@Eyeris I made edits to Overlord Luna. Don't know how to nerf Regina. Anything you can tell me would be helpful.
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Any one of her eleven powers could be interesting if you fleshed it out, and potent enough on its own.
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Name: Dayna
Age: Unknown
Gender: Female
Species: Wild Elemental Sprite
World of Origin:
Appearance: Although most wild sprites tend to remain in wisp form, They do have the ability to change their form and manifest in an elemental beast form whenever they see fit while still maintaining an equal balance of strength between all the elemental energies of Sentrance; Earth, Fire Wind, and Water. Dayna is seen mostly as a pulsating glowing ball of blue energy. Just like the other races of Sentrance, Dayna exhibits two concentrated orbs of light that serve as eyes. Her's are an emerald green in color and it is this specific shade of green suggests she has been marked by Genacious.
Abilities and skills: Ability to manipulate all four elemental energies, shape shifting capabilities.
Strengths and Weaknesses: Being a ball of energy herself, Dayna is very sensitive to other forms of energy, and strangely in tune with the emotions of others. On the other side of the coin though, this leaves her supsceptable to forms of energy leeching or draining. Although Dayna can use all of the elemental energies at equal strength, she was still being trained to control them before entering the rift. She would be comparable to a mid level mage as far as strength right now. Enough to do some damage, but not as strong as a more developed Elemental Sprite. Some of her stronger skills would be executed with mixed results, sometimes successful, sometimes not. On rare occasions strong spikes would equal more devastating attacks. Dayna is unable to alter her form much at this stage of her training. She is able to alter it enough to say materialize and arm or two, some fingers etc. but is constantly seeking and training to be able to manifest as an elemental beast.
Equipment Requests: None
History: Since she was merely a spark, Dayna has been very close to Genacious, the Guardian of Life on Sentrance. Once she was matured enough, Genacious introduced her to Deuce, a local Elemental Earth Clan member. The two have been trained by Genacious' hands and are marked by the Guardian of Life to fulfill great things.
Personality: The Wild Sprites of Sentrance have very explosive personalities and generally live a solitary life.They are formidable opponents should one pick a fight with them and most often the wild sprite will leave the fight with little injuries.They do not focus on war so they are always neutral when it comes to other wild sprites and their respective elemental clan counterparts. Dayna is an exception as she has been marked by Genacious himself. she is fiercly loyal to those she is close to. Dayna is kindred spirits to a member of one of the Earth Elemental clans of Sentrance and up until the rift, the two have been inseparable. A very unique relationship by Sentrance standards. She has a very curious and determined nature and shows little fear.
Age: Unknown
Gender: Female
Species: Wild Elemental Sprite
World of Origin:
Sentrance is an elemental plane, not that different from earth in regards to nature and the environment. It has four seasons that cycle just like earth has.
There are wild elemental sprites located in a region known as the Eternal Gardens. They are sparked into existence, under the direct charge of the Guardian of Life Genacious. Wild sprites are granted the ability to manipulate all the elements, with equal strength but it takes intense tutelage from Genacious himself.
There are wild elemental sprites located in a region known as the Eternal Gardens. They are sparked into existence, under the direct charge of the Guardian of Life Genacious. Wild sprites are granted the ability to manipulate all the elements, with equal strength but it takes intense tutelage from Genacious himself.
Appearance: Although most wild sprites tend to remain in wisp form, They do have the ability to change their form and manifest in an elemental beast form whenever they see fit while still maintaining an equal balance of strength between all the elemental energies of Sentrance; Earth, Fire Wind, and Water. Dayna is seen mostly as a pulsating glowing ball of blue energy. Just like the other races of Sentrance, Dayna exhibits two concentrated orbs of light that serve as eyes. Her's are an emerald green in color and it is this specific shade of green suggests she has been marked by Genacious.
Abilities and skills: Ability to manipulate all four elemental energies, shape shifting capabilities.
