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@AmongHeroes I like Weber as a character. He incidentally fits in perfectly with the squad that you guys will be starting off with. He's military, so technically facial hair shouldn't be a thing, but 101st is special forces, so I guess that'll slide. With that in mind, did Weber do anything to distinguish himself as a pilot worthy of the special forces legion rather than any run of the mill unit? I'm not saying he has to be an utter badass, but he has to be above average as a pilot.

As far as the Bastion goes, weight and power checks out fine. I'd reduce the ammo count on the battle rifle a bit- especially since its a high caliber, long range, slow firing weapon. Something in the ballpark of 100-200 rounds would be more fitting. Other then that, it looks fine.
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@vietmykeOh, that reminds, I forgot to add in ammo count/bullet size. I think I'm done spell checking, since I wrote part of it while watching a horror movie.
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@AmongHeroes I like Weber as a character. He incidentally fits in perfectly with the squad that you guys will be starting off with. He's military, so technically facial hair shouldn't be a thing, but 101st is special forces, so I guess that'll slide. With that in mind, did Weber do anything to distinguish himself as a pilot worthy of the special forces legion rather than any run of the mill unit? I'm not saying he has to be an utter badass, but he has to be above average as a pilot.

As far as the Bastion goes, weight and power checks out fine. I'd reduce the ammo count on the battle rifle a bit- especially since its a high caliber, long range, slow firing weapon. Something in the ballpark of 100-200 rounds would be more fitting. Other then that, it looks fine.


I'll tweak his history and the Bastion to reflect your suggestions. Thanks for looking it over.
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@Jedly As a rookie with no kills, you wouldn't have a callsign- callsigns aren't something you pick, its something your squadmate's pick out for you. Anyway, while a rookie wouldn't be out of place- I am a little hesitant on that because we already have a 'rookie' character, so I'm not sure how well a second one would throw into that mix. Likewise, he wouldn't get to 'pick' which machine he piloted, he'd be assigned to something he'd qualified in during training, like a sparrow or sentry, and then upgrade to something the squadron has, typically something mass produced as opposed to a custom - especially a one(technically two) of a kind machine.

Speaking of Zeitgeist, what do you mean Erwin requested it to be commissioned? These machines cost in the millions, where does one get the money to request a specific machine? and if it were the military that Erwin requested from, why would they listen to one of their hundreds of rookies and purchase them a high performance/high cost unit? A machine like that is just not something one would give to a rookie.

As far as the actual Zeitgeist itself goes, everything makes sense, the SMG needs a caliber sizing/ammunition count, because while I won't be forcing you to keep track of every shell expended, if battles become long and drawn out, and your character is very liberal with his trigger finger, it is possible that he runs out of ammo.

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@vietmykeLots of fair points, I'll removed his callsign right away. Sorry, my bad, was under the impression that they'd enter the 101st with a machine already. And I can understand being unsure over another rookie, though I tried to delineate Erwin's character. By commission I meant that since the two remaining models were already in storage, inventory detail would be apt to get at least one of them on the field. Though I can try to work in Erwin qualifying to operate the machine at some juncture during MAS training/after joining the squadron, though I presume that wouldn't be a no-go considering that he would only be offered a mass produced MAS. I'll try to think of ways to work in Zeitgeist, since I'd rather not scrap the whole idea. In the meantime, will edit in mag count and caliber.

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@Jedly the best way for Erwin to have the Zeitgeist is if he were A. A rich kid with a lot of money (not necessarily to buy the machine, but to pull the right strings to get it to him). or B. Not a rookie.

I'm just really not sold on the whole idea of a rookie. The character concept doesn't have to go away, I just dont want another rookie in the mix. The whole rookie magic begins to lose its shine once there's more than one. When there's one kid breaking down because she's killed her first man, that's character development. When there's two... its just a chore of taking care of the new kids.
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Sliced from my previous post: EDIT:

Actually, the idea just popped up. Perhaps during MAS training, the KRISS & Atlas entity didn't want to see its inventions go to waste, so they offered affinity tests to trainees and Erwin exhibited the highest cohesion with the MAS and its fighting style? Since his personality bears a resemblance to a mouse, which correlates to how the Zeitgeist operates, could be possible.


