance, and Leon is good to go. Spirit will add him to team CLRT soon as she has time.
After that, we're waiting on Cinis and Tamn, and then we'll need 2 more players.
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This is a bit of a nitpick, but what made you guy's think that Cereza would be a good leader for CLRT? She has only minimal leadership traits that showed in the description of her personality, she doesn't understand people at all, has little to no respect for the lives of others and is by your own description somewhat amoral, the only thing she has going for her as a leader is her brain, she's smart and clever enough to lead in combat, but she isn't empathic enough to lead outside combat

This is all my opinion based on observations from her character sheet
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Two possible reasons exkst for someone being appointed leader:they take initiative, or they can learn the most from the experience out of the team members.
Cereza, as you said, is amoral, and incapable of empathy. She NEEDS to be forced to learn these skills, so she was made leader.
also, i put my co-GMs in charge of the teams so they can moderate them and prevent godmodding.
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fair points
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Word to the wise, I just updated the provided character template to the most recent version, all that changed is added likes/dislikes and skin color, plus integration of the existing weapon and semblance templates. updating is purely optional, as it is pretty much purely a cosmetic change.
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