Strengths and Weaknesses: Being a ball of energy herself, Dayna is very sensitive to other forms of energy, and strangely in tune with the emotions of others. On the other side of the coin though, this leaves her supsceptable to forms of energy leeching or draining. Although Dayna can use all of the elemental energies at equal strength, she was still being trained to control them before entering the rift. She would be comparable to a mid level mage as far as strength right now. Enough to do some damage, but not as strong as a more developed Elemental Sprite. Some of her stronger skills would be executed with mixed results, sometimes successful, sometimes not. On rare occasions strong spikes would equal more devastating attacks. Dayna is unable to alter her form much at this stage of her training. She is able to alter it enough to say materialize and arm or two, some fingers etc. but is constantly seeking and training to be able to manifest as an elemental beast.
Equipment Requests: None
History: Since she was merely a spark, Dayna has been very close to Genacious, the Guardian of Life on Sentrance. Once she was matured enough, Genacious introduced her to Deuce, a local Elemental Earth Clan member. The two have been trained by Genacious' hands and are marked by the Guardian of Life to fulfill great things.
Personality: The Wild Sprites of Sentrance have very explosive personalities and generally live a solitary life.They are formidable opponents should one pick a fight with them and most often the wild sprite will leave the fight with little injuries.They do not focus on war so they are always neutral when it comes to other wild sprites and their respective elemental clan counterparts. Dayna is an exception as she has been marked by Genacious himself. she is fiercly loyal to those she is close to. Dayna is kindred spirits to a member of one of the Earth Elemental clans of Sentrance and up until the rift, the two have been inseparable. A very unique relationship by Sentrance standards. She has a very curious and determined nature and shows little fear.
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Sos' new CS sheet here for your considerations. Let me know if it fits
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@jdh97None of them are all that strong. I could nerf some of them, though not too many.
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Sos' new CS sheet here for your considerations. Let me know if it fits
Personally, I'd like a little more clarification as to what exactly her powers do, and the extent of them, as currently it is very ambiguous.
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hmmm lets see. Well the elemental energies of her homelnds are Earth, Fire Wind and water. Given her race as a Wild sprite she can use them all at an equal strength. the elemental beast counterparts of Sentrance mostly use their own elemental energy. like an earth elemental beast would only use earth skills like rock spikes, shield walls of earth things like that. or a flame elemental would use fireballs and things liek that. A Wild sprite can use all of the elements at equal strength based on their current level of training. Dayna is comparable to say a mid level mage. At least on Sentrance anyway.
She could freeze a pool or small body of water, or rip apart and unearth rocks then alter their shape and use them as projectiles. Throw fire balls or set things on fire, and use wind as a weapon or to deflect projectiles. things like that. So all in all, a well rounded elementalist, but not super powerful in any specific element. It all uses up her elemental energy reservoir though: comparable to a typical mage's mana supply. But unlike say a fire elemental, she can tap into all forms of elemental energy. planet Earth's energies may feel slightly different than her homelands. perhaps she might not be as powerful at first unil she gets familliar with the ebb and flow of earths elemental energy forms.
so what say you all? will it work?
She could freeze a pool or small body of water, or rip apart and unearth rocks then alter their shape and use them as projectiles. Throw fire balls or set things on fire, and use wind as a weapon or to deflect projectiles. things like that. So all in all, a well rounded elementalist, but not super powerful in any specific element. It all uses up her elemental energy reservoir though: comparable to a typical mage's mana supply. But unlike say a fire elemental, she can tap into all forms of elemental energy. planet Earth's energies may feel slightly different than her homelands. perhaps she might not be as powerful at first unil she gets familliar with the ebb and flow of earths elemental energy forms.
so what say you all? will it work?
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here are a few excerpts from my early writings of the novel to show an example of how the elemental energies are used on Sentrance.
Excerpt 1: Akarious’s voice was a whisper as he replied with pause“...I merely did what my clan leader ordered”
“Ordered? You didn’t have to attack them, you could have refused” Telvaxious’s eyes burned with hatred “Enough of this”
The ground rumbled at his feet, as he broke several large stones from the cliff face behind him then altered their shapes into large spikes “Enough” he growled once more as the earthen spikes careened towards Akarious’ communication orb. They slammed into the orb and a few moments later several spikes erupted from the ground beneath the hovering orb and finally a large slab of rock crumbled down from above and completely encased the orb.
