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Name: Ebon Umbranox
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Weapon: Ebon uses what looks like a huge tower shield known as "The Kingdom". A very heavy shield that Ebon can swing and bash his foes with, but there's a secret to it that is it's true power. The Kingdom stores about a hundred "R-Types", drone ships about the size of a handgun within. Each of these R-Types can be used for different purposes with different equipment, from simply being fast moving shooting drones, to melee-oriented drones that grapple and swarm his enemies, to recon that allows him to have a knowledge of the battlefield. Some drones can take more damage than others, and if they can return to The Kingdom they can get repaired within the next few minutes. The R-Types, while mechanical in nature, rely entirely on Ebon's semblance to operate; if anything else tries to all they'll get is a useless model ship.

Specialty: Ebon prefers to use his R-Types to fight for him, controlling them from a safe distance to break down his opponents. Not that he can't handle himself in a fight, but this is just how he works best. Like a sniper, it's best if the enemy isn't in his face.

Semblance: Ebon's Semblance is basically Telepathy and Telekinesis which he calls "Mind of Matter", but it works on just about everything, even inanimate objects. Specifically what it's like is as though he was right where the person or object is, and he can see what they see, hear what they hear, and feel what they feel like he was there himself. He can also use this power to communicate with others or distract them by filling their thoughts with white noise or making their imagination work against them self. He can telekentically control inanimate objects or unconscious creatures. Ebon mainly uses this power on his R-Types so he can figure out what he needs them to do, as the telepathic reading is instantaneous; he can read the thoughts of everyone or everything around him in less than a moment.

Personality: Ebon can be a rough guy to be around. He always seems to be on edge, like he expects you to fight him. He can't help it as he grew up with a fairly violent history; you don't make threats you don't intend to carry out, and Ebon is more likely to act on those threats than other people are. He can also be very superficial; he'll judge you for whatever reason, be it your gender, your race, your weapon, your appearance, or even just your name. He can be a hard guy to get close to and he typically does that on purpose as he doesn't want to make emotional connections. If you can tolerate him being an asshole to you, he'll slowly begin to warm up to you, but only if you can prove that you're not about to die any time soon. He hates the idea of losing his friends and will go out of his way to save them, even if he has to kill hundreds of others to do that.

Color: Ebony

Emblem: A castle tower (Kind of like a rook from chess) with three arrows coming from the top. This is suppose to be The Kingdom, and the arrows represent his R-Types.

Appearance: Ebon is a tall, black skinned young man. He has a rather full beard for a 19 year old which he keeps braided. Despite his dark attitude he wears colorful clothing, prefers warm colors like red and yellow, though he doesn't mind wearing light blue and green as well. He also doesn't like shoes and often goes barefoot, though he'll settling for sandals if he has to. Regardless of what his outfit is he always wares a black duster with it's sleeves torn off, and on the back is his emblem in white. He has burn scars covering most of his body, and practically all of his face except around his mouth where his beard grows out.
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Damn, so many typos. Typed that from my phone. How does it look?
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his bread grows out.


I'm sorry, but I couldn't help but laugh at this. Good to know my team's got their own personal baker now.
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I'm sorry, but I couldn't help but laugh at this. Good to know my team's got their own personal baker now.


Dammit. I knew I was missing something. Well I edited that.
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Dammit. I knew I was missing something. Well I edited that.


Too late, Ebon is now the official team baker. I hope he likes his new position.
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Meh, I guess it's something he can do. He as a trauma of fire though, so I hope you like microwaved cake.
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Just gonna chip in that I hate reboots of any kind :C If anything, do a timeskip to after graduation when teams won't HAVE to stick together.
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Just gonna chip in that I hate reboots of any kind :C If anything, do a timeskip to after graduation when teams won't HAVE to stick together.


Ye best start believing in reboots...yer in one!

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Only cuz I wasn't in the first instance xD
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Ebon looks fine by me, though I've having trouble picturing a hundred drones hiding in a shield. I'm sure once you start writing I'll be able to get a better picture.

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Ye best start believing in reboots...yer in one!


I tried to make it more of a continuation, with it being the second chapter and all.

Speaking of continuing, would anyone like the honor of posting as Ni? If not, I'll do it this evening, and speed over sixth hour in that class. We're also waiting on Shadowkiller to do Music class. After that, we can get the three new members in, and we can all do an evening post if we choose, dealing with what our character did in the evening/afternoon of their first day at Beacon. From there we skip straight to missions. Hype!
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So... is practice moving on too, then?
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Absolutely.

Oh, and Eklipse. I created that water effect by taking an Aura (in the backplane section) that looked like a target, turning it blue, and resizing it.
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I am unbelievably sorry for my absence. Like Kaithas reported a while back (and I commented on when I was briefly able), my internet was out for a while, and school was a large factor. And then when both of those things had rectified themselves, and I poked my head in here to say that I'd be trying to catch up, they all happened again. We found the source of the internet issue, however, and fixed it. And I am on April vacation all of this week, so I have time to catch up on all the snowballed posts that I missed.

I haven't had a chance to talk with the other BAST players in a while, but I'll try and get in touch with them to see if they're also able to be here.

Sorry again.
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I am in process of writing the IC Music teacher post.
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I am unbelievably sorry for my absence. Like Kaithas reported a while back (and I commented on when I was briefly able), my internet was out for a while, and school was a large factor. And then when both of those things had rectified themselves, and I poked my head in here to say that I'd be trying to catch up, they all happened again. We found the source of the internet issue, however, and fixed it. And I am on April vacation all of this week, so I have time to catch up on all the snowballed posts that I missed.

