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Pair of Hearts
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STATUS: I sometimes crave people, but then they visit me with their families and pets and kids and grandparents and suddenly I just want to be alone so I can sleep in peace. /sleepy 7 yrs ago
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I sometimes crave people, but then they visit me with their families and pets and kids and grandparents and suddenly I just want to be alone so I can sleep in peace. /sleepy
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7 yrs ago
You probably find this peanut, but this is the FIRST post ever on RPG for me made on a computer. The keyboard is making me shed tears of happiness. I LOVE YOU ALL. /blows kisses liberally
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7 yrs ago
It's been half a year since my odyssey to find the one true community for me. There is no escaping it, I realise: RoleplayerGuild owns the throne in my heart. Thank you all for making this place great
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8 yrs ago
The "Introduce Yourself" sub-board is heartwarming.
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8 yrs ago
Upside, inside out, it's livin' la vida loca! That's what she's about, livin' la vida loca, livin' la vida locaaa! 🎵
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Sometimes, it is also beneficial to only have one piece of dialogue per paragraph, though it it can be split in two for effect.
Our immediate impression was that the paragraph was a bit too dense, that it had nowhere near enough "air".
This. This. This.
I didn't want to point this out in case we just had different styles but take @Ellri's comment. It's good for a dramatic purpose, and gives time for digestion of info before we proceed to the next 'scene'.
Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit. Nunc facilisis dui id turpis bibendum, a fringilla enim cursus. Pellentesque ut ex magna. Ut eget varius turpis, ut finibus mauris. Phasellus ultrices, arcu eu elementum euismod, erat nibh lacinia lacus, facilisis maximus arcu lectus et mi.
Fusce eros libero, facilisis in orci ac, efficitur fringilla ipsum. Integer bibendum tellus massa, et dignissim risus maximus id. Fusce laoreet, augue ut lobortis vehicula, ligula erat ullamcorper augue, nec suscipit tortor odio sed orci.
"Suspendisse iaculis metus a ipsum molestie, vel fringilla ante posuere," Sed vitae varius nunc, id volutpat justo, "Aliquam fermentum nisi et viverra luctus. Quisque ac rutrum tortor!"
Morbi elementum urna vitae est ultricies, nec condimentum mauris elementum. Maecenas eget turpis dictum, elementum risus nec, aliquet dolor.
"Ut vitae sagittis magna ..."
Upworthy:
Austere spelling.
Everyone likes posts which they don't have to decipher by jumping over typo hurdles or trippy keyboarding in order to comprehend the context. You keep doing what you do for this standard of spelling, sonny. //sheds tear of pride
Passable grammar.
The usage of 'would' is a bit off. While it's the past tense of "will [verb]", it makes the narration sound more hypothetical than absolute. It's more appropriate in use if you're allowing options for the other roleplayer to respond to, such as "If [other person] chose to open the middle door, they would be blasted with a torrent of rotten stench."
Aside from this, good job.
Aside from this, good job.
Good punctuation.
By good I mean closing dialogue in a suitable way. (A period/full-stop before a quotation mark.) It's a big thing for me - like pretty much everything else. Keep it up; we could always, always do with more of this.
Nitpick:
Vocabulary.
Not encouraging purple prose here. Just felt that using a few less-overused-but-quite-common words would invoke a more dramatic atmosphere, given the content.
Such as swapping out "scared" for 'frightened', 'terrified', or 'aghast' ... "stuck" for 'lodged', 'jammed', 'trapped' ...
In any case, the more you read and practise writing, the more easier you'll find to pick the right thesaurus that creates the mood you aim for in writing. Don't stress out.
Such as swapping out "scared" for 'frightened', 'terrified', or 'aghast' ... "stuck" for 'lodged', 'jammed', 'trapped' ...
In any case, the more you read and practise writing, the more easier you'll find to pick the right thesaurus that creates the mood you aim for in writing. Don't stress out.
Details.