“You old fool” were the only words to escape the earthen tomb surrounding the orb before it vanished. Telvaxious spat on the ground as he turned his back on the orb and slowly made his way down the cliff towards the camp. Akarious had only opened a link to contact him, a simple feat for any of the elder elementals but none the less, there had been a feeling of some satisfaction in destroying the orb just as though he had destroyed a piece of the Fire Elemental’s clan.
Excerpt 2: The large cat like form of Silveria, the leader of the Water Elemental Clan paced back and forth in the center of the river as she curiously watched the green light fade away to nothing once more “What was that?” she muttered to herself before turning to her followers. Torrents of water swirled beneath her paws as she approached the waiting clan. “There’s a large water fall further up the river that will lead us right to a lake below the earth clan’s current encampment according to Vehltaria’s scouts,” she informed the clan raising her paw. A column of water slowly rose out of the river and soon after, a whirlwind of breeze seemed to stir out of all directions as it spiraled around the top of the water column and a pair of white orbs manifested within the small cyclone as it danced on top of Silveria’s column.
“Vehltaria, we will soon be in position to climb the water fall. What’s the status of the Earthen Clan?” She asked as she met the glance of the Air Elementals’ clan leader.
Excerpt 3 Brilliant shades of blue erupted about her as if she would explode as she thought of the day when she would actually see the great Genaceous in full manifestation and they could finally talk face to face. Amidst all of her excitement, the shallow pools around her had frozen solid in response to the release of her elemental energies without her realizing it and Genaceous chuckled once more
“See Daedra; see what you have done to the pools of water that you were gazing into earlier!”
As she turned and saw the frozen pools she squealed with delight “Wow, I really did that didn’t I?”
Excerpt 4: An eerie stillness had encompassed the earth clan encampment as the night dwindled and another moon waned behind the next thus signaling the night would soon come to an end. A host of gentle gusts of breeze had been pulsating downward for most of the night and continued to encircle the entire camp as the lullaby of the night held even the most restless minds at peace in their slumbering.
Deuce had long since fell asleep on the same ledge Telvaxious had retreated from earlier. Now the camp lay slumbering, from the youngest of clan members to the elders themselves.
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Excerpt 1: Akarious’s voice was a whisper as he replied with pause“...I merely did what my clan leader ordered”
“Ordered? You didn’t have to attack them, you could have refused” Telvaxious’s eyes burned with hatred “Enough of this”
The ground rumbled at his feet, as he broke several large stones from the cliff face behind him then altered their shapes into large spikes “Enough” he growled once more as the earthen spikes careened towards Akarious’ communication orb. They slammed into the orb and a few moments later several spikes erupted from the ground beneath the hovering orb and finally a large slab of rock crumbled down from above and completely encased the orb.
“You old fool” were the only words to escape the earthen tomb surrounding the orb before it vanished. Telvaxious spat on the ground as he turned his back on the orb and slowly made his way down the cliff towards the camp. Akarious had only opened a link to contact him, a simple feat for any of the elder elementals but none the less, there had been a feeling of some satisfaction in destroying the orb just as though he had destroyed a piece of the Fire Elemental’s clan.
Excerpt 2: The large cat like form of Silveria, the leader of the Water Elemental Clan paced back and forth in the center of the river as she curiously watched the green light fade away to nothing once more “What was that?” she muttered to herself before turning to her followers. Torrents of water swirled beneath her paws as she approached the waiting clan. “There’s a large water fall further up the river that will lead us right to a lake below the earth clan’s current encampment according to Vehltaria’s scouts,” she informed the clan raising her paw. A column of water slowly rose out of the river and soon after, a whirlwind of breeze seemed to stir out of all directions as it spiraled around the top of the water column and a pair of white orbs manifested within the small cyclone as it danced on top of Silveria’s column.
“Vehltaria, we will soon be in position to climb the water fall. What’s the status of the Earthen Clan?” She asked as she met the glance of the Air Elementals’ clan leader.
Excerpt 3 Brilliant shades of blue erupted about her as if she would explode as she thought of the day when she would actually see the great Genaceous in full manifestation and they could finally talk face to face. Amidst all of her excitement, the shallow pools around her had frozen solid in response to the release of her elemental energies without her realizing it and Genaceous chuckled once more
“See Daedra; see what you have done to the pools of water that you were gazing into earlier!”
