@AdamantiumWolf
*waves amid the parade he hosted*
I hope it's all going as smoothly as expected.
Have enough people?
AdamantiumWolf Member
The Starwolf
STATUS: The Tiger and the Lion may appear more powerful, but the Wolf does not preform in the circus. 8 yrs ago
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- AdamantiumWolf 9 yrs ago
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The Tiger and the Lion may appear more powerful, but the Wolf does not preform in the circus.
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Wolves don't lose sleep over the opinions of sheep.
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"Let me tell you a story about you and me. I used to roam the skies alone, until you called for me. You were called Rabbit Girl, and you were born on a planet I roamed once long ago called Earth. Rabbit Girl could create as many rabbits as she wanted with the wave of her hand. She fed me when I was starving. She fixed the lonely ache in my heart. She made me feel alive once more. We ran free for many months, and I no longer felt the urge to eat the rabbits. I tolerated them, allowed them to jump onto my back and curl up in the cold rain. Rabbit Girl would use the stars in my fur to make constellations. She would say, 'Starwolf, what do you think of that one?' And what could I say? I agreed with her as the stars appeared on my flanks as well as in the sky.
"We had roamed for decades together, obeying the one rule I had asked over her. Never look me in the eye. For my eyes were all the suns in the galaxy, and would blind poor Earth-borns if they looked at me. Whenever she asked me a question, she would stare at the moon on my forehead, or the stars through my fur, or at my great big paws. I never wanted her to look at me."
"One day, I just got so exhausted that I fell into a horribly long sleep. When I awoke, Rabbit girl was gone. I ran across the Earth four times looking for her until I came across her rabbits. They led me to her, hidden away in a large building, chained to a pipe with a human skull in her hands. The man who held her captive, Early Bird, fought me for her. I ended him quickly. Drawing Rabbit Girl's mask over her face, I took her away. It was there, in her red car with the doors flung open, that I realized I loved her. For the first time ever, I looked at Rabbit Girl's eyes. She was asleep, so she didn't even notice. But I moved my foot, or my tail or made a noise, because her eyes snapped open, staring right into mine"
"We locked eyes for days, months even, but neither of us could look away. I could tell I was blinding her. I could not look away, though my heart was breaking. When it was finished, Rabbit Girl curled up in a ball and screamed bloody murder. Her rabbits watched on. I took her to the humans in hope that they could heal her. They did."
"With her sight restored, I longed to talk to her. I ran to her and nuzzled her and praised her, but she could no longer see me. The humans erased part of her magic... the part that believed in me."
"Now you take solace in the human skull you cradle like a babe. Your memory is wiped clean of me, though I follow you in desperation, hoping, pleading you'll see me again. You never will. In the dark, it is I who curls up next to you and keeps you warm. When you look up at the sky and see no stars, that's because they are within you. I left you a full moon to guide you on your path to find me again, but until then, I am hidden, watching, loving. You read books that tell you I don't exist but you just need to listen a little longer, look a little harder. I yearn for our friendship once more. For days where you told me stories. About us. About life. You are the one that makes me real, you are the one that makes me shine. And I am here. And I am waiting..."
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- Chaiara Bautista ♡
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I hope it's all going as smoothly as expected.
Have enough people?
*Pokes head in and waves casually*
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Greetings, can someone point me in the direction of the Discord?
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8 yrs ago
Forum: Off-Topic Discussion
I'm on mobile and I downloaded the app, but I'm unsure where to go from there, how do I join the guilds Discord chat?
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I knew I remembered your name.
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My issue in this particular time and case was time and circumstance, though I tend to be rather blunt and it's sadly just the way I am centered though reading your experience I will do this: [@Patient 34Delta] I apologize if you took this as a personal attack of any sort, this was not meant to be taken as something that is rude. I am willing to help you work out an acceptable sheet if that is what you desire, as will most people here.
To everyone else, let's not turn this into a city hall debate.
Thank you for taking your time to hear me out, I hope you get what is needed to see this Roleplay through to the end.
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I'm gonna be the guy Sep had the good graces not to be. Sorry to the other writers who actually participate in this.
Screw you. This is Sep's Thread, Sep's Hard Work, and Sep's time that this guy (probably accidentally) wasted. Sep is allowed to say whatever he wants (within basic guild rules) about this CS. It does NOT fit this RP, it had way too many errors, and it really wasn't good enough for advanced. Sep said all this in the nicest but also most plain and direct way he could, something I approve of. If you don't like it that way, then I'm glad you aren't joining this thread. Have a nice day.