You don't have to list out every stimuli or material, right down to tactile, but throwing in details for surrounding sounds (hasty footsteps), smell of air (earthy, and pungent with fear), texture of the ground (dry and solid, or loose and muddy), lighting of the environment, etc.
It helps make the read more intriguing and less mechanical, unless that is what you're aiming for.
It helps make the read more intriguing and less mechanical, unless that is what you're aiming for.
Edited for elaboration and ~colouring~ because I'm ridorkulous.
@HalfOfLancelot
Acknowledged.
Acknowledged.
@NuttsnBolts
Halt the jukebox.
What?
Idk how that came to be your fault? It's not like you were MIA for two days or more. If it's speeding between two people then they should consider 1x1, or else a nice "speedpost is valued" tag in their intcheck.
This is like being in a circle of friends at a diner, and everyone talks like machine guns while those that need a few seconds to formulate an approach = incompetent or slow or SOMETHING.
Aish.
Halt the jukebox.
What?
Idk how that came to be your fault? It's not like you were MIA for two days or more. If it's speeding between two people then they should consider 1x1, or else a nice "speedpost is valued" tag in their intcheck.
This is like being in a circle of friends at a diner, and everyone talks like machine guns while those that need a few seconds to formulate an approach = incompetent or slow or SOMETHING.
Aish.
@Cynder
Pewdiepie x Markiplier or something, right? I remember crying outrage to a friend on the phone. Sick. And those RPF (Real People Fanfics). I think my violent reaction (on the inside, compared to my expression) was due to this girl - or dude, idk - who used my selfie and my classmate's as RP face claims. Since then, using real models for photos or stories make me feel queasy.
Pewdiepie x Markiplier or something, right? I remember crying outrage to a friend on the phone. Sick. And those RPF (Real People Fanfics). I think my violent reaction (on the inside, compared to my expression) was due to this girl - or dude, idk - who used my selfie and my classmate's as RP face claims. Since then, using real models for photos or stories make me feel queasy.
@Cynder
Just sayin' your custom title and mine sound good together. That and I adore the vurrent siggy and already miss the IE-chan one.
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Ah, right. But I try to be positive and hope that those fanboys know better than to write about impossible improbable anatomy. It's one thing if it's the premise/plot core, it's another if it's your character in an otherwise VERY, VERY vanilla setting.
Seriously still trying to recover from the baby-through-penis shock here ... a cup of Starbucks on "that's how GIRLS give birth!!! Men and women are EQUAL!!!"
Just sayin' your custom title and mine sound good together. That and I adore the vurrent siggy and already miss the IE-chan one.
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Ah, right. But I try to be positive and hope that those fanboys know better than to write about impossible improbable anatomy. It's one thing if it's the premise/plot core, it's another if it's your character in an otherwise VERY, VERY vanilla setting.
Seriously still trying to recover from the baby-through-penis shock here ... a cup of Starbucks on "that's how GIRLS give birth!!! Men and women are EQUAL!!!"
@McHaggis
I didn't realise your custom title until I made that post.
A bit of a ditz I guess I am.
And ahh. I usually just use "effeminate/feminine vs butchy/masculine", but I've had people snort at me and call me a pansy for "being a scared wuss in case you offend anyone". Idk. Neurotic I am, maybe.
Even now, my anxiety about offending has switched on my Yoda talk.
For me, as an Asian (Chinese by race, not nationality), I've received really unsavoury reactions from my own family. The worst response was from my birth mother, who threatened to shove me into a mental institution. Luckily, I'm adopted and was just visiting her for a week once every few years. For my foster mom, she refuses to hear any of it (denial), and for my foster dad, he just chuckles nervously. Then again, he also chuckled nervously when I said I don't mind if my future spouse is a non-Asian. Maybe it's an Asian thing??
I remember coming out as bisexual in school around eighth grade, and was ostracised. The teacher then had a special request from the principal (sigh) to educate the kids. Basically she used words like "mutation", "Americanised", and "phase". I feel bad for queer kids in my school that may be closeted.
Strangely enough it never depressed me. Just annoyed.