As she turned and saw the frozen pools she squealed with delight “Wow, I really did that didn’t I?”
Excerpt 4: An eerie stillness had encompassed the earth clan encampment as the night dwindled and another moon waned behind the next thus signaling the night would soon come to an end. A host of gentle gusts of breeze had been pulsating downward for most of the night and continued to encircle the entire camp as the lullaby of the night held even the most restless minds at peace in their slumbering.
Deuce had long since fell asleep on the same ledge Telvaxious had retreated from earlier. Now the camp lay slumbering, from the youngest of clan members to the elders themselves.
Hope they help a bit
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Post coming in the next couple days, had a really busy week, but now I have a week off because of spring break!
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@Eyeris I made edits to Overlord Luna. Don't know how to nerf Regina. Anything you can tell me would be helpful.
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They are still very 'well rounded' characters. They had a lot of strengths and few to no weaknesses.
For example, the fist one can throw daggers, AND heal themselves, AND telekinesis...
The second can do magic such as throw fireballs, AND sword-fight with a huge sword and armor, AND summon a variety of minions.
A party member should be part of a whole. Try to think of a more specific niche for each character. People and characters are imperfect, but, together they balance one another out, or create drama, which is what is fun to play.
So even through you lessened the powers a bit, they are still a bit too vague and all encompassing. Try to narrow each character.
The first one, make her a knife-thrower, OR a telecenitic, OR a healer.
The second, make her a minion summoner (of one type of minion), OR a mage, OR a knight.
OR not AND.
Then you will be on the same level as everyone else I think.
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I like the character, I remember her :D
Like I had you do with Deuce, can you pick an element? As she 'levels up' she can connect with more, just like we did with Deuce.
Or if she wants to do all of them, she just needs to be able to all to a lesser extent.
Up to you. I'm excited for her to be in the game :D
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I like the character, I remember her :D
Like I had you do with Deuce, can you pick an element? As she 'levels up' she can connect with more, just like we did with Deuce.
Or if she wants to do all of them, she just needs to be able to all to a lesser extent.
Up to you. I'm excited for her to be in the game :D
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She's one of my Wild Sprites. She has to be able to use all four of them, but we'll tone her power levels down a bit to say novice level perhaps even lower since Earth's elemental energies would feel different to what she is used to. It isn't her homeland which is surrounded by pure elemental energies after all, so naturally she would not be at full strength until she develops a little more or adapts to planet Earth.
Deuce was a member of one of the Elemental clans so he only exhibited a connection to one Element.
Deuce was a member of one of the Elemental clans so he only exhibited a connection to one Element.
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Okey smokey ^_^ I'll clear her then!
How do you want to introduce her? Did trident pick her up and put her in jar? Like in Zelda?
She would be interviewed by someone in the trident, like the other two new characters are, then once they figure out she is sentient an dnot going to flip out and kill everyone... they will bring her to the meeting.
How do you want to introduce her? Did trident pick her up and put her in jar? Like in Zelda?
She would be interviewed by someone in the trident, like the other two new characters are, then once they figure out she is sentient an dnot going to flip out and kill everyone... they will bring her to the meeting.
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that sounds good to me. You want to lead her in or shall I? I don't imagine she'll be too pleased that she was stuffed into a jar lol
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I can kick that off if you like.
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I humbly await your grace's post :oP
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I'm almost done with it <3@Affili
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ALSO the last post was bit of a reveal.
If it wasn't clear in the narrative what you should now realize is that:
TRIDENT headquarters is underwater.
HQ is not one underwater building (like last time) It is a fleet of submarines, there are small mini-subs/pods that people use to travel between submarines. Air lock door is a thing. Other considerations also apply.
Any qwestions?
If it wasn't clear in the narrative what you should now realize is that:
TRIDENT headquarters is underwater.
HQ is not one underwater building (like last time) It is a fleet of submarines, there are small mini-subs/pods that people use to travel between submarines. Air lock door is a thing. Other considerations also apply.
Any qwestions?
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