I haven't had a chance to talk with the other BAST players in a while, but I'll try and get in touch with them to see if they're also able to be here.

Sorry again.


That's a major relief! Glad to see that Narayan wasn't be all alone after all.

Good stuff, shadow.
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@Jangel13 Hey dude, not to be rude or anything but is English your first language?
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@Prince of Seraphsyes it is, yes it's a Grammer lovers nightmare, tell me where I went wrong so I can fix it cause my focus is on the post not in its syntax errors
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@Jangel13 the syntax erros aren't the problem, it's the way you write. I'm not saying this to be mean but seriously dude you got to step it up. A good number of your posts, grammar errors aside, read more like lists than they do roleplay entrees. You need to craft a story not a series of actions placed in order. Like this last one, it reads like this.

Greyson did not want to get on the raft
Greyson got on a raft
Greyson entered the rapids
Greyson was forced to battle a harpy
Greyson won the battle easily
Greyson went through the portal
Greyson thought he was drowning
Greyson was discouraged that school wasn't over
Greyson dried himself off and checked his weapons

No one wants to read a list of actions, we want a story, we want to know what's going on in your characters head. Is he angry that he took this class? Is he having fun? Is he killing the harpy with a flamable round (overkill) because he's mad at it or just to save time. When I read your posts there is a complete disconnect between what your character is doing and what he is thinking or feeling about what he's doing, as in you don't write almost anything inside Greyson's head. I could tell you everything Greyson's done since he got to Beacon, I could tell you what type of weapon he uses and the extents of his semblance but from your writing I have no idea who Greyson is. He does this, he does that but I've not got one glint that he has a personality beyond what his actions are. I'm sorry to be blunt but it's the truth.

That and you have a bad tendency to use the same words especially verbs and descriptive terms, for a lot of your post. I'll read one of yours and see the same word used three times in two sentences.

This is something like what a Greyson post could look like if had some feeling put into it. We like the details, they make your posts interesting cause right now your writing is skeletal in nature it has absolutely no meat or substance. Please work on it.

Greyson ran to the water's edge seeing the exit appeared to have been set up in the unstable waters. This seemed like a truly terrible idea but Greyson had had absolutely enough of this class, he was tired from the running, the fighting and the acid falling on his head. At this point anything that got him out of this forest would be welcome, even an apparent death ride over the river rapids. Greyson hopped onto of the barges and pushed it away from short into the depths of the thundering rapids.

It wasn't long before Greyson was attacked. He was fed up with this. First it was the Ankou, then the Itzamnas called in as reinforcements and finally the Salamanders raining acid down on all there heads. The harpy slashing at the side of his raft was the last straw. Greyson loaded a phosphorous round into his weapon to ensure the Grimm died swiftly and painfully. Greyson was done playing around, now he was just wanted to return to his dorms and sleep for an eternity. Greyson discharged his weapon into the harpy violently and watched in satisfaction as if burned before dissolving into the waters.

Greyson was expecting another harpy to take a swift at the side of his raft, it was a complete surprise when his barge tipped backwards as Greyson was pitched over the side of the water fall. He was certain he was going to his the water and be shattered and bloodied by the sharp rocks below. When Greyson hit water he was surprised to discover that none of his bones had broken from the impact. Greyson began to flail wildly determined not to let the rough waters kill him after he survived the fall.

Greyson's hand struck stone as he flapped around wildly and he young hunter realized he wasn't in the river anymore, they'd all landed in the fountain in front of the Gates of Beacon. Greyson groaned loudly as he haled himself out of fountain and collapsed on the stone. School wasn't even over and already he was ready to go back to his room and sleep for an eternity. At least his next class was Music, that was guaranteed to be calm and if he was lucky he might even be able to get some sleep. Greyson rose begrudgingly and started trying to ring ring out his cloths. "God damn it." he muttered giving it up. He'd have to go back to the dorms for a change of cloths. Through some spark of good fortune the dust cartridges of Greyson's weapons had remained dry through the whole ordeal. Maybe there was a small piece of good fortune in all of this.
Greyson Ortega


For the love of god do not simply copy this over your most recent entree. This is my work and you won't improve your skill by copying someone else's stuff word for word. Use it to get an idea of how your posts could work and even improve on it.
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I know how posting works forgive me if it isn't my best but it was a rush job, this is not my only focus I wanted to get a post in before I was warned pm to make a post or be left behind. Forgive me if I seem frustrated
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Please @Lugubrious for the love of all that is holy allow us to have at least some of sixth period rather than just bypassing it with a teachers post.

Stal assigned Sapphire the Double Bass immediately once talking to her after class. There would be changes as Sapphire would have to switch to bass clef and would help her into her transition as a Bassist.


In a million years Sapphire's not going to stand for this. She didn't enlist in music class in order to join the school band, if she had wanted to join the school band she would have done so. Sapphire joined music class in order to increase her abilities as a violinist and a singer. If Shadow tried this IC in a setting where we were all allowed to participate then it would set off a full blown fight between the teacher and Sapphire which isn't something that Shadow can just skate over in one IC post.

There is of course also the fact that Sapphire can't sight read which was also glossed over. She plays music by ear not by sheet music.
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