As for your coming out, it always makes me happy to know there are cool parents and that they're not some mythic urban legend.
I didn't realise your custom title until I made that post.
A bit of a ditz I guess I am.And ahh. I usually just use "effeminate/feminine vs butchy/masculine", but I've had people snort at me and call me a pansy for "being a scared wuss in case you offend anyone". Idk. Neurotic I am, maybe.
Even now, my anxiety about offending has switched on my Yoda talk.
For me, as an Asian (Chinese by race, not nationality), I've received really unsavoury reactions from my own family. The worst response was from my birth mother, who threatened to shove me into a mental institution. Luckily, I'm adopted and was just visiting her for a week once every few years. For my foster mom, she refuses to hear any of it (denial), and for my foster dad, he just chuckles nervously. Then again, he also chuckled nervously when I said I don't mind if my future spouse is a non-Asian. Maybe it's an Asian thing??
I remember coming out as bisexual in school around eighth grade, and was ostracised. The teacher then had a special request from the principal (sigh) to educate the kids. Basically she used words like "mutation", "Americanised", and "phase". I feel bad for queer kids in my school that may be closeted.
Strangely enough it never depressed me. Just annoyed.
As for your coming out, it always makes me happy to know there are cool parents and that they're not some mythic urban legend.
@McHaggis
I always wonder how people can tell the gender behind the screen. It's a "You're cooler than a psychic! You're clairvoyant!" moment for me. //laughs
I don't mind if two queer folks DO like the whole daddy/boy dynamics or mistress/pet thing. If it works for them, if it harms nobody, go for it. But the heteronormative application is CELEBRATED and ENCOURAGED, which irritated me.
A lot of them eagerly approached me after I put up my intro and RP criteria thread. Always, first post itself includes: "I'm an uke xD not weak though". Or along the lines.
What. The. Fuck.
Well, I guess people should disclose their sexual preference since it may get steamy. But the "uke" I see ALWAYS get reduced to blushing, blubbering mess. The only denominator here is that they want to get penetrated.
And half of them ooze out weird lubrication from the ass.
I must have missed THAT class in Biology because I don't recall such anatomy before. One girl even said she wants to do omegaverse (fine by me, I'm liberal) and m!preg (which caused me to inhale slowly).
The baby will come out of the genital.
Send help.
Also, as a butch lady, do you get offended if or when people refer to you as a dyke? Genuine curiosity here.
In roleplaying, particularly WoW RP, I gotta laugh when I can instantly tell that it's a dude playing the female character hitting on my female character.
I always wonder how people can tell the gender behind the screen. It's a "You're cooler than a psychic! You're clairvoyant!" moment for me. //laughs
Yo - I'm a part of it (butch lady who likes both men and women) and in roleplaying I, like you, prefer to roleplay as male characters be they straight, gay, asexual, w/e. I try if I'm writing the hanky-panky erotica of the MxM variety to keep it tasteful and, you know, not fetishized. I'm not really a fan of the yaoi tag as a result – seme and uke stuff ain't my jam, you know? also fuck mpreg seriously wtf
I don't mind if two queer folks DO like the whole daddy/boy dynamics or mistress/pet thing. If it works for them, if it harms nobody, go for it. But the heteronormative application is CELEBRATED and ENCOURAGED, which irritated me.
A lot of them eagerly approached me after I put up my intro and RP criteria thread. Always, first post itself includes: "I'm an uke xD not weak though". Or along the lines.
What. The. Fuck.
Well, I guess people should disclose their sexual preference since it may get steamy. But the "uke" I see ALWAYS get reduced to blushing, blubbering mess. The only denominator here is that they want to get penetrated.
And half of them ooze out weird lubrication from the ass.
I must have missed THAT class in Biology because I don't recall such anatomy before. One girl even said she wants to do omegaverse (fine by me, I'm liberal) and m!preg (which caused me to inhale slowly).
The baby will come out of the genital.
Send help.
Also, as a butch lady, do you get offended if or when people refer to you as a dyke? Genuine curiosity here.
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