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EldritchOne said
You sent me a message a couple hours ago, so I replied to it.


I saw, I'm pretty sure I sent you a contact request...??
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Nope, probably the wrong person.
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And posted.

I want to make something clear, now: You don't have to do it as coop posts, but if you want I'm not gonna stop you. You would also have to decide the outcome between each other. That's not something I'm gonna decide. Not this time, at any rate.

Also, Lazo, sorry for throwing you out alone, but I can't do two character's fighting atm. A bit too much for me, and I trust you the most when it comes to being able to write a realistic fight yourself :) and you can decide the specifics when it comes to Charles. Appearance, Shifter Class and Creature, what he can do etc. All that's set in stone is his name and the fact that he's French :p
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And posted. I want to make something clear, now: You don't have to do it as coop posts, but if you want I'm not gonna stop you. You would also have to decide the outcome between each other. That's not something I'm gonna decide. Not this time, at any rate. Also, Lazo, sorry for throwing you out alone, but I can't do two character's fighting atm. A bit too much for me, and I trust you the most when it comes to being able to write a realistic fight yourself :) and you can decide the specifics when it comes to Charles. Appearance, Shifter Class and Creature, what he can do etc. All that's set in stone is his name and the fact that he's French :p


Fight prediction: "I surrender!"

Unless of course we're going by actual reason and knowledge and not internet hivemind thought.
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I'm sorry to say that due to some stuff which I haven't seen coming, I most likely won't be capable of posting in any roleplay until next weekend. Things IRL have just become very busy for me. You also won't be seeing me on skype or such, as I do not have time to be on my computer, or at least, I shouldn't have any free time...

I'm sorry that you see this here, but I literally got a single moment to post this and inform another roleplay before crashing into bed. Early morning starts and late night ending days...

I'll be able to properly talk to you all next weekend or so. So I'll see you then!
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Don't worry, Nim. Things are busy for the rest of us, too, so things are moving slow.
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Much as I like that you guys moved ahead, I would've preferred that you kept it to the same day. This seems to be the next day, unless I'm mistaken and they got Charles and Celica out on a date later that day.

also, hi again :P
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Much as I like that you guys moved ahead, I would've preferred that you kept it to the same day. This seems to be the next day, unless I'm mistaken and they got Charles and Celica out on a date later that day. also, hi again :P


KAPU

YOU'RE ALIVE

OMFHD*GSUBUPHDUOSILHUDO*PDHBIGO&W*PY*WIDB&G*AY

Wooo

Also I think we can explain, pretty sure we haven't done any jumps ahead that weren't already planned or whatnot : /
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Name: Cassandra Sinclair ("Cassie") Age: 20 Sex: Female Shifter Form: Phoenix (Fae class)
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Oh, Hi Hanako. Didn't see you there. I think you're in the wrong game ;) Anywho, I'll return later. I've read most but don't have time for the Background. I'll get a reply back to you later today. Hopefully.
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I have five hours until I need to be waking up, but I did a bit of skimming, but I feel the need to point out that Mythic essence can't be "rejected" by the body. While I'm not Kapuchu, I do know that it's working with... dormant? magic already in the system, and not like sticking a new organ in somebody. Also, her powers, I'd suggest giving them a bit of a buff; Fae are magical artillery batteries, but physically weaker compared to say, Demons. But y'know, magical artillery batteries. Who doesn't want to have magical artillery power? And if you're wondering why I'm commenting, Kapuchu himself is currently in India for something, so I'm functioning as a demi-GM of sorts for now.
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Hiya Monochromatic Rainbow. I actually welcome any comments from anyone. That way I can refine and reedit parts that don't work. Thanks. I was wondering if that rejecting part would fit in with the whole plot. I shall edit that part out. ^_^ I'll also wait for Kapuchu's comments regarding my character's powers before I do some editing.
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Alright. Time to write Ze Responze. Like Mono said, I would like to have her powers fleshed out a bit more. Examples of what she can do, and so on (Yes, you can go full on Pokémon and have her send out a torrent of fire from her beak). Generally, add a bit more description to her powers, and not just "She can do fire." Same goes for the healing. About the healing, by the way, you can make her healing powers a bit stronger. She is a Phoenix after all, and they are one of the very few Mythics who actually have healing powers, so feel free to make them a bit stronger. You're lacking a bit in the appearance description as well, and while it's "fine," I'd still like to actually get a bit more details. Speaking of: Purple/Violet eyes is a no-go, I'm afraid. It's just not possible for a human to have that eye colour. So flesh out the appearance description (Ethnicity, and such. Where does it look like she's from, based on appearance? My character, Lily, has black hair and dark eyes, and a slightly round face. Add to that a very slim build and you find that all are traits that are very common in Asia. Lily half japanese). Mythic Essence can't be rejected. All humans have magic, but it's like a blob of clay. The Mythic Essence comes in and molds it to a certain shape. Once it is shaped, it can't be changed. Also: All humans are compatible with Mythics, it's just a question of what Mythic they are compatible with. Furthermore, the Shifter Program/Twin Soul Program was started ten years ago, so when Cassie was 10. Her getting wounded in the attack when she was 15 is okay, however. This also means that her parents couldn't have been parts of the research team even before she was born. They would've worked on it in ten years, max. It took only 6 months to complete, after all. Finally (I think) there is her speed. While birds can fly fast, I think you made her a tiny bit too fast. Reduce the gliding speed by 20 km/h (both minimum and max), make the current one its Flight speed (flapping its wings) and keep the Diving Speed as it is. These are all faster than an actual Bald Eagle, but not as ludicrously fast as before. The Demons are supposed to be the Speed Monsters, not the Fae. That should be it, then. Also, +1 bonus point for being the first non-humanoid Shifter :p
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Alrighty. Thanks for the comments. Will edit soon. :)
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Alrighty. Thanks for the comments. Will edit soon. :)
I made a bummer. I read something as km/h when it was mph. Keep the diving speed as 160-180 km/h, but still reduce the rest by the requested amount.
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Edited. ^_^ awaiting comments. ^_^
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Ещё раз здравствуйте! (Hello again!) I'm back and commenting some more, hope you don't mind.
In the year 2063
Actually this is more like 2540, or thereabouts, just figured I'd let you know.
There was widespread panic and massive destruction all over the world.
Again based on my own knowledge, Endolas attacked near Munich and wreaked havoc certainly, but there was no worldwide devastation.
To Cassie, it was a normal day.
This is more of a minor personal nitpick, but you might want to put something to show this is going from, "Her parents did this" to the day her life went to Argentina.
The tests showed a very high compatibility.
Part of her rejoiced at testing positive
As Kapu has already said himself, all humans are compatible with a mythic of some sort, so there wouldn't really be a "high compatibility" or "testing positive", I admit I made this mistake myself. Just figured I'd say it again. Because nitpicks. Heheh, sorry about that.
* She is visited by her parents a lot (well, if they are allowed to visit)
To my knowledge, absolutely! You also get the equivalent of two thousand USD a month as a third year :) And that's all that really stood out to me, I think it looks pretty good otherwise, but of course Kapuchu himself has the final say in things. Also:
The woman fell to the ground, writhing, her body reduced to a twisted mass of burnt flesh as it hit the pavement.
You'll fit in well here I think, especially with Eldritch and myself. Another small note, seeing as you gave her information in imperial you might want to keep a calculator with metric conversion ready, we basically just use metric here.
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Hi Monochromatic Rainbow. Thanks for the comments. ^_^ Lol. I made a typo with the year... I think I was talking about the numbers 20 and 63 with someone when I was editing this. And so put the same numbers in. I feel so silly. Lol. I'll edit this one now. And for the rest of the comments, I shall keep those in mind and wait for Kapuchu's comments that way I do only one editing. ^_^ The comments and suggestions are making me write better. Thanks ^_^ and I do hope I fit in well with you guys.
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I do hope I fit in well with you guys.
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Ah, them accursed typos. Bane of all who use computers. And I'm sure you'll fit in fine :)
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I said earlier that I'll wait for Kapuchu but I'm editing the parts you commented on already. ;p
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