Well, I could go either way to be honest. Although a rich kid can easily be edited into his backstory, I'm aware another rookie doesn't really seem too good for the plot, though that's not to say he would react like the other rookie after his first skirmish, nor would he have to be babysat. But since the farm life taught him morals and to be modest, guess I'll figure out a way to part with the rookie archetype.
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@Jedly Or he could just be new and not a rookie- give him a few months of service. He'd still be newer at that point, but not a fresh off the transport/factory line rook. Maybe he qualified for the Zeitgeist then.
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@vietmykeAh, alright, thanks! Making edits now. Will be down around 2:30 EST, since it is getting late here.
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Edits made, gonna crash now. Night
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I will be accepting up to two new players, so this is not first come first served.

Heh.
I hope this isn't out of my lane, but I made a CS in case it would be possible to join. I saw this the other day and I couldn't get over the hype I had for mech stuff, so I guess it just tickled all the right fancies. Thought I might as well try, y'know?




Time to pass out now lol
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@vietmyke I got the changes finished on the CS and MAS sheets. Shall I go ahead and post in the 'Characters' section of the OOC?
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All done here as well, hope the changes check out.
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@AmongHeroes not yet, I'll be doing a last round of lookovers after work, and I believe I'm waiting on one more cs to look at.
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@AmongHeroes not yet, I'll be doing a last round of lookovers after work, and I believe I'm waiting on one more cs to look at.


Ok, can do.
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@Sen A well written character, also fitting the squad that you guys would start from. I do like the patriotism this character have, makes a lot of room for some coming tension, actually. Only gripe is with the history. She'd probably start piloting the Offiziersmesser (Which I will shorten to 'Messer' for a more colloquial term.) before the battle of Cerol- The MAS she flies is what she fought with during the Battle of Cerol.

The IC for newly accepted characters will be starting right before the end of the Battle of Cerol- you guys are just running for your lives at this point. You guys, or the pilots at least, don't know that they're meeting up with the 7th.

Huh, turns out the Sentinel is a popular frame. Nothing looks wrong with the Messer, other than its name being a bit hard to pronounce, but thats irrelevant.
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@vietmykeMade a minor alteration to the last paragraph of Erwin's record to include his involvement in the Battle of Cerol.
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A well written character, also fitting the squad that you guys would start from. I do like the patriotism this character have, makes a lot of room for some coming tension, actually. Only gripe is with the history. She'd probably start piloting the Offiziersmesser (Which I will shorten to 'Messer' for a more colloquial term.) before the battle of Cerol- The MAS she flies is what she fought with during the Battle of Cerol. The IC for newly accepted characters will be starting right before the end of the Battle of Cerol- you guys are just running for your lives at this point. You guys, or the pilots at least, don't know that they're meeting up with the 7th.
Ah, sorry. I wasn't sure on that, so I'll change that right away. Done.

Huh, turns out the Sentinel is a popular frame. Nothing looks wrong with the Messer, other than its name being a bit hard to pronounce, but that's irrelevant.
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I mean, it's a pretty good frame. As for the name: I had to, man. For the pun.
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@Vilhelm, @Sovi3t, still working on a cs?
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Oh dear. 0_0 I seem to have completely forgotten. Kind of got jackhammered with a sudden bad fever, and I don't want to hold anybody up, so I'll bow out. Perhaps next time you're looking for people, I'll try again.
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@Jedly, @Sen, @AmongHeroes, keep your eyes on your inbox for details regarding your intro to Falling Skies. I liked all three characters to the point that I couldn't justify a reason for arbitrarily leaving one out. As a result, all three of you have been accepted. Go ahead and post your sheets to the main thread's character tab.

Edit: At this point, I will also be closing this RP to further interest.
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