Thank you for your input @RedLeather.
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(I should point out I was sincere with the nice aspiration bit)
I have seen people take such criticism and churn out really nice sheets before, it's a style I've always adopted I don't beat around the bush. If I don't accept someone I tell them exactly why I don't accept them how else are they supposed to correct any possible issues? I never mean any offense in such reviews, nor do I intend to be rude if people wish to view it as that then that is their own personal choice.
@Heat and @Vietmyke have both been in Roleplays where I've been entrusted to mark sheets before and can both attest that this method works, I did the same thing to @Boomlover and he absolutely loves this Roleplay, as does @LegionPothIX and I did the same thing to his initial sheet (through the Guild and Discord so it's not all evident on the thread).
I'm sad to see you not stick around but at the end of the day that is your choice.
I've roleplayed with you before Sep and I know that you're not a bad guy, but when I first joined the guild I took on an advanced roleplay, I put a lot of time into a character sheet only to have my hard work picked apart and made fun of, it ruined my first experience and I left for a good while before I decided to take another crack at the guild. When it comes down to it, it may work for some people, but it may also have the exact opposite effect, simply just being nice and pointing out the errors where they stand still helps.
Where as White may not be a popular name, it's still a name used today, since the year 2008 there have been 7 million recorded White's. So picking on his name choice seems rather silly to me. I'm only thinking about his feelings in the matter and I know I wouldn't have taken your list of errors very well. Like I said, you have a lot of solid valuable points there that aren't put in a potentially upsetting manner, but some of the others could have gone without being voiced, maybe next time a little empathy and kindness can be ushered into your CS refusal.
@Patient 43Delta first and foremost welcome to the Guild. I hope you have a pleasant stay. Before I get into the sheet may I recommend you go to the Free or Casual sections as for beginners this isn't really the place to be. Moving on.
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1) Spelling is not that hard to get checked, while we're not complete snobs in Advanced we do expect a certain level of proficiency at least at using spell check.
2) His names White, what kind of name is that? He's 460.... whaaaaat? Alien, no. It clearly states in the OP first alien contact was with the Devastators. Though I could stop here, I'm going to keep going.
3) Position 'varies upon assignment' so he's just wonderman?
4) I don't quite understand what is going on with the sandwhich.
5) His history is far too short, look at everyone elses those are the lengths that are expected in this section. The idea is we get an idea of who they are, look at how they are for people in their 20-40s even if there were a chance (and there is none) of me letting you play an alien you'd need to write roughly 15+ times as much. You also don't mention how he got involved in the Genesis Project, or how he got to Earth or... pretty much anything pivotal to this RP.
6) Supercomputers aren't actually smart, just capable of processing things quickly. Also EMR? Like electronic medical record? I guess that's a handy alien skill, looking at people and seeing their medical records. Do you see the person or a giant folder walking around?
7) Kudos, these are actual pretty reasonable weaknesses. 1 point to Hufflepuff.
8) Yes, because humanity who has had it's ass kicked by an alien race is going to let one on one of it's few hopes of survival... with camoflauge technology. That suit would have been ripped apart trying to replicate the technology.
9) So, how he not ded? Shoulda been rekt, rip.
10) D'aww. What a nice aspiration, gonna cry.
11) Well y'know. They're not trying to win, hence the Genesis Protocol and whatnot.
My Evaluation (TL;DR):
You're really not ready for Advanced, and I'd recommend going to find a RP in Casual or Free and then first and foremost reading the OP as it's incredibly important to find out what's going on. The only thing in your sheet that relates to this RP is the Devastators. Sheets should be talored specifically to the RP especially when it's something like this set in a new Universe and not based on a fandom.
For cleanliness purposes me or @Heat will contact a mod and have your posts deleted from the Character Sheet Tab, as it's for accepted Character Sheets only and I'd rather it wasn't cluttered. Thankyou for your time.
I'm not even going to try to join this, the idea was interesting and caught my eye but @Sep seems to entirely too criticizing at this point, the way you shot down another member was just plain rude and I'm actually pretty disappointed in your response, for someone who's been around for a good amount of time I feel like that could have been handled way differently.
"10) D'aww. What a nice aspiration, gonna cry."
"2) His names White, what kind of name is that?"
If you find that someone's style doesn't fit your rp, you can simply say so without tearing them apart.
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*Chops